Owls and a Fool part 1

from /hhg/ Helluva Hotel general #752
h ttps://boards.4chan.org/trash/thread/39162719#p39177240
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Hey. I’m in the early stages of writing the first chapter of a story about anon living with the Goetias. You’ll see slice of life, unconditional love, bonding, learning skills, and a lot more froofy shit. I’ll make sure something unexpected happens eventually.
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Prologue of Owls and a Fool
>CRASH
>Oh, wonderful
>Your parents are fighting yet again
>Its about sleeping with an imp or something, you can't tell because you're too tired
>It's basically routine, so you pretty much don't care
>You get up, looking for somewhat presentable clothes to wear
>A Verosika Mayday tank top, a black flight jacket, black loafers, and light grey jeans are gonna have to suit you today
>As you head towards the kitchen, you try to silence out the screaming from your adopted parents
>You've been living with them for as long as you can remember, being with them since you were an infant if that's correct
>The tense, thick air coils around you and fills you with dread as you think about the situation of the family
>It has always been somewhat complicated, but it seems to have gotten way worse in a matter of days
>You breathe in and study the artistic architecture surrounding you in the hallway, trying to focus on anything other than the screeching
>As you approach the kitchen, you find that Octavia, lord bless her, has already stolen the Robo's cereal
>Literally eating out of the box
>And they said you were impulsive
>You decide to grab a mug of coffee, as well as dodge any incoming valuables thrown near your head
>ultrainstinct.jpg
>You quickly greet Octavia to end the awkward pause slowly slicing through your guts like knives
>Not knowing what else to say, you place your coffee down on the table and head towards the bathroom in a hurry
>The awkwardness around you two has grown like a tumor for a while, and you can never understand why
>Forgetting breakfast for the day, you brush your teeth and comb your hair so that you don't look like a husk out of wrath
>For a moment, you look at the reflection of yourself
>Despite everything, it's still you
>As your counterpart stares back at you, you begin to ruminate on the relationship with your family
>You're worried
>And rightfully so
>"You will make things better, anon"
(1/2)
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>"You gotta stop watching your family break apart"
>As you're about to leave, you hear loud, relentless knocks bang on the bathroom door
>"Nonny! Octavia and I are going to Loo Loo Land, and I really want you to join us!"
>I, not we
>You can already predict Octavia's feelings about this
>"Alright, I'll go, just give me a minute here"
>You remember the times you had with Octavia in Loo Loo Land when you were both little
>It's oddly fuzzy, but you still smile thinking about happily walking with Octavia down the pathways of the park
>As you walk out of the bathroom, fully ready, you think about what the sudden catch could be
>"That imp crew of yours aren't going to be there, are they?"
>"What? Of course they are, nonny! I need bodyguards for our trip! Especially my little Blitzy... oh how I can't w..."
>As Stolas very openly "daydreams" about his friend, you tune him out and start walking towards the exit
>This is going to be horrid, you can already tell
>Might as well make the most of it, maybe you and Ock will get to actually do stuff and have fun this time
>You walk towards the limo in both hope and dread filling you
>This is going to be interesting
(2/2)
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Owls and a Fool Chapter I Part I
>Be Anon
>You’re currently in the limo with the IMP crew on the way to Loo Loo Land
>Stolas said it was “a day” or something, you’re out of the house so you can’t complain
>You can hear Ock (what you call Octavia) blasting “My World is Burning Down Around Me” on loop in her earbuds
>How is she not deaf
>The van pulls up to the dated, rustic park
>It looks like it will fall on top of itself at any moment
>The short male imp, whose name is apparently Moxxie, slides open the right door
>Stolas walks out with the biggest shit eating grin on his face
>You both look at each other with disapproval of the current situation
>Ock steps out first, facing forward with an expression of disgust as she holds her jacket close to her in discomfort
>You do the same
>You’ve always found theme parks unnerving despite having been here before
>Nevertheless, you push forward despite the growing anxiety
>As you enter, the smell of rusty metal and half-assed carnival food invades your nostrils
>”I- Dad- Do we have to-“
>The tall imp Blitzo interrupts her outward thoughts of hesitation
>Stolas and Blitzo immediately start flirting with each other
>”I’m literally gonna be sick”
>You crack a small grin with the jinx you two made, at least you know you’re not alone
>Moxxie pulls out all kinds of different medicines and offers them to us
>”That was figurative, old man”
>You snicker a little at her comment and walk away with her
>Moxxie’s muttering to himself about it, too bad he can’t take a joke
>Stolas calls out to you
>”Come on Nonny, duty calls”
>You immediately follow closely behind, this could be important for you
>As you walk down, you pull out your phone and turn on Glenn Miller’s Moonlight Serenade
>The chorus of the combined instruments and the walk down gives you a feeling you haven’t felt in a long time
>It gives you a feeling of being “at home”
>You can’t pinpoint it exactly
>It is nice...
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Owls and a Fool Chapter I Part II
>As you continue to listen to the choir of winds, you sigh out a breath of content
>Despite the creepy-ass animatronics and staff members, you still feel comfort
>The music reminds you of a certain overlord
>strawberrypimp.png
>You take a quick look at Blitzo, who’s currently frantically looking around him for any threats
>What a fking schizo
>You roll your eyes as you realize why he’s here
>Stolas doesn’t actually need protection, he just wanted some of that imp girth
>Again
>You’ve seen Stolas when he’s attacked someone before
>He’s one scary motherfker, he absolutely does not need any bodyguards
>You’re still trying to convince him to teach you how to petrify others
>For self-defense reasons
>Obviously
>Just as you’re about to look up, you bump into Owl daddy, and your earpods fall out resulting in the lack of music
>There’s probably some spaghetti falling out of your pockets as well
>Blitzo and Ock snicker at your clumsiness
>Stolas helps you up from your current predicament with a cackle of his own
>”Nonny, you’ve really ought to watch where you’re going my boy”
>Why must you always look like a dumbass in public?
>top10questionssciencestillcantanswer.mp4
>”Yeah, well in case you haven’t noticed, I’m kind of dumb, dad”
>He chuckles at your comment, at least someone finds something that isn’t about your retardation funny
>As they continue upward, Blitzo sends his employees to do their own thing
>Yeah, now you know for sure they aren’t bodyguarding him
>Just as you look back, Stolas is held tight by ropes and other tight objects
>As you are about to step in, Blitzo immediately bullseyes one of the imps, causing the others to flee in a panic
>You’re quite frankly impressed, Ock somehow isn’t
>Why are her standards so high
>You continue on, offering Blitzo a high five
>He gives off an egotistical smirk as he accepts it, slamming your hand
(Continues below, reply is too long)
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>Holy fk
>Ow
>It reminds you of the time when you smacked a cactus off the table as a dumb kid
>vietnam.mp4
>This just got a lot more intriguing
>Stolas pulls you and Ock close to him
>”Look! You two used to cry such tears of joy at this show!”
>Contrary to his statement, you see a mom struggle to take her child into the circus ahead of you
>You and Ock slowly face each other, letting the feeling of dread sneak up on you two as sweat forms on both of your heads
>Robo Fizz…
>”Oh no…”
End of Ch. I Part II, as always I’m looking for feedback.
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Also, here's the song if anyone is interested
h ttps://www.youtube.com/watch?v=582ok7OV618
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Good song.
Story is going well also.
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this is just the anon's and the writer friend talking about his story.
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>like a husk out of wrath
Oh, nice touch!
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Nice.
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I'm glad you two are liking it. Is there anything I should take note of? I'm kind of new to writefagging so I need tips. Admittedly, I'm a little worried I made a bad first impression.
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I'd say you got it nailed down pretty tight.
No fk-ups to point out, and any advice I could give would just instruct you on how to write like me, so it's kinda redundant.
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Apparently, I can't tell the difference between a limo and a van
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It functioned as a limo in that situation.
Btw, enjoying what I'm reading so far.
It does raise the intriguing question of why the affluent Prince Stolas wouldn't have like a limo or something posh.
He literally rode there in a shtty used van from a used car lot in shthole Imp City.
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I kind of want to finish writing chapter I of Owls and a Fool, but I'm tired and just listening to old jazz while lurking the threads. What do? Sleep or write?
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Up to you man, personally I’d sleep since a new thread pops up often. Also I’m thinking of either writing a secret Stella affair story or a Stolas best friend continuation and I’m torn between which two to make before I hit the hay. Stolas involves popcorn and laying lazily 96 style on the couch as just bros. While the Stella affair will give the bird a bit more humanity and involve cuddling and soft kissing. Which do you think is best?
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>>39187883
i think it would be better to sleep on it then try to force yourself to write something that may not be up to your own standards

>>39188155
interesting idea, redeemed sinner goes to heaven only to suffer systemic bullying and abuse from the residents of heaven due to his hell origin
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>interesting idea, redeemed sinner goes to heaven only to suffer systemic bullying and abuse from the residents of heaven due to his hell origin

sound like school to me
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>Exterminators stop attacking the hotel during cleanses
>They leave it be
>Eventually they stop attacking Hell altogether
>They just let sinners check themselves in to the increasingly successful "redemption center"
>Let them work to absolve themselves of their sins
>Let them ascend up to Heaven
>........and perforate them to kingdom come as soon as they pass the pearly gates
>Why bother winging all the way down to Hell to mutilate demons?
>The stupid Antichrist is down there feeding them a steady supply of victims
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fk, I don't know what to say to this.
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It's confirmed if exterminators break into areas where normal hellborne are at, they get killed by demons or even worse yet get into scuffles. It seems like earth born sinners are push overs compared to hellborne.
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>Striker had a angelic sniper rifle and has a angelic revolver.
Wouldn't be surprised if he killed one for those.
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Moxxie's dialog indicates that the demons are reverse engineering the permakill-power from leftover exterminator gear and making firearms with it. As far as we've been shown, the exterminators themselves exclusively use edged weapons.