Jati's Wager

Ailo is an angry child, but having character.
Gerib POV is interesting, there's a clear-cut voice difference.
I like Jati so far, nonbinary, but they're a typical captain in character.
Use of suffixes-as-gender are interesting.
Prose is pretty good.

Arira's neat.

Gerib's POV has the inenvious of spelling out what should be more subtle.

Don't entirely buy Ailo's willingness to save Arira.

One stray grammar mistake.
Chapter ten's info-dump seems a little intrusive (how would Ailo KNOW all this beforehand?)

Okay, maybe the prose is a little too overwritten at times. Olfactory experience.
One spelling mistake: solidier
Punctuation mistake.

Jati's interesting = mentor, idealistic, but not afraid to trickery.
Jejeto = cool, but why does it flip-flop between Jejeto and JeJeto?

Another spelling mistake: Solider
Another grammar mistake
A mistake of interior monologue, why would Ailo refer to herself as not me?

Aradus turns out to have a rather poignant end.

Another grammar mistake! She'd

Solid ideas, needed to be trimmed 100-200 pages, prose is a little too eloquent and distant for a 15-16 year old, but is still much a cut above the rest, Gerib's POV is distinct, but risks hand-holding a little too much. Too many metaphors and quite a few cases of overwriting.