A Bitter Drink

A few grammar mistakes so far, definitely two too many right now.
POV is mostly tight enough except why would he points out his own violet eyes?
Lots of telling of characterization, but Rowan's solid
Prose isn't special, it's a bit expository at points.
Manilo's cool
Wow, Rowan's a piece of shit with the brain-washing.

Dialogue isn't very trusting, spelling out dynamics.
POV switched heads without smooth transition end of ch. 2
Cliched overhearing to incite plot. ch. 3

Clover's more world-building than characterization.
Clover's nice, naive, curious, determined, a little homesick. ch. 4

Tani Iohel = nonbinary representation, decent personality, tell the privileged shit to eat shit. ch.5
Magda too? ch. 6
Dietrich is a piece-of-shit, and a very self-justifying piece of work that didn't start that way.
Why would Dietrich notice his own dark look? POV not being tight enough, slipping into omniscient.

This light and darkness stuff feels very squeecore. ch. 7
But Rowan's consistent in being a self-centered piece-of-shit.

Dani also nonbinary by the they/them pronouns? Never mind, Dani = Tani ch. 9.

Final verdict: serviceable, fine, a little too didactic and it is not a subtle book, but having some measure of creativity with the Dahlsia.