The Last Gifts of the Universe

Grammar mistake of lack of comma.
Prose is amateurish and rife with grammar errors.
There's inklings of a character voice.

Capitalization after a dialogue tag and action comma = grammar bad!

Slightly awkward shift from first-to-third POV. I get why it's a thing, but it's been primarily first-person.

I do like the idea of Scout being a bit of a hypocrite, given the contract and not tying it to their health care!
Having to sign their deadname while the family knows and understands, though? Realistic and cruel!
Scout's a champ, letting a cat have their oxygen, rather than let another creature die before their eyes.

Blyreena and Ovlan's story is sad and bittersweet.
Weirdly not *that* good compared to Jati's Wager, but fuck me, I cried.