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E-Sense pls

Oct 13th, 2016
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  1. e-Sense Issues
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  3. Main Page
  4. - On the main page's third "tab", "Experience Natures Artistry" should be "Experience Nature's Artistry"
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  6. About Us
  7. - "Flexibility, transparency and seamless customer service is how we have expanded to four continents." the "is" should be "are".
  8. - "All this results in a great organization with infinite experience and knowledge that ooze’s with creativity as well as personality."
  9. ooze's ---> oozes. This sentence strikes me as kinda terrible anyway (lol infinite experience) but at the very least don't use ooze's!
  10. - "We invite you to see just what gets our juices owing when we fuse art and science." I assume owing is flowing?
  11. Overall this section is kinda ick but the blatant mistakes should be fixed at least.
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  13. About Us ---> Certifications
  14. - "AIB International adheres to these standards and conduct strict audits assuring full compliance. " conduct ---> conducts
  15. - "Our regulatory and R&D work in tangent " ---> "Our regulatory department and R&D", maybe? Or "our regulator".
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  18. Flavors ---> Bakery
  19. - "We can tailor-make any flavor, extract or emulsion for a variety of bakery goods or choose from our vast repertoire."
  20. can become "...or emulsion for a variety of bakery goods; or you can choose from our vast repertoire."
  21. - "Low-carbohydrate, sugar-free and gluten free" gluten free what? Flavors? "...and gluten free flavors".
  22. - "The trade-off to healthy bakery snacks can be taste but our team has an arsenal of flavors and ingredients to help compensate or mask the off-notes." ---> I'd try to split this into two sentences, but failing that at least add a comma. "can be taste, but..."
  23. - "Butter up" doesn't need a hyphen. At the very least I have never seen it used with one and the internet seems to agree?
  24. - "From cakes to cookies, we are sacrificing our waste line by testing every product in some delightful form." waste ---> waist
  25. - "Don’t hesitate to send us your unflavored cookie dough or pastry base so that we can take a crack at it and hopefully help you find the profile you are seeking." split this into two sentences and revise probably
  26. - DOWNLOAD PDF'S ---> DOWNLOAD PDFs or DOWNLOAD PDF FILES granted I just hate 's lol
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  28. Flavors ---> BeveRAGEs
  29. "A beverage requires flavors that not only spark the pallet but also stimulate it." pallet ---> palate
  30. "Our repertoire is full of exotic, obscure, traditional and far-out beverage flavors to choose from." - wtf is this no don't do this
  31. "Developing finished beverage prototypes from the ground-up, improving on current ones, or working with an un-flavored base, is our specialty." nice three specialties
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