1. change the intro, it's a little too abrupt. probs just rearrange the first two paras.

2. add something before "Coat"

3. nuke "I didn’t imagine it. I saw <Forrest> <Madison> <Yvonne> <Sebastián>. I saw it. I didn’t imagine it and Robin will believe me because he knows I wouldn’t lie to him."

4.
ROBIN
Was it what happened on Halloween?
Sorry about that, by the way. I didn’t think it’d get so out of hand.
You weren’t supposed to see th —


ok so for this part i know di and robin have this sort of back and forth but i'd prefer to have him ramble a little more before di interrupts

ROBIN
Gosh, look at you poor thing, you even have crutches. Halloween really put you through the ringer, huh?
((Sorry about that, by the way. I didn't expect <him/her> to be so sloppy about it. You'd figure <<after the first couple hundred years/decades>><<for someone so meticulous she'd be a little more careful>> but I guess the party got 'er/'im a little too excited. Either that or the (insert alcoholic drink) here, Ev always goes a little too generous with his pours--))
((Sorry about those four apparently butting heads the whole time by the way, I didn't actually expect all of them to go together but I guess that was a night for exceptions.
Or, well, hopefully not exceptions, it'd be good for all of them to get out more and make friends, vampirism does awful things to your social life if you're not careful and God knows that -))

DIANA
Woah, woah, woah. Wait a second.
You -knew-?

ROBIN
Well, not the play by play, but I got the gist of it.
((You know, I told them to keep it more lowkey, but --))
((You know, when I asked them to go get you help I didn't expect them to be so impolite, --)

He must be fucking joking.

5.
DIANA
I got in <Yvonne> <Forrest>’s car. They didn’t take me to the hospital like they said they were going to and to make matters worse, they let <Madi> <Seb> <Forrest> <Yvonne> in the car with us.

Probs add on:

"You must have noticed that, didn't you? Or were you too busy cleaning up the bathroom after them?

and etc.


6.


DIANA
They took me to some shady posh doctor in downtown and fixed up my ankle.

ROBIN
And?//
They took you to Bernard, right. The one smart thing they did.
Anyway, go on, what happened next?



7.

ROBIN
What happened the day after?

DIANA
Nothing more than you saw. I was going to tell you the other day if Forrest weren't there.
But I guess you already knew, huh? You know what vampires <i>do</i>, right? How could you just blindly etc. etc.