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alterations to chapter 34

Sep 6th, 2012
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  1. {there are only two parts that must be changed in chapter no. 34 (6/3 three meetings and a party), section no. 3. Just replace the entire block.}
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  3. Just outside the bureau, a meeting of a much less formal sort was taking place.
  4. "How can he stand to even be in the presence of one of those... those THINGS!" a member of the HLF said as he paced in the trailer.
  5. "Now darling, don’t be so dismissive of Dave’s brave sacrifice. After all, it will all be worth it when the pastor arrives and we can show those four-legged freaks what the HLF is truly capable of! We just need a little more time, time Dave is buying us," a female voice said from the bed.
  6. "Besides, even if that fails we still have plan B. Something none of those abominations could ever think of. Heck, I’m sure none of those traitors would think of it either," said a third, strangely familiar voice.
  7. "You’re right. They’ll never suspect the bomb. Where the hell did you get a Nuke anyway?" said the first voice.
  8. "Oh, you’d be surprised what you can find on the black market," the man said, smiling and leaning back into the shadows. “Now, prepare for the attack. Today we will reclaim the Earth, as it was our God-given right!”
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  10. {and the last section, same strategy applies.}
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  12. "Is it time?" one voice asked.
  13. "Aye, it is brother. Light the fuse and lets let those devils know that god stands with mankind," the familiar man said as he prepared a small remote, ominously labled 'primary detonation.' "Shoot the sniper, before things go boom," the man said to the HLF's own marksman.
  14. The marksman aimed, looked through the scope, turned the safety off... and fired.
  15. Terrence dropped like a lead balloon right in front of Victorious Shield.
  16. Time seemed to slow down for Victorious.
  17. [center]He saw his friend fall, a spray of red coming from him.
  18. He saw a flash of light, as the sun reflected off a rifle’s scope.
  19. He dove for cover, hitting the button for the alarm on the way down. [/center]
  20. The wails of the alarm sounded but once, before the explosions drowned out all other noise.
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  22. {basically, this turns the "familliar man" into the Pastor, fixing the plotholes we discussed before. Let me know what you think.}
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