The Edge Chronicle: Lord Sicarius

Lord Sicarius
[note: all his posts are in a powder blue bold)
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[color=6ecff6][b]Name:Raven Solis

Alias: Rage

Age:22

Personality: Very sarcastic and loud mouthed. He seems to be one of the lighter and more outgoing type, but unbeknownst to others... he has an extreme dark side.

Powers:(I have two non-overpowering powers I will consider to be more of abilites)

-Keen Eye: He has the ability to see through people's clothes and flesh to see their organs. He can identify when someone is injured and where would be the weakest point in someone's body.

-Rage: When mad, Raven becomes more focused and aggressive. It speeds up his reaction time, and other's movements become slower. His fists become surrounded with a black aura and he uses this dark aura to drain energy and to deliver more powerful strikes to his foes. He also gains a brief healing factor.

Weakness: Too much light can affect Raven's vision.

Bio: Raven grew up with his biological Father and Mother, until the age of nine. His Mom then passed away, and his Father became abusive and angry at him. He developed an anger problem, and he often found himself more focused and more willing to make a move. At the age of twelve, he confronted his Father and almost killed him. He was then sent off into the military to be trained when a freak accident happened at a facility and it left him severely wounded. He became discharged and found himself all alone in the world. But he found something else. He found that he had supernatural powers. He could see through people, he could identify their weak points and exploit them at will. However, there was one thing that didn't seem new to him. He could feel his rage. He could feel it flow through him, and he could feel how focused he was. After his short career in the military, he decided to become a mercenary. A hired killer. A professional sniper. During this time he would kill and kill while earning large amounts of cash. One day when he was paid to eliminate someone he misfired and the security immediately identified his location. Angered by his own failure and the current situation, he was driven into a rage and he first discovered his other power. He used his fists with this new dark aura and made his opposition fall to their knees. He also felt rejuvenated and fresh. He figured out that every time he used this, he would heal up. The more mad he got the stronger he felt. He is neither Hero, nor Villian, but somewhere in the midde. At this point he is a neutral character.
Civilian Appearance:[img]http://data.whicdn.com/images/33367656/267823509060141502_hX8EqAz3_f_large.jpg[/img]

Suit: [img]http://img0.joyreactor.cc/pics/post/Anime-1793167.jpeg[/img]

Gear: (I would like to add this considering my character is not really a hero with powers, but rather a skilled marksman. I will list his gear. However, I will also add gear as I progress through the story since he has an armory. That way he has certain gear for certain situations. Similar to Batman. I will only list his basic weaponry here.) Two M9s, a tactical serrated knife, a AR 15, concussion grenades, frags, katanas, a sniper rifle, and a rope and hook.

Arc Ideas: My character is shaky and will eventually snap to a certain extent. He might turn on his fellow comrades and might become a villian himself.

Other: I will start in Jump City I guess, I will go about my "daily life" until I run into one of you guys.[/b][/color]
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Heterochromia. Naming him "raven" unironically. Anime picture. Powers over RAGE and DARKNESS. A punisher-esque "not a hero not a villain" who is pretty clearly a murderous psychopathic villain.

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Update: A chimpout for the ages!

Rin, Co-GM:
Okay, first of all as Krab keeps mentioning the Titans don't actually exist yet, so you'll need to remove all mention of them from your signup.

Second... You seem to be implying he'd be a part of the Titans when everything points to him being a straight-up villain. Maybe it's because I'm not a fan of Punisher-esque murderous "heroes", but... That's what he comes off as to me. Suffice to say, the Teen Titans are not going to let a guy who keeps trying to kill people stick around, and would most likely hand him over to either the authorities or psychiatric help as soon as possible. Speaking of the "Teen" part... Isn't he a bit old?

Power-wise... His "keen eye" seems more like x-ray vision so I'm not sure why you didn't just call it that, but that's just nitpicky. As for Rage... What do you mean by "drain energy"? That's a bit too vague, and will need a little elaborating.

Also, his personality is a bit too barebones for my liking. And "he has an extreme dark side" always rings warning bells for me, so... A bit of elaboration, even if I can gather a few things from the bio. And the "suit" picture only shows his head, so it gives absolutely no idea of what his suit actually looks like.

Finally, um... Is there any reason why the whole bio is in bolded blue? Is that some weird stylistic choice I just don't get? I'll admit this one is really nitpicky but it just seems a bit... Weird to me. ^^;


EDGE:
^Old habits never die I guess. In the previous forum I was a part of, it was kind of my trademark. I make all my posts with that color.

As far as the suit, I'm pretty sure you guys can imagine and create the rest for yourself. I've looked at other characters, and some of their pics cut their body's in half or shows very little of them. I personally see nothing wrong with it. I can't just simply research a picture with the same face such as this one.

As far as personality, I will not elaborate due to the fact that it would defeat the purpose of story progression. You will have to see and find out for yourself of how he will turn out to be. My character is shifty and he could end up not killing people and being a valuable asset, but he could also completely go off the deep end. As far as his overall character, yes he was intended to be the Punisher type. However I revised him so he is not affiliated with the Teen Titans. That takes care of the "Older than teen" problem as well as the "Wouldn't be accepted as a Teen Titan" problem.

Finally, "Keen Eye". X-ray vision sounds too cliche, and plus it is not unique. Thus forth, I have dubbed my abilities their own names. As far as the "drain energy", I'm pretty sure that's elaborate enough, but I'll elaborate anyways. That basically means that it will literally take the energy away from people, causing them to become thoroughly exhausted over time. They'll succumb to dehydration and dizziness more. Use your imagination as well as logic.


Vita, Player, Rin's Buttbuddy:
I'm not the GM or co-GM and I haven't actually gotten my character signed up, but I think I can help explain why these characters don't seem acceptable. They are ridiculously over-the-top dark. Seriously, what do you honestly expect to happen when, tonally(at least from what I've seen) this is supposed to not be too far off from the Teen Titans cartoon. Which had a brain in a jar and a talking Gorilla as some of the final villains. I mean, they were serious and it's been ages but I remember it being a really cool arc, but they were still a brain in a jar and a talking Gorilla.

Not "organ thief druglord who murdered his own parents for basically no reason aside from evil crazy and who imprisoning will somehow just make things worse". This isn't some super-dark, gritty, "realistic but not really" RP.

As for the "hero", he's flat-out too dark as well, and he has very poorly-defined powers that you haven't really defined after being directly asked about them. ... I'm sorry I'm going off like this when I'm not even a GM but it was really bothering me that you don't seem to get why they're not acceptable when it's pretty obvious to me as well. I'm sorry if I came off as rude or something and you don't really have to listen to me but I'm pretty sure those are the reasons you're being declined.


EDGE
[color=6ecff6][b]I'm sorry, I didn't know they allowed twelve year olds on RPG.

First off dipstick, Paul's character is a real character. Since you're obviously stupid and don't know anything about the DC universe, let me show you who black mask is:
[img]http://vignette1.wikia.nocookie.net/batman/images/a/a8/Batman_arkham_origins_black_mask01.jpg/revision/latest?cb=20130920032002[/img]

Second, my character does not have "poorly defined powers". I'm not some stupid half pubic twelve year old that lists powers like: "Turns into animals" or "Has fire powers" like Beast Boy or Firestar. My character is not OP and he is a bit more realistic than others. I'm sorry that I am not role playing with mature EXPERIENCED role players.

And over the top dark? What is this?! A PG movie? Someone needs to get out of the house.[/b][/color]


Scarifar, Pretty Reasonable
Woah Sicarius, you went WAY over the line there. There is no need to call people stupid over something like this. Plus, Vita is right, that character is rather incredibly dark, and it certainly seemed like he just killed his own parents for no reason.

Vita was trying to offer some useful criticism, and you completely overreacted by calling her names and acting like a little kid.

And Sicarius, I will not mention your Powers, but your Weaknesses... Light? That's it? I mean, come on.


EDGE, approaching Maximum Butthurt
Uh hello? My character is a normal human being. Isn't it obvious enough that he is exposed to the same injuries we all are? That should be obvious. Light is just his weakness. Being exposed to bright light could affect his vision and whatnot. USE. YOUR. BRAIN. THAT GOD GAVE YOU.

And no it's not for no reason if you have anger problems. Do you watch the news lately? Mostly people are getting arrested for violence because they were MAD!


Rin, Co-GM
Seeing how you have broken at least rules 1 and 2, I am going to have to politely ask you to leave. I also kindly ask you not to make a scene and just leave quietly.


EDGE, approaching a terminal dose of assblasted
Where in the rules that apply HERE have I went against. None.


Scarifar, Pretty Reasonable:
The part that says "Regular guild rules apply, of course". And if you followed Rin's link instead of acting like a dick about it you wouldn't be in this situation, now would you?


EDGE, MAXIMUM RUMPRAVAGE ACHIEVED
I read those rules and no I didn't act like a dick. I did nothing that violated those rules either and if you look back on everything, I didn't start anything. First off, Vita isn't even a GM. So that gives the person no right for criticism. However, since we have the freedom of speech, she was entitled to her opinion. Hence forth, I was then entitled to my own, and I have the privilege to say what I want about her response in regards to my character. How about you guys grow out of your little shells and not limit yourself to these kiddish cartoon characters.


Mahz, site admin:
"Don't be a dick" is basic forum etiquette. If you can't handle the adversity of getting a character rejected, then you need to just agree to disagree with the people in this roleplay and drop out. Start your own roleplay if you want to dictate the rules. That's the point of being a GM.


EDGE, MAXIMUM RUMPRAVAGE CONTINUES
I can handle that, and if you look at my first original responses, I made the necessary changes. However, other people besides the CO-GM got involved and that's where I got pissed. If we're talking about not being a dick than I think everyone involved has been one to some degree. No one has been understanding or cooperative regarding this situation, and yes including me.

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Scarifar, Pretty Reasonable
Other people besides the Co-GM got involved because we are here to have fun in this rp, and I highly doubt anyone here but you has been a dick. You called Vita a "12 year old" and "stupid" when all she did was offer her own opinions on the matter. She was not rude or anything, yet you verbally abused her without any provocation. Vita may not be a GM here, but that doesn't mean she can't show you what she thought was wrong and give advice on how to correct those wrongs.

Rin has asked you nicely to leave the rp, and you continued to lie about not breaking the rules. You may have made changes, but your behavior has been inexcusable. I may not be a GM either, but I think everyone else here can agree to what I am about to say.

You are banned from this rp. Leave and never show your face here again until you change your behavior.



EDGE
There was nothing wrong with my character, or Paul's. There is nothing that was "too dark" and her advice was given with ignorance and lack of knowledge of the DC Universe.

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Mahz, site admin:
If people can't get past your character, it sucks but that's just the nature of the game. You took it too far with posts like http://www.roleplayerguild.com/posts/2432695. Just stop.@Mahz

 Other than being a dick apparently, I do not see any other violation of rules. First off, even if I may have phrased myself unnecessarily, I did refrain from further use of crude or inappropriate language. However, I posted this because the people on this are lacking knowledge in the RP's own universe to which it is based upon. Some have judged improperly while not having their own information straight. As an Admin I believe correction should be applied to both sides of the situation. Instead of just assessing one angle.
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EDGE:

Note to everyone: Before making an RP make sure you know and have all your information straight concerning what your RP is built around. If you want to have limitations as to how your characters should be formed, then do so in the original post. If anyone has a problem with certain graphic or morbid character then set an age limit.


Clanjos, fa/tg/uy
I am 23 years old. I was born of rape. I have read portions of the FATAL core rulebook. A man has been killed in front of my eyes. I think your character is needlessly dark and poorly written.


EDGE:
The Punisher, Moon Knight, Deathstroke, all on my level.


Clanjos, fa/tg/uy
Don't oversell yourself, kid. The writing for those characters is miles above a psychotic manchild with the powers of RAGE and DARKNESS. 9.5 DARK AS MY SOULS/10 blood-stained razorblades.