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Until Death Do Us Part Chapter 204 Proofread by lorddutton -- PRPR - meterion

[028]
The order to capture Tooyama Haruka, initialized by each area's forces, was simultaneously released.
The order to capture Tooyama Haruka, given by each area's forces, was just withdrawn.


[031]
We will now enter the incubation period!
We are now entering the incubation period!

We will quietly watch for any circumstances arise starting now, and emerge only at the moment it counts!
We will watch carefully for any circumstances that may arise starting now and emerge when the moment presents itself!


[033]
This place serves as both a shelter and a home.
This places serves as a shelter and home.

In here, I permit you to freely roam as you wish.
In here, you may roam freely.

However, if you attempt to escape to any restricted area, that collar will surge with electriciy. Remember this.
However, if you attempt to escape through any restricted areas, that collar will electrocute you. Keep this in mind.
#electrocute is used specifically for death caused by shock.


[036]
Yeah. This is a little abrubt,
Thanks. This may be abrubt,

She is a unique one-of-a-kind model.
She is a unique, one-of-a-kind model.

Minimize the stress as much as possible for the inspection I've informed you about previously, and perform it with the utmost care and patience.
Minimize the stress as much as possible for the examination, and perorm it with the utmost care and patience.
(or) Perform the examination with the utmost care and patience, and try to minimize the stress of it as much as possible.


[038]
This place is Zashid-sama's harem, called the "Court".
This place is Zashid-sama's harem, the "Court".

Only family and those he can trust may enter, so rest at ease.
Only family and trusted individuals may enter, so please be at ease.

Um... And you are?
Um... and you are?

I'm his fifth wife and chief physician, Jill.
I'm the chief physician Jill, his fifth wife.
# Current wording implies she is /his/ chief physician, not one in general

...The fifth...
...His fifth...


[039]
All of the wives here, including me, plan to serve as wombs for the ova extracted from you.
All of the wives here, including me, will serve as surrogates for the eggs that will be extraced from you.
(ova can stay, I thought eggs might be a better vernacular)

If the examination deems you healthy, we will promptly use an ovulation-inducing drug and then prepare you.
If you are deemed to be healthy, we will inject you with an ovulation-inducing drug and extract the eggs.
(again, or ova, whatever suits your fancy)
# if you cut out "examination", cutting out "to be" would flow better

It doesn't hurt at all, so please pass the time peacefully.
It doesn't hurt at all, so please wait peacefully.


[041]
...So Duhana's main force has come to dispose of me, huh..?
...So Duhana's forces have come to get rid of me, huh..?
# i think dispose has a better tone for what he thinks will happen


[043]
A member of the family appearing in person must mean our father is fairly pissed off as well, hm?
For a member of the family to appear in person must mean our father is pissed off as well, hm?

I anticipated that this would happen, so I came to your rescue.
I anticipated this would happen, so I came to rescue you.

You're going to personally put me on trial so I'll be put to shame?
You're going to personally put me on trial so I'll be put to shame!
# question mark works better


[044]
To put it frankly, truth is, I've failed as well.
The truth, I have failed as well.
# very poor wording here, would have to be fixed

I've fallen into a situation where I've been driven out of office by our father.
The situation being that I've been driven out of the office by our father.
# the phrase is "out of office"


[045]
Are you going to just sit here captured, waiting for death!?
Are you going to just sit here in shackles, waiting for death?!

Or are you planning to be disposed of after waiting for the old man to pursue you!?
Or do you plan to be disposed of after waiting for our old man to purse you?!

What if you fight and advance together with me!?
Or will you join forces and fight with me?!

There are three choices to choose from!
These are your three choices!
(optional to choose from at end)


[046]
Even if I couldn't succeed, at least... I'm going to show that fiend that I was heroic!
Even if I didn't succeed... I will at least show that fiend I was heroic!

Just sever these chains. From now on, I will be under your command.
Just sever these chains, and from now on I will be under your command.

Us brothers need to stick together if we're going to reign victorious over our father.
We brothers need to stick together if we plan to reign victorious over our father.

Grade: FAIL