notes

Original Chapter 1:
- wiiboychris
- The original intro was just like, a single line of text trying to be threatening
- Chris is described as "slightly black" and that's. weird
- This FIRMLY establishes that Chris watches anime
- Lucario likes to watch TV all night, presumably anime
- Remember the controversy surrounding the dual layered disc Brawl had
- Chris is a Turbo Moron
- The joke of the hands falling on Chris is still not funny but its done better
- Glover
- Using the number 2 in character dialog
- I like that they just call the Subspace army the "Primids"
- Crazy Hand is worse here
- This one actually establishes that Lucario is missing too, and that actually makes it better
- god they just straight up say that the job system is from final fantasy
- Oh them noting that the Subspace Army went into non-smash games is also Fun
- Not a whole lot of change, it seems like the story is going to be fairly similar... hopefully

Chapter 7:
- Guardians?? are these just like, people
- Godddddd because we're going back they're just going to keep calling them the Primids huh
- also i guess this was before chris wrote in the "tell no one" idea
- hhhhh i guess at some point in the old fic chris got lucario's powers??
- also why is the general mad about tattoos on his face???
- Samus leaping onto the deck instead of walking out is actually really cute
- Fun that this takes place before Super Metroid
- Why is samus better written than the characters in the chapters we know are written later
- Tales of Symphonia music
- devices that let you breath without air
- ENGAGE RIDLEY MOTHER FUCKER
- MORE HORRIBLE MURDER
- anyway this is still better written than other m

Chapter 8:
- don't call geemers disgusting thats rude :(
- lucario finds equipment????
- Worm On A String
- because we have gone back in time, lucario is back to being OP, but apparently is just figuring that out
- 2 lights come out of a star fox thing and then into metroid? i think thats gonna be wolf
- even though its not attributed to anyone, it seems like the plotline of ROB being a double crosser is still here
- so we're just doing chris and lucario's arc for the earthbound arc again
- oh we're doing that arc again but chris is separated from lucario this time, gotcha
- wolf