Kuki 4/1

me again! uwu

[quote]She always kept her help subtle to divert suspicion, and they would just go home thinking the rumored fairy had helped them.[/quote]
This phrasing here confused me a little, since it looks like she's trying to make sure that no one thinks it's her, but everyone thinks it's "the rumored fairy" (which I interpreted as Uxie).

[quote]After wearing back her funny looking green hat, she made her way for the library’s exit.[/quote]
Not sure what "wearing back" means in this context, but also -- is this Bianca? Curious to see what she's doing here.

[quote]‘But then… how… Mew got less sick whenever I used it on her. How do you explain that?’[/quote]
oopsie I think you wanted "Kuki got less sick" here

[quote]Another half a year went by, but every new day Mew had to wait felt agonizingly slow.[/quote]
The passage of time in fic is really hard! I don't really have any foolproof advice, but this chapter's timeline is a little hard to follow. Like logically it *makes* perfect sense, but the feel of it is wrong -- the timeskip in the middle makes it strange to me, I think.

You do this really interesting thing in your chapters so far where there's basically two distinct chapters appended together. In the previous chapter, it was the lightheartedness of the play and then the grim reality of Kuki dying; in this one, it's Uxie and the library (cool setting btw) and then Kuki being reborn. For me the previous chapter worked for the same reason that this one felt strange -- in the last chapter, you really benefitted from having a sudden, dramatic change in the plot because it really felt like things got worse out of nowhere. But in this chapter, you almost *don't* want that, becaus you want to convey the feeling of things being the same for a very long time.

I also think this would be a really interesting time to dive in to Mew's, well, existence! Six months doesn't really seem like it'd be all that long for her, since she's been around since pretty much the end of time. She definitely has mixed feelings~~ about godhood vs humanity, but I feel like she wouldn't treat the passage of time the same as you or I would, since she's seen so much more of it. One of the really neat things about pokemorph fics is how they offer an avenue to, like, dig into what it means to be *human* and such -- which means that your non-human characters, and your semi-human characters, are really interesting.

Also! I like how you callback to all of the places Mew and Kuki used to play in the "come out pls" section, but it also sort of gives a shorter impression of time passing. Paradoxically, it makes the relationship feel [i]more[/i] shallow, since it gives the sense that the only things that Mew/Kuki did together are the things that we've seen onscreen. I think this moment is really well-done and personal, but I would've loved more references to games they've played/things they've done outside of what was already shown, as that would make it feel like there's a whole relationship that bloomed and died here!

I love the lore that you have here though -- the fusion of human and pokemon souls!! what happens to make us human?? Mew and Uxie definitely behave very human-like in this world, so I'm very curious to see how you'll use Kuki to explore that divide.