Location names

58
Darill's Tomb B1

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Town Dialogs

9
Spacing before <C> is superfluous.

99
Page 2 should be "out there, and King Edgar knows it".

150
Perhaps replace "Ack!" with "Aha!"

155
Perhaps replace "harm to our people" to "harm to its people", since the subject of the sentance is Figaro itself?

182
Replace "Saber mountain range" with "Saber Mountains".

213
"Imperial troops" instead of "The Imperial Troops".

233
"This ship" instead of "The ship"

259
"Saber Mountains" should be capitalized.

289
"our numbers are starting" instead of "our membership is starting"

298
Needs parenthesis around each of the two options.

301
Page 2 should be "our ideals", not "our ideas"

385
Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options

397
Should be *mumble* *mumble*

428
Perhaps it should read "I've been waiting for ages!"

442
Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options

462
Should read "...Is this... is this MY blood...?"

473
Should read "*Shriek* Help... HELP!!"

478
Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options

509
Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options

522
*pant* *wheeze*

547
Add ellipsis before initial solo exclamation point.

705
Put parenthesis around instructions on Page 3.

763
"Fingers are broken", not "were broken".

764
Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options

768
Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options

769
Probably better to read "a Potion" instead of "more Potion".

770
Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options

772
Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options

774
Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options

809
Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options

811
Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options

821
*rant* *rant*

928
"Armor" shouldn't be capitalized.

940
"Engine Room" shouldn't be capitalized.

957
*sob* *sniffle*

978
Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.  Instead of "Stop?", perhaps use "Maybe not."

980
Should be "Figaro Castle's engine room".

1028
"westernmost", not "western most".

1066
Should read "Didn't reset the clock"...

1170
"Abduct", not "steal".

1204
Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.

1207
Page 2's "As" should not be capitalized.

1246
"Aiya", not "Aya".

1318
Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.

1400
*cough*

1479
"CARE" shouldn't be all-caps?

1506
*cough* *wheeze*

1518
Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.

1521
*cough*

1525
Midgardsormr, not MidgardSormr (no capital "S" in middle).

1531
Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.

1532
Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.

1534
Midgardsormr, not MidgardSormr (no capital "S" in middle).

1680
"They were angry".

1690
Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.

1697
Should format "Got ?????" in the same way as the other items.

1755
Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.

1765
Kupo... ... ...po!

1770
Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.

1775
Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.

1783
Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.

1788
Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.

1789
Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.

1792
Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.

1796
Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.

1825
Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.

1828
Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.

1886
Should be "Darill", not "Daryl".

1933
Should be "Old Man Strago" (capitalized)

1938
Same as 1933.

2134
Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.

2161
Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.

2162
Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.

2173
*cough* *wheeze*

2174
*hack* *cough*

2178
*hackack*

2179
*cough* *wheeze*

2182
*wheeze* *pant* *cough*

2185
*chomp* *munch* *chew*

2194
...and threw themselves (add ellipsis on Page 2)

2206
Remove "the" from "the Serpent Trench".

2208
*sob*

2247
Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.

2415
Add ellipsis at start of Page 2

2450
Darill

2451
Add ellipsis to last line.

2454
*hic*

2460
Darill

2463
DARILL

2465
Darill

2466
Darill

2468
Darill

2469
Darill

2470
Darill

2523
Remove period from end of each option.

2536
Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.

2565
"alike to her", not "like to her".

2624
Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.

2638, 2640 through 2648, 2650, 2651, and 2653
Add parentesis to options and remove space before them.

2705
Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.

2712
*cough* *wheeze*

2749
*cough* *hack*

2751
*cough* *hack*

2769
Capitalize beginning of each "For" in Page 2.

2791
Capitalize "Not then...".

2817
*sigh*

2862
*cough* *cough*

2878
*munch* *munch* *munch*
*muurp*... That was great.

2879
*munch* *munch* *munch*

2885
*bluuurp!* (no capitalization)

2943
Remove parenthesis and add space to left of options

2946
Add period at end of "Recovery spring".

3047
Darill
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Small captions

000D
Instead of "You're just my type! blush...", it should be something like "*blush*"

0022
"A Bit absorbs magic" could be rewritten as "Bits absorb magic!"

0024
Needs a <D> after the first window's text (Uwao, aooh! Gau your friend!)

0034
"Count down!" should be "Countdown!"

0049
"Power 100 times up!" could be "Power up 100x!"

0054
"My. Typhon is taciturn, [line break] but terribly powerful!" to "taciturn... [line break] ...but"

005A
"Effect" should be "Effects"

0067
"Count down!" should be "Countdown!"

0087
"Work load up 10 times!" could be "Workload up 10x!"

008B
Page 5 should read "...ponder what I should do..." since it's a continuation of Page 4's thought and not a new phrase.

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Big captions

60
Second sentence should read "You Cyan..."

62
Second sentence should read "Get more for me."

86
"Sabin" should have a colon after his name.

129
Should read "*whisper* *whisper*"

131
Does the word "DO" have to be all-caps?  It looks strange.

161
Beginning of second sentence "shiny, shiny!" should be capitalized.

171
Perhaps add an ellipsis before "that Mobliz!"

189
Should read "*whisper* *whisper*"

190
Beginning of sentence "where on thearth did you learn that?" should be capitilized

231
Should read "O gods", and not "o gods".

248
Ellipsis before "afraid of me", perhaps?

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Reg. Items:

79
"Teath Tarot" should be "Death Tarot"

184
Description should read "Casts Protect when HP is low".

225
Description should read "Guards against Back Attacks and Pincer Attacks".

226
"Preemptive Attacks" should be capitalized.

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Rare Items:

16
Should read "A stone unlike any ever seen."