[3]
Well hello. The way you speak is frivolous and hard to like...
Well, hello. The way you speak is frivolous and unpleasant...

[4]
And yet, I am surprised to see that we can communicate through Japanese.
And yet, I am surprised to see that we can communicate in Japanese.

[5]
So you've taken the side of the pirates, then.....
You've taken the side of the pirates, then.....

Such haugtiness will become your downfall.
Such haughtiness will become your downfall.

[6]
If it would allow me to save the world, then don't you think it's a cheap price to pay?
If it allows me to save the world, then don't you think it's a cheap price to pay?

Well I can't be afraid of death, you see.
Well, I can't be afraid of death, you see.

I mean, the World Line that I am protecting, will likely be on the very frontmost line facing off the Greed.
I mean, the World Line that I am protecting will likely be the front in the battle against the Greed.
	[c] Even if this suggestion is not chosen, consider removing "very" in the original line, because it is redundant.

[7]
Naturally,, I've already exterminated them, but...... The issue is that I have no idea which World Line it is that they came from......
Naturally, I've already exterminated them, but...... The issue is, I have no idea which World Line they came from......

[11]
On ther other hand, something that much more trivial could sometimes turn into an opportunity as well.
On the other hand, something that much more trivial could sometimes turn into an opportunity as well.

Or geting into an argument with your family and fleeing on impulse.
Or getting into an argument with your family and fleeing on impulse.

[12]
And at times like those, albeit extremely rare...
And at times like those, though extremely rare...

[16]
Not long ago, I mentioned that world branches designate different possibilities, yes?
Not long ago, I mentioned that world branches designate different possibilities, right?

[17]
Calling them the "Greed" is an apt term.
"Greed" is an apt term for them.

[22]
It's already dead, that thing.
That thing's already dead.

A pressuring week passed,
A heavy week passed,

and we finally managed to hold a funeral for Danjou-san.
before we finally managed to hold a funeral for Danjou-san.
	[c] Seems to flow a bit better, with a slightly different meaning.