my notes for how to rob a starship

EMAIL REVISIONS TO JIM
first (not very short) workshop and second workshop

maybe Bandit doesn't feel enough pain for killing the pilot
Bandit writing it seems like he has no remorse

good job getting info in there

genevieve: really enjoys the details with Bandit, and how quick a murder happens

show how the guilt affects him. how it parallels Bandit or goes against his comical personality?
really wants to see how this gets handled structurally

Maisha really likes the style
Structure is very good

uncommon writing style for sci-fi; really interesting and unique
ending might be kinda shaky? how much does Bandit actually regret--the ending should probably not have the "you shouldn't rob a starship" as it's cheesy and not that great

Sean likes Bandit giving nicknames
what is the purpose of the starship? who is Slayer?

could be journal-chapter-journal-chapter?
would he really be imprisoned? why not exiled?

see it go off the rails, tone changes