The New Adventures of Golden Guardian & Bronze Buster: The Weapon Wonder

Page 1
Panel 1:
Establishing shot of Platinum City bank. The bank is on a street corner, there are pillars all around it supporting a built in awning for shade. It’s an old building that’s been part of the city since before the roads were even paved. The panel is tall to lead the eyes down. There are three robbers exiting the bank. Two of them are armed, one of them is carrying the sack of money. Two men, one woman. One man has a fivehead (receding hairline/widow’s peak) and is muscular and short, barrel chested. The other man is tall and skinny with a big lock of hair on the top of his head, he’s carrying the money with an awkward stride to his step. The woman looks rough and tumble, she’s slightly muscular and just as thuggish as the other two despite the longer hair. It’s those three thugs that were designed a while ago.
Narration at the top of the panel: “Platinum City Bank...”

The panel leads the eyes down, the robbers might not be too detailed in it.

Panel 2:
They're outside their getaway car, something like a dodge caravan with a wood finish. The windshield is cracked and the paint is peeling, it’s seen better days. The short barrel chested one is opening the door for the guy carrying the bag of money.
Narration: “Is being robbed!”
Miney, the woman thug, is waving her gun, gesturing for the lanky man to hurry up: "Move! Let's go! Let's go!"
Meeny: "Hurry up!"
Moe: "It's heavy!"

Panel 3:
As the door opens we see Bronze Buster is sitting in the diver's seat just chilling, her feet kicked up on the steering wheel and a throwing star between each of her fingers on her right hand. Her left hand is tipping her shades up.
BB: “’bout time you guys got here.”

Panel 4:
The angle is from the side, we’re seeing part of the car from the front. The crook holding the bag of money is holding it up to protect his face as a barrage of ninja stars are flying out of the open car door into the sack of money. The force of the storm of stars causes him to stumble backwards. The other two have leaped to the side out of the line of fire.


Page 2
Panel 1:
More of an aerial view, like we’re standing on top of the car’s hood looking down off of the side. The robber with the sack has fallen on his ass, still holding the sack in front of his face with a dozen ninja stars stuck in it (he's in shock from a near death surprise). His two cohorts are looking down at him.
Meeny: “Moe!”
Miney: “The money!”

Panel 2:
Similar to the previous panel, but now Meeny and Miney have their guns drawn on BB. Moe is peaking up from behind the money back, he’s lowered it slightly, his eyes are bulging as he’s looking up at what’s behind them. Unbeknownst to Meeny and Miney, Golden Guardian has appeared behind them, she’s steeped in shadow, tits as big or bigger than their heads, her arms are outstretched so one hand is to the outside side of each of their heads.

Panel 3:
The angle from GGu’s side, looking at the back of the crooks as she knocks Meeny and Miney’s heads together. There’s a big star behind the impact.

Panel 4:
BB hops out of the car and is thrilled that they've thwarted another crime. She’s putting a fist up into the air and leaping.
BB: "Woohoo! That was so cool!"

(We could scrap this panel, but I still want to show BB excited over the violence she just witnessed from GGu, an expression of genuine enthusiasm/joy/admiration)

Panel 5:
Meeny and Miney have collapsed on top of Moe, pinning him there under the sack of money. GGu is knelt down cuffing them. BB's playing with one of the stars in her hand. Either somehow spinning it like a basketball on her fingertip (SOMEHOW) or shuffling it between her fingers like a gambler with a playing chip/coin.
GGu: "We talked about the stars, BB. You could've killed this man with them."
BB: "Yeah, and? He's a bank robber. No mercy."

Panel 6:
GGu is reaching across the panel and plucking the star out of BB’s hand. She’s leaned over a little to do it.
GGu: "We don't kill people, young lady."

(The angle in this panel could be different, maybe more from BB’s perspective where she’s surprised by how quickly it happen?)


Page 3
Panel 1:
Audrey is in a stretched out hoodie and jogging shorts, her clothing struggles to contain her, but it’s a fight they don’t plan on loosing today. She’s wearing boxing gloves and has done up her hair in a ponytail to keep it from being a distraction. She’s hopping from foot to foot to loosen up. Behind her Sydney is wearing a looser hoodie that slacks down on top of her shorts, she’s looking down at herself and the boxing gloves she has on as if she’s comparing herself with Audrey. They’re in a mechanic garage with the tools hung up neatly on the walls and out of the way.
Narration: “At Audrey and Sydney’s home: The Gilded Page Body Shop”
Audrey: “OK, Sydney, let’s work on your aggression today. I’ll walk you through how to do this properly, step-by-step.”

Panel 2:
Audrey is throwing a punch. The impact is immense and the punching back is rippling from the shock of it as it swings back on the chain. She isn’t even wearing the magic bracers. Sydney is in the background sitting on a stool gripping it with her gloves on it in front of her. She’s leaning back making an “Ooooo” face.
Audrey: “Let’s start with something basic, like how to throw a PUNCH.”
The speech bubble starts at the top left of the page, but then there’s a line that goes over to the right side of the page where the impact is happening with the word “PUNCH” in it.

Panel 3:
Sydney has her gloves up and Audrey is standing behind her with her hands on Sydney’s shoulders. Sydney is nodding eagerly.
Audrey: “Now remember, you lean into your punches, not away. Boxing is more than just punching, remember where your legs are.”

Panel 4:
The punching bag is torn up like a wild animal was trying to claw its way through it, sand is leaking from it, making a pile on the floor below it. Audrey is looking at the punching bag with one hand to her chin. Sydney is sheepishly looking away, hiding her gloves behind her back which are now wrapped with barbed wire.
Audrey: “Hmm. Maybe we should start with your self-control.”


Page 4
Panel 1:
Audrey and Sydney are at the Platinum City Mall. It’s a large, spacious, multi-story building. The shopping area is fully enclosed with multiple skylights and a fountain on the ground floor surrounded by plants with dual escalators flanking the zone. Audrey and Sydney are riding the escalator up to the second level. Audrey is holding a piece of paper and is looking around, she’s wearing a sundress and a wide brim hat with rounded shades. Totally inconspicuous. Sydney is wearing a ripped up jeans and a t-shirt with a band logo on it that’s too big for her, but she’s tied the slack off in a knot to the side. Sydney is lifting herself up using the moving railing looking around, scooping the scene.
Sydney: "I know there's a reason we're here. I got something new try!"

Panel 2:
Audrey is standing in front of a mall dojo with a large glass wall so you can see the training area inside. The sensei looks like a retired hippy and is sporting a beard, but he looks jovial as he's doing a motion for the kids to imitate. We can see at least two of the kids – One looks like Riley Freeman with his cornrows and another is bald, but has HUGE eyebrows.

Panel 3:
A gang of delinquents have burst from the shop a few doors down from the dojo, they're all clutching boxes while riding on skateboards, and they’re all wearing hoodies and torn jeans. Each of them has the same gang emblem on their clothes somewhere (we need to decide what it looks like, suggestions are open). Some are wearing masks, others just have their hoodies up around their heads, but they all have sparkles around their heads. The shop owner is in the doorway yelling after them.
Shop worker/owner: "Stop, thieves!"

Panel 4:
Audrey has lowered the piece of paper she was looking at. Her eyes have narrowed, she’s turned to the side to address Sydney, but there’s just an outline of where she was having already took off.
Audrey: “You ready, Sydney- Oh, she’s already gone.”

Panel 5:
BB is in the middle of the panel cracking a whip with a gleeful look on her face. The thieves are parting around her, falling off of their skateboards and eating the ground.


Page 5
Panel 1:
In the foreground, GGu is lifting one of the thieves up off of the ground by their collar, he’s still clutching the box he stole for dear life, the sole sparkle around his head looks like it was crumpled like yesterday’s newspaper. In the background another of the thieves is running into the dojo. Sensei Dave is standing in the doorway with his students behind him, mostly to keep them from going out to look at the commotion. He’s gently waving the kids back further into the dojo.
Dave, in a very chill tone: "Ok Kiddos, let’s skedaddle to the back wall, pronto… "
Mall rat theif: “Move it, old man!”

Panel 2:
Up close shot of Sensei Dave, there’s a rippling, glowing water-like aura coming off of him as he’s raised a single hand in front of himself. His expression is still perfectly calm/chill.

Panel 3:
The thief is sent stumbling away from the dojo with streaming lines showing his movement down and away from Sensei Dave who is now in like a mantis stance. He clearly just struck him, but we don’t actually see the impact. GGu is off to the side looking impressed.
GGu (thinking): “He seems like the real deal.”

Panel 4:
BB is using her whip to tie up one of the crooks, she has a foot digging into his back as leverage to tighten the binding around him.

Panel 5:
GGu is standing in front of BB who is holding the end of the whip up, expecting GGu to take it from her. BB is looking to the side and also a little shocked over what GGu is saying. The thief is still trying to reach for the stolen box, sparkles around his eyes still twinkling.
GGu: "Nice work, Bronze Buster. You really whipped em good." (need a better whip pun maybe).

Panel 6:
GGu is walking away with her back turned towards BB, BB is grinning like a mad person as she pushes a hidden button on the whip handle. She’s watching GGu’s back as she walks away and not the thief tied up being shocked by the electricity coming out of the whip. The sparkles around the thief are now burnt and blackened, crumbling to dust as he’s being shocked.


Page 6
Panel 1:
Audrey has her hands on Sydney's shoulders. Audrey is smiling, Sydney has a hand outstretched in protest. They are in front of the mall dojo Breaking Waves.
Narration: “The next day...”
Sydney: "Oh come on! This is a place for babies!"

Panel 2:
Sensei Dave is in the forefront with his hands behind his back. Audrey is extending her arm in greeting, expecting a handshake. Sydney is standing to the side, perplexed.
Dave: “Hello Martial Artist in the Making! I’m the Master of this Hallowed Hall, Sensei Dave, and thanks to the approval of your Parent /SLASH/ Guardian, I shall be teaching you the Legendary Sacred Arts of Bullshido! Isn’t that totally bodacious?”
Sydney (thinking): "What did he just say?"
Audrey: "Nice to meet you, Mr. Sensei Dave. I'm Audrey, Sydney's guardian."

Panel 3:
Dave is doing a bow and kissing Audrey's hand, Audrey has her other hand to her mouth in coy playful bashfulness. She’s humoring his antics. Sydney is rolling her eyes.
Dave: "Enchante! Have we met before? I feel I know you from the old surf scene. And please, just Sensei Dave is fine. Mr. Sensei Dave is my father."
Audrey: "Oh, do you come from a long line of Sensei Daves?"

Panel 4:
Behind Dave the kid with the cornrows just broke a board in half with his bear hands and is intensely staring in Sydney's direction. He's younger than Sydney and gesturing for her to bring it on. As if he somehow heard Sydney’s previous comment out this place being for babies.

Panel 5:
Close up of Sydney who's eyes have narrowed in excitement and her frown has turned upside-down.
Sydney: "OK. Sounds fun! When do I get to start breaking boards?”


Page 7
A full page ad for the Breaking Waves dojo. There’s a generic karate man doing a chop as a wave crashes in the direction he’s facing. The ad itself has a ripped off page on top of it with only part of the bottom half of the other ad visible. There’s a pair of long legs with people down at the feet, all holding things. Things like appliances, toys, and knickknacks. One person is holding up a box, another playing with hacky sacks, and someone lining up the not-beanie babies on a self. All of them have sparkles around their eyes. Part of the torn off upper text is still visible reading “DON’T YOU DESERVE THE BEST?”

Or make an editorial page describing BB’s arsenal. Just a cleaner version of gadgets sheet with explanations tied to each thing.


Page 8
Panel 1:
Sensei Dave is standing sage like with one arm behind his back and the other one in front of him with a finger pointing up. Sydney is looking eager in her new karate gi, with both her hands up balled into fists bouncing with anticipation.
Sydney: “So Sensei Dave, when do I get to learn those Legendary Sacred Arts you were going on about?”
Dave: "Patience Sydney-san, first you need to learn like- like-"
Sydney: "Like?"
Dave: "Like STUFF, ya know."


Panel 2:
Dave strikes several poses in rapid succession, visually it looks like he has extra arms with that mystical water aura coming off of his main body, like a Hindu statue. Each of the extra arms has a spiky speech bubble near them, but in the center Dave still looks like his chill self making the namaste symbol with his hands.
Dave: "Student’s. Training. (of) Unified. Fighting. Fundamentals. Or just stuff."
Sydney: "Cool!"
Dave: "No, you’re not ready for the advanced technique of COOL just yet, let’s start you off with the basics, maybe with something like DUDE."

Panel 3:
Dave is doing a double fisted uppercut, behind him it looks like a wave is splashing upwards like it just hit a high wall with water droplets spaying all around him. Beside Dave Sydney is trying to copy him, but the water behind her is just limply cresting without any break to it.
Dave: "Dual uppercut decking excellence!"
Sydney: "I can’t wait to use this to pulverize baddies in a fight!"

Panel 4:
Dave is back to looking relaxed and smiling with his hands back behind his back. Sydney's enthusiasm is looking a little curbed and she's looking just a little confused.
Dave: "Well, first off my duderino, “pulverize” is a no bueno word to use in this bodacious temple of a dojo, use good vibe words like “influence” or “impact”.
Sydney: "Ok, so... Are you going to teach me how to ‘influence’ baddies then?"
Dave: “The Art of Bullshido is that of patience and fierce determination, like that of a fighting bull… or a very unruly goose.”

Panel 5:
Dave is stepping to one side. He’s doing something like the Kamaro dance from Majora's Mask, but these are stances to establish solid footwork. Sydney is trying to mimic the poses Dave is making. Behind them there’s an image of a bull thrusting its head upwards.
Dave: "The bull never is the instigator, only the retaliator. So when you’re in a fight, which my little dude you should never ever start, you can use the “Bull in a Bush” Technique to defend yourself
Sydney: "Then Sensei, how can I use this technique to destr... I mean ‘impact’ my instigators?"

Panel 6:
Dave is just pretending to surf in place with Sydney still mimicking him. Behind them they are inside the blue room of a massive wave.
SD: "Well my little Moondoggy, this will be as important as riding that Tsunami in ‘76 right through the entire East Indies, to properly carry out this technique you need to..."


Page 9
Panel 1:
Dave is in front of the whole class who are all mimicking him and striking poses to get muscle memory going.

Panel 2:
Sydney is striking many poses, her water aura is barely anything compared to Dave's and her extra hands (to show motions) are still much closer to her body to indicate she has only just begun to learn the techniques.
Sydney: "Wow Sensei Dave, I’ve never thought about moving like this before... If I keep this up, will I be as good as you?"
Dave: "Yes Sydney, follow the core tenants of Bullshido, and you too can move like the gnarliest waves when put up against the wall...

Panel 3:
We begin a montage here, so most of the panels should be small. This does not happen over the course of just one day, but several. The montage can take the shape of waves cresting and bobbing maybe.
Sydney is training with the other kids doing punches in unison with them.
Narration box: “Over the course of many lessons.”

Panel 4:
Sydney eats the floor after the cornrows kid she was sparring with dodges. Dave is squatted down beside her as she rubs her face. The kid in the background looks smug about it. Dave is giving her a reassuring smile though.
Dave: “So my little Kahuna, up for some of the finest ‘zza this side of the Nail Salon?”

Panel 5:
Sydney is eating pizza with Dave and the other kids, they are all sitting on the floor around a very low table, she's kind of grumpy looking, but there’s a long line of cheese stretching from Dave’s slice of pizza making it hard to stay mad. Somebody is eating pizza with chopsticks too.

Panel 6:
Sydney breaks a board with her bare hands. The splinters are stilling hanging in the air from the break. Sydney looks ecstatic and Dave is nodding approvingly off to the side.

Panel 7:
Sydney standing in a fighting pose, bent knees and spread legs, the cornrows kid is the one eating the floor this time. The implication is she redirected his momentum to make him fall.


Page 10
Panel 1:
Sydney and the cornrows kid bow to each other, there is now mutual respect established. Audrey is in the background looking in through the entrance, she's smiling since it looks like Sydney is starting to get it. Audrey is dressed in her mechanic overalls this time.
Dave: "And that's it for today."

Panel 2:
Audrey is entering the dojo waving to Sydney who looks excited. She's kicking the air. Dave is in the background stroking his beard thinking.
Audrey: "I had some work out by the mall and thought I'd see how things were going."
SY: "Wacha! This place is hella tight! Sensei Dave dropped some killer moves!"

Panel 3:
A very small panel, it’s a close up of a mall alarm going off. Maybe Audrey turning to look at it dramatically with serious shading?

Panel 4:
Another small panel of Audrey turning back to Sydney, but she has already ninja vanished.
Audrey: "Sydney-! She's good at disappearing."

Panel 5:
A bunch of mallrats are in the middle of a heist. They’ve smashed the front display window, some of them are walking out while holding boxes. Some of them are wearing hoodies some of them are wearing trench coats. The leader has thick green tinted cyber shades on and grill teeth that spells "KING", he’s pointing in a direction for his gang to move in. There are sparkles around him, but they’re more subdued than the ones from earlier. (They’re brandishing chains and brass knuckles).
King Mallrat: "Grab it all, we ain't letting this mall off easy now."

Page 11
Panel 1:
Bronze Buster is grinding down from the mall's second story on the hard light rails her shoes emit (there should probably be some kind of explanation for them sooner than later, or at least some exposition for what they do), the rails are curved and her center of gravity is low (so hunched down for speed) She's smiling, looking confident.

Panel 2:
BB crashes shoes first into King Mallrat's face, breaking half of his visor shades and cutting him across one side of his face. He’s falling backwards as she’s kicking off of him.

Panel 3:
BB has landed and she's already doing a sweeping leg kick to trip up one of the gang members. The gang is currently in shock over the attack, so they haven’t reacted yet.

Panel 4:
BB has a different mallrat in an arm hold like she's trying to dislocate his shoulder, but the gang has their wits back about them and are surrounding her.

Panel 5:
BB gets punched in the back. There’s a big spikey pain splash behind it. She’s let go of the gang member and is falling forward, teeth clenched, one eye shut, the other bulging.

Panel 6:
Another gang member is swinging at her, but BB has put her arms up to block using her forearms. It still smarts.


Page 12
Panel 1:
BB is surrounded on all sides by the mallrat gang. She has her arms up, but we can still see one of her eyes, like a dangerous animal that’s being backed into a corner. One gang member is pointing at her while the leader has his arm up in a fist.
Gang member "Hey, that’s the runt who whipped our guys last week!"
KM: “Nice moves for a twerp. Waste her!”

Panel 2:
Top down view of BB, maybe with a fish-eyed lens effect to show the circle of enemies surrounding her. She no longer looks totally confident, but she does look determined.
BB (thinking): "Crap, what did Sensei Dave say for times like this?"

Panel 3:
BB dodges a punch using that weird dance move from earlier. She’s down low, bobbing like the waves.
BB (thinking): "Ride the waves and break like the rocks. Yeah, I can do this!"

Panel 4:
BB gets punched in the back again and stumbles. She has too many blind spots.

Panel 5:
BB preforms the DUDE maneuver, uppercutting a gang member in the chin.

Panel 6:
BB tanks a punch to the face. Tanks as in it doesn't send her reeling.

Panel 7:
Another gang member has grabbed her from behind, locking her arms. The rest are menacingly closing in. King mallrat might be popping a switchblade.
KM: "Now the fun can start!"


Page 13
Panel 1:
GGu has dropped down from above, one fist on the ground, she's looking up and she's pissed. (should this be more panels to show the landing and the immediate shift in tension?)

Panel 2:
GGu is standing up right and the circle of mallrats has already broken, scattering off in different directions. They've already let go of BB. KM looks absolutely terrified. The mallrats are in a total panic as they flee the scene. They drop the goods to run faster, the sparkles have all cracked in half. King Mallrat is also running, but backwards and shouting. There are bystanders watching this in the background. One is a kid with red hair, shaking his head disapprovingly with a conspicuous large square bulging from one of his sweater pickets.
Gang member: “Ah hell no.”
KM: “My beef with you ain't over shorty, not by a long shot!”

Panel 3:
GGu is still standing there, menacingly. BB is pointing at the fleeing gan, grabbing GGu’s arm and tugging.
BB: "Hey, they're getting away!"
GGu: "Bronze..."

Panel 4:
GGu has snapped back to mother hen mode and has a hand on BB's chin and another on the top of her head. She's looking at her injuries.
GGu: "That must hurt. You need to sto-"
BB: "I didn't use any weapons."

Panel 5:
GGu looks taken aback while BB is smiling even with the big bruise on her face. She has her arms up eagerly looking up to her mentor.
BB: "I still have a long way to go before I can fight bare handed like you."

Panel 6:
GGu looks like she can't decide if she should laugh or scold her ward as she runs a hand through her own hair. BB looks shocked, one hand up in shock, the other miming her holding a weapon.
GGu: "Bronze, that's not what I meant at all with this training. You can still use weapons."
BB: "Seriously?! In that case I would've started with the tonfas and gone for their throats, then I would've-"


Page 14
Panel 1:
Sydney is sitting off to the side in the dojo, she’s slumped forwards, chin resting on her hands, she looks bored or resigned. She has a big bruise on her cheek and some bandages on her face. Dave is sitting next to her giving her a lecture, or trying to.
Narration: “A few days later...”
Dave: "Life is like the ocean, Sydney, it has waves. Hanging ten down the face of them is sweet, but paddling to the top takes a lot of hard work and patience."
Sydney: "So this will pay off eventually, but I should keep a 'backup' handy."
Dave: “That’s certainly one interpretation my little Kahuna, who knows what answers you’ll find along the path of Bullshido…”


Panel 2:
Elsewhere, king mallrat looks exhausted, he’s sweating and wheezing, huffing as he looks up at his opponent, the rest of his gang are sitting on the floor around him, worn out. He has stitches on the side of his face from where BB kicked him.
Narration box: “Elsewhere...”
KM: “Man, who the hell do you think you are?”

Panel 3:
Reznor, the boy with the red hair from the background earlier is standing in the middle of the room surrounded by the worn out gang.
Reznor: “Not a nobody like you.”

Panel 4:
King mallrat is looking up, with his fists on the ground, he’s angry, but he can’t do shit other than talk shit.
KM: “You little punk!”
From off panel: “That’s enough, Reznor. Don’t you think it’s time you introduce mommy to your new friends?”

Panel 5:
Reznor is holding up a spiral mask he’s putting over his face revealing himself to be Sidestep and Pinprick is revealed in the shadows sitting on a large crate.
Reznor: “Yes… Mommy… Pinprick.”
Pinprick: “I think we can use them.”

To be continued...