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 Felix "Nail" Cherevko
 
 Faction: Loner
 Rank: Expert
 Reputation: Good
 
-Starting from spring of 2005, Dmitriy and a group of his friends organized raids to the Chernobyl to steal radioactive metal and construction materials. With some help of connections with military and bribes they were able to drive into the Exclusion Zone with empty truck and come back loaded with scrap and various materials.
+Beginning in the spring of 2005, Felix and a group of friends began organizing raids into the area around the CNPP to steal abandoned construction equipment and materials. With the help of bribery and connections with the local military, they were able to drive empty trucks into the Exclusion Zone and return loaded with scrap.
 
-When Second Disaster happened in 2006, his group saw new possibilities of income. But this time, they are not going to be scavangers, but will take semi-mythical artefacts from first stalkers who are searching for them in newly formed anomalies.
+After the Second Disaster in 2006, Felix's group realized a new possibility for income; instead of merely scavenging for metal, they began to rob the early stalkers for semi-mythical artefacts found in newly formed anomalies. Just like that, Felix became one of the first bandits in the Zone, and earned the name "Nail" for his exploits. Although they weren't quite as cheeky as their successors, the group amassed an enormous amount of money selling their ill-gotten artefacts in the outskirts of the Zone.
 
-This way, Nail's group has became one of the first bandit groups in the Zone. Even though they weren't as cheeky as current ones, they were getting an enormous amount of money from selling artefacts taken away from stalkers in the outskirts of the Zone.
+Unfortunately for them, success didn't last long. One day, a stalker they had ambushed told Nail about a huge stash of artefacts in exchange for safe passage. The stalker feared that if he tried to carry them all out at once, they might interact strangely. Nail let the stalker go without even taking what few artefacts he had, thinking of the vast sums of money he and his group could make if they found the stalker's stash; perhaps even enough to put the bandit life behind them.
 
-But It didn't last long. One day, another ambushed stalker told Nail about big stash of artefacts in exchange for his passage. Stalker was alone and feared that if he will take all of this artifacts at once they will react in some awry way. Nail let him go without taking away any artifacts he had on him. He thought of money every one of them would get if they sell this artifacts and how they could quit this bandit life.
+Early next morning, Nail and seven men from his group travelled far into the Zone. Thanks to rare scientific equipment they had purchased with a month's worth of earnings, the expedition was going smoothly as they managed to avoid all the anomalies in their way. But to their surprise, everything changed drastically when they arrived at the supposed stash location.
 
-In the morning of the next day, Nail and other seven men of his group moved out far into the Zone. Expedition was going pretty smooth and they managed to avoid anomalies using rare equipment they got from month of racketeering. But everything changed drastically, when they came to the supposed stash location.
+Instead of a treasure trove of artefacts, they discovered a wretched two-headed beast. Having neglected to bring any serious weaponry, it was only moments before Nail was the last one alive. Somehow, in a blind panic, he managed to escape from the creature's lair. Covered in mud, with tattered clothes and frozen terror in his eyes, he finally stumbled back to the outskirts of the Zone in the late evening. He was rescued by a passing stalker, who took him for a deranged former resident of Chernobyl.
 
-Instead of artifacts, they have met wretched beast with two heads. Group didn't have any serious weapons to stop it. After couple minutes of bloody slaughter, only Nail was alive. Without knowing how, he managed to escape from beast's lair. All in the mud, with frozen horror in his eyes and torn clothes, he reached the outskirts in the evening. He was picked up by passing stalker, who thought that he is one of the living Chernobyl's dwellers.
+Since that day, Nail never spoke a word about his former group or past actions. Rather than keeping as far from it as possible, the horror he experienced prompted him to return and study the Zone. After hearing about a strange faction of militaristic scientists known as "Clear Sky" from the stalker who saved him, Nail headed for the Marshes to join them.
 
-Nail hasn't said anything about his group or past doings. When he got out from the Zone, the horror he experienced didn't make him stay away from it, but rather prompted him to study the Zone. When he heard about strange faction of militaristic Zone scientists called "Clear Sky" from the stalker who saved him, he decided to get to the Marshes and become one of them.
+He managed to prove his fitness, and soon enough became a respectable member of the faction. He never sought out any special role in Clear Sky, but he was well regarded by all its members. When Lebedev led most of Clear Sky to the CNPP in 2011, Nail stayed behind due to a recent injury, which unexpectedly saved his life. When news about the death of Clear Sky's leadership reached the swamps, Nail chose to strike out on his own as a lone stalker.
 
-He managed to prove his fitness and soon enough he became one of respectable members of the faction. Even though he didn't get any special role in it, everyone knew him. In 2011 he wasn't able to move to the CNNP with a big chunk of faction and that has saved his life. When news about death of faction has reached him, he decided to leave it and became loner.
+Since then, he has found a place working for Sakharov as a supernumerary employee, and is considered one of the most useful. If not for him, many rare artefacts would have remained unknown to science. But still to this day, he fears that his sordid past will be uncovered, and his dreams are haunted by the shadowy beast that changed his life forever.
 
-Since then, he is working on Sakharov as one of his supernumerary employees and is considered one of the most useful. If not for him, scientists wouldn't know about large amount of rare artifacts. But to this day, he still fears that his past will be uncovered and that two-headed beast never leaves his dreams.
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