Kamigakari Expansion 1 - Typo/Error Report

Done with Expansion 1. Here's my typo/error/mistake/suggestions report.
I went into full 'editor mode'. Sorry.
I can't give page numbers for these (obviously), but I hope this is helpful.

EXPANSION 1

> those born to unusual abilities

I'd change it to 'those born with unusual abilities'
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> ancestors have deified and worshipped the gods

How do you deify a god? It's an oxymoron, as the god's already divine. I suggest changing this phrase.
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> and also those abilities can be enhanced

'and those abilities can also be enhanced'
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> The reason being they don't wish to

'The reason being that they don't wish to'
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> many cases of pre-arranged engagements

Just write 'pre-arranged marriages'. 'Engagement' always makes me think of combat, i.e. "engaging the enemy".
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> many Heroic Spirits despite to end all Aramitama using the Promise of Ascension.

This sentence makes no sense. Did you mean to write 'desire' instead of 'despite'?
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> Inorganic material and machines in which the feelings of people dwell within.

'Material' has to be plural too (= 'materials'), to fit into the rest of the sentence. That 'within' is superfluous.
I'd change the whole sentence into: "Inorganic materials and machines which hold the feelings of people within them."
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> they seek to bring peace to the world, and happiness to the people

You can erase that comma there, it's not needed.
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> live freely, however once a supernatural incident occurs,

Turn the first comma into a semi-colon. Put a comma behind 'however'.
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> suppressing "Cursed Gods," or repeling other Godhunters

'repelling'
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> and further strength Artificial Regalia

'strengthen'
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> structure, appearance, and size of the interior of a Sanctum is as the Nushi desires

'are as the Nushi desires'
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> a beautiful, labrynthine shrine

'labyrinthine'
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> The second, is that

Place the comma behind 'is', not before.
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> Mononoke who have become Cursed Gods completely lose all judgment and reason, and all that move--even their own family--are devoured, and Innocents have their souls stolen.

This sentence makes little sense. Better check your translation. The 'all that move' part especially.
Maybe 'every living thing - even their own family - are devoured...', or 'everthing that moves...', or 'all that moves/lives'?
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> being wounded by another Cursed God, and their influence infecting their soul.

The comma is unnecessary.
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> because of the powerful spirit energy flowing through a [Sanctum] messes with their [Spirit],

'messing with their [Spirit]'
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> After, the [Areas] that [Paths] connect to the current [Area] may be moved to.

Just 'After' sounds wrong. Maybe use 'Afterwards', or 'After this'. Also, rewrite to '[Areas] that [Paths] are connecting to'.
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> all [Time Actions] that have occured during the past seven steps

'occurred'
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> the story transititions to [Episode End]

'transitions'
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> Percusive Instrument

'Percussive'
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> Dragon God Battlelust

It looks weird. Maybe divide it up into 'Battle Lust'.
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> Divine Souls are beings that are opposite of Aramitama

'that are the opposite of'
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Under 'Divine Motion'
> Apppearance Check

one 'p' too many
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> You set corruption free when defeating an Aramitama, cleaning souls in the area.

'cleaning' -> 'cleansing'
Also needs a rewrite. 'Set corruption free' sounds odd. Maybe: 'You remove corruption when defeating an Aramitama, cleansing souls in the area.
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The Heroic Spirit Racial Talents have these: « ». The Divine Soul and Dragon Lord Racial Talents don't.
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«Spiritualization»
> Apppearance Check

Again, a 'p' too many.
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Spirit Armament
> converting it into a temporary Artificial Regalia, then use it to attack.

'... Regalia and then use it to attack.'
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Extension of Self
> any Regalia in your hands is just an extension of your fist.

'... hands are just an extension of your fist.'
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Hidden Pressure Points
> Assessing the weak points your opponent's spirit crest

'... weak points of your opponent's ...'
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Invite Ruin
> Using an ultimate technique you devised yourself, you hammer your opponent

Remove the comma.
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Shortened Earth
> a hair's bredth.

'breadth'
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Soul Grip
> Rather than their bodies, you pin their soul, and break it.

I'd write it like this: "Rather than their bodies, you pin their soul ... and break it."
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Blindside Barrage
> your opponent's blindspot

Blindspot is a TV show, not a word. Divide up into 'blind spot'.

> recover from a condition shift, then unleash an attack.

Replace the comma with 'and'.
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Feat of Resilience
> By freely controlling spirit energy, you strengthen your body to become like steel.

Remove the comma.
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Hua Jin Expert
> Through proficiency in hardening, you can manifest

The comma is unnecessary.
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The Contractor Style Talents, Common Talents, and High Talents have these: « ». God Hand and Divine Talker Style Talents don't.
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Astonishing Rush
> you pass obstacles and opponents by.

'you bypass obstacles and opponents.'
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Explosive Leap
> After charging, you grasp hold of spirit energy and cause it to explode underfoot, leaping utilizing the force.

I'd change it to: '... underfoot, making a leap utilizing the force.
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> Power Absorbtion

'Absorption'
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Massive Size
> a +2 modifer

'modifier'
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Share the Burden
> Forcibly applying the Contractor's characteristic empathic abilities, you take on another's wounds.

Unnecessary comma.
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Harmonic Excitation
> you fold someone in etherlight, causing them to regain consciousness lost from serious wounds.

'you enfold someone in etherlight' ... 'to regain their consciousness lost...'
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Scout Expertise
> with magnificient support abilities.

'magnificent'
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Dilettante
> They often possessed specialized skills.

'possess'
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'Upperclass' should either be two words or have a hyphen.
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Cover 3
Leader
> a charismatic leader that lead people

'led people'
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Coat of Truth
> and it accels in physical defense, which is often a Magus's weak point.

???
Did you mean 'excels'?
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Ancient Armor
> Armor contempory to when a Heroic Spirit lived

'contemporary'
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Sanskrit Ring
> a special sanskrit character

'Sanskrit'. It's always capitalized.
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And done. Hope it helps.