My Rewrite of Avatar: Fire and Ash by Blair age 11

So the opening with the Eywa visitation with the dead brother could stay if that’s still to be a major character motivation, but maybe change it to a dream sequence instead. And then, near the end we start hearing a pervading electronic beeping, which eventually wakes our character from his dream only to discover that laying next to him is Spider suffocating. Oh my Eywa his mask is out of air! We have this inciting incident IMMEDIATELY. Rather than it happening later and immediately leading into the contact with the traders, we have more time for the Sullys to contemplate what to do about it while we catch up with the rest of the characters.
Not everything is peachy in the seaside village either. After 2 long assed movies about how it’s time to go to war!! We are now fully in the war. We are in the shit. The village is more of an encampment, maybe it’s been relocated to a more defensible cove. After some sort of skirmish where Spider’s mask problems endanger everyone they decide okay, we need to get him back to the human scientist camp, and we need to take him. Take out the traders because their existence raises too many questions this movie is not prepared to answer. And because we’re in a state of war, the normal routes to get back there have been cut off, so we have to take a more dangerous circuitous route through a desert land.
At some point we introduce a little bit of Navi history/mythology. So it turns out that the Navi we know were once, in some distant past, slaves to another tribe. They toiled under harsh treatment to build a monumental ancient civilization, back before the Navi had any contact with Eywa. Then, when our Navi slaves discovered Eywa, she taught them how to liberate themselves. With Her guidance, the slaves drove their masters out, and forced them into exile deep in the desert where life is harsh, and where their descendents are thought to still live to this day.
So now the Sullys are traveling through this very desert to deliver Spider to the human scientists. This is also an opportunity to explore a new Pandora ecosystem, maybe we get some alien camels and the like. Our heroes reach a point of desperation, they need water and so they foolishly deviate from their path into unknown territory in search of a legendary river. After an arduous journey they are relieved to finally reach it only–Oh no!! They are ambushed by raiders! It’s the desert tribe! In the skirmish Spider is abducted and the rest of the family is forced to retreat.
Meanwhile, Quaritch is on the hunt and rolls up on the seaside village in search of Jakesully. Through some coercion, taking an elder hostage or somesuch, he manages to get information out of them that the Sullys have gone that-a-way. Spider awakens in a village of the desert people. Unlike the Fire and Ashers, the desert people are many small, disparate settlements, nomadic etc. Give them more sympathetic characterization than the orcs that they are in F&A. They are interested in Spider because they have had next to no contact with the humans yet. They keep him in a cage but take good care of him. He tries to explain his issue with the mask but they don’t understand his language. He collapses and they take him to a mystic/medicine man. We catch up with the Sullys on their way to rescue Spider. They make it to the desert camp, there’s a short battle, and they manage to find Spider who has just undergone some ritual. His mask runs out of air, they panic, just when they think all hope is lost they take off his mask and he can breathe! And it was the power of the desert people that did it, not Kiri’s convenient magic. Maybe everything is going to work out yayyayay hahaha until OH NO Quaritch’s forces come helicoptering in. Jakesully manages to negotiate his familys escape but him and Spider are taken captive.
Now we get to the part where Jakesully and Spider are in custody earlier in the movie. Keep most of those same beats, only there’s a reason to keep Jakesully around longer rather than immediately send him to the firing squad. And instead of keeping him in a public cage, the military is keeping him hidden away out of embarrassment over what a thorn in their side he’s been, but the media is desperate to get a glimpse of him. A reporter gets a brief interview but confuses him when the questions she asks conflicts with the reality of his life and he realizes that the people have not been told an accurate story about him. Meanwhile scientists probe at Spider to figure out how he breathes and find out it has something to do with the desert Navi.
So Quaritch pays a visit to the desert tribe to figure out their secret. They say they want nothing to do with the humans and their war, and they would just as soon the humans kill all the other Navi and we get their backstory. They were indeed the slavemasters but they saw their relationship with the other Navi as a shared history in building a great ancient civilization that constructed tremendous monuments and cities that are no longer possible, and it was the jealous religion of Eywa that tore it apart. So Quaritch hatches a deal, the desert people and the humans can work together to conquer the other Navi, the desert people will return to their ancestral homelands and live as kings once again and in return they will teach the humans how to breathe Pandoran air.
Now we have the stuff with the aquatic Navi and the tulkun. The rest of the Sullys eventually return and make the case that the whales gotta go to war. We have all that drama and such from the movie worked into this part. We cut between 1. That plot thread, 2. Quaritch and the desert Navi teaming up and training, and 3. Jakesully and Spider in captivity. The humans tell Spider they don’t need to run tests on him anymore and he’s expected to assimilate back into human society which he is obviously very uncomfortable doing. Meanwhile Jakesully’s captivity has become a cause celebre in the media with a small faction of humans becoming more sympathetic to his struggle. Quaritch gears up for the tulkun hunt, now a relatively smaller engagement than the climatic battle it was before. We get Jakesullys prison break but now it’s a larger (though still fairly small) group of humans who pull it off. When things seem dire for the seasiders and the tulkun, Jakesully shows up to duel Quaritch and KILLS HIM DEAD. He shoots a damn arrow through Quaritch’s skull. But their victory is short lived as the desert Navi roll up and lay ruin to the seaside village and the survivors are forced to retreat back to Neytiris hometown.
Meanwhile Spider, still living with the humans, is the leader of an underground human resistance. They attempt a raid on the science facility attempting to figure out air breathing but it’s too late, the secret is out and the drug to make the air breathable is being distributed. Our final battle is now a siege on the last survivors in the forest village, carried out by Edie falco and the troops in unison with the desert peoples. The Navi take out a few helicopters and such but then comes a massive ground force of air breathing human soldiers. Just when they think they are overwhelmed Kiri finally pulls off her magic trick, only this time it’s not using Eywa to sic a few angry animals on the humans, NO, she turns the entire PLANET against the humans. The air itself begins to turn and becomes even more toxic than it was before and the humans all start keeling over. With their allies defeated, the desert people retreat. The military takes a massive defeat and the humans in their settlement begin to contemplate evacuation. This sets up the next movie with even greater stakes: now we have a full blown CIVIL WAR on Pandora between the two armies of Navi, and mutiny against the human forces by the resistance. AVATAR 3 THE SANDS OF BETRAYAL