Henric and Alex Parts 1-4 Review

Henric and Alex Parts 1-4 Review

For being edited ERP logs, it doesn't really show. And that's a great thing. Your prose is very flowery, versatile, and dynamic, with a healthy rhythm to it. I don't know how much of it is you or your partner or the alterations and touchups you made to it, but I have to admit I'm pretty fucking jealous of how well it reads. Your sex scenes are smooth and well done, easy to fap to, and they don't get repetitive, a difficult task for many smut writers to handle, including myself.

Henric is an interesting character. He clearly has a lot of depth and I like that he's not in total control of Alex. He feels flawed and human, which is pretty impressive for erotica. I suppose it is far easier to create and flesh out a character when it is the sole focus of one of the participants in an ERP, so I won't praise you too much for him (or Alex), but I do think he is well done and that is noteworthy.

I have a soft spot for tomboys and reverse traps, especially curvy ones with slutty tendencies, so Alex hits a lot of sweet spots for me. I have to admit, however, that I prefer Henric over her, probably because he comes off as a more developed character. That is actually logical since she's young and such, but I believe that she is still a bit generic. That may be because I've read a whole series of (non pornographic) novels about basically the same character, though. So take it with a grain of salt.

I have some suspicions about where the plot is headed from here, but so far the fact that it is focused on the characters rather than events is great. Again, there is a natural advantage in that it is easy for such a thing to occur in ERP, so I can't give you full marks as a writer for it, even though it is a high level of quality.

Overall, based on what I've read so far, I'd give it a 4 out of 5. It's fucking solid. It could be a 5 based on what the rest of the parts are like. I'm actually struggling to find things wrong with it that I can point out for your own improvement. Congratulations for making me feel bad as both a critic and a writer at the same time, I guess.