[00:16 - 00:32]
-"Masonry and Gravestone" typeset needs work. Part of the text clips off on the right side and another part goes off the sign on the left side. The text color is also a poor choice and should be something that contrasts with where it is placed.

[00:45 - 00:48]
>Nonoha's increasing her destructive power.
>>Should be changed to: "Nonoha is increasing her destructive power." It is usually better to avoid using contractions for 'is' when using proper nouns to avoid confusion with possessives.

[00:50 - 00:55]
>Well, I heard she saved a kid from this kindergarten from being run over last week.
>>Should be changed to: "Well, I heard she saved a kid in kindergarten from being run over last week." Using words for the sake of repetition isn't good form. The sentence barely made sense to begin with.

[06:35 - 06:39]
-The timing on this line seems off. For almost a whole second he is speaking, but no subs come on screen.

[08:16 - 08:18]
>I don't need no title or anything!
>>"I don't need a title or anything like that!" This one is pretty obvious.

[08:21 - 08:23]
>my life would be done for, over and gone for good!
>>"my life would be done for; over and gone for good!" This is what most middle schoolers would call a comma splice. The more you know!

[08:25 - 08:27]
>huh wheres kaito
>>"Huh? Where's Kaito?" Did Hadena edit this?

[09:06 - 09:09]
-Maybe it's just me, but this line seems to appear a split-second late. It was possibly done to avoid scene bleed, but might need to be looked into.

[09:48 - 09:50]
-The line "It's my superiors' orders." seems a little awkward. Was it a single superior who ordered her, or were there multiple superiors?

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