notes on the tundra

1: I like the editing job.  The template use is nice, with the background patterns and graphics.

2: How did the Crusade manage to miss the locals?

3: Chapter should be capitalized.

4: How is the Atuult different from a normal Librarian?  Nothing here seems out of the ordinary for a Librarian.

5: How did the Chapter rituals diverge from the Fists so much in just a few hundred years?  The Chapter isn't that old and apparently didn't see much action before Behemoth was broken by the Ultramarines.  There should be a few Fists veterans left.

6: If their Aurora Strikeforce tactic takes months to be used fully, it would be useless against Tyranids.  The Nids only take a few weeks to eat an entire world's biosphere.  They would also easily bypass or destroy anybody relying on strike-and-fade tactics from the ground thanks to their tunnelers.

7: How are the Illitkust not just Chaplains?  That appears to be their job.

8: Capitalize proper nouns like Predator and Razorback.

9: Who is supplying this Chapter?  Where are they getting all this extra ammo and these extra drop pods?

10: Do they not have a Devastator Company?  Just the ones in the Scouts?  Between the Scouts, Vanguard, and Devastators, the 10th Company is numerically waaaay too small to be recruiting to support the entire Chapter unless it's way oversized.

11: Ritualizing the consumption of enemy flesh would not play very well with the Primaris Marines, would it?

12: The bit about Sky-Born is a very nice touch, but aren't Assault Marines actually the best at close-order indoors combat?  This setup would neuter their ability to do room-clearing and the like.