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 [Forest Village]  I Cannot Help Doing Luminis!! (Madoka Magica dj) RAW
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 ===P003===
 This is everything,
-I have yearned for...
+I ever yearned for...
 
 :  That...!
 MadoHomu
 This is it!!
 Yahhh!?
 Kyutaro-san!!
 :  That's it...!
 
 I want to
 Luminous too...
 
 ===PG004===
 
 By the way~  Mita in the B Group...
 Luminous...
 
 Luminous...
 
 Luminous...!
 
 I want to
 Luminous!!
 
 No...
 
 I can't go on offensive.  I don't know what to do..!
-I can't go on the offensive.  I don't know what to do..!
+How do I create the optimum mood?
-How will I create the right mood?
+How do I confess properly?
-Then how I confess properly?
+How can anyone do this?
-How did anyone do this?
+
 I am only Homura!
-I am just Homura!
+Even after fixing my sight,
-Even when I fixed my sight,
+I am still that frail, glasses-wearing Homura
-I am still that frail glasses-wearing Homura
+------woo!!
-------Ssh!!
+
 That's not true, Homura-chan.
 
 ===PG005===
 
 Homura:  Madoka!?
 Homura:  This form...
-Homura:  This dress...
+Homura:  You made contract with that thing!?
-Homura:  You already contracted with that thing!?
+Madoka:  Um, do I look different?
-Madoka:  Um- Do I look that different?
+
 Kyubey:  Truly incredible! I can't believe Madoka has attained the power of the gods in another timeline.
-Kyubey:  Truly incredible, I can't believe Madoka has attained the power of the gods in another timeline.
+
 Kyubey:  Homura is incredible too.  No matter the time and space, you're always an anomaly.
-Kyubey:  Homura is incredible too.  No matter what time and space, you're always an anomaly.
+
 Madoka:  Your want for "Luminous with Madoka" has become too extreme.
 Madoka:  It has resulted in an entropy imbalance in the Universe.
-Madoka:  It's already causing an imbalance of the entropy of the Universe.
+
 Kyubey:  Your want has far exceed a mere wish.  It has become the concept itself.
-Kyubey:  Your hope has far exceed a mere wish.  It became the concept itself.
+Kyubey:  Madoka chose to bears the curses and despair of all magical girls, but now she is overflowing.
-Kyubey:  Accepting all of magical girls curses and despair, Madoka has already received too much.
+Homura:  Because of my greed, I twisted the laws of the Universe...
-Homura:  Because of my mistake, I have twisted the laws of the Universe...
+
 Homura:  All I want is be together Madoka.
 Homura:  I just want to live a happy life together,.
-Homura:  If we can a happy live together, I'll be satisfied.
+
 ===PG006===
 
 Madoka:  Don't worry.  I will accept everything.
 Madoka:  I won't let your want for Luminous end in despair...
-Madoka:  I won't let your wish to Luminous end in despair...
+
 Homura:  .... A dream...?
 
 Madoka:  Homura-chan...
 Homura:  !?
 Homura:  Eh?  What?  Madoka!?  Why are you!?
 
 Madoka:  We... seem to be... stuck together and become inseparable friends.
-Madoka:  We... seem to habe... stuck together and become inseparable friends.
+
 Madoka:  If like this, Homura-chan can Luminous to her heart's content ☆
-Madoka:  Like this, Homura-chan can Luminous to her heart's content.
+
 
 
 ===PG009===
 Case 1[Going to School]
-[Going to School]
+
 Homura:  Madoka, you look tired.  Are you alright?
 Madoka:  Eh?  Em!  It's nothing, ehehe.
 Madoka:  (Ah- No more, my feet hurt, my leg's cramping!!)
-Madoka:  (Ah- No more, my legs are tired, my feet's cramping!!)
+
 Kyubey:  Allow me to explain!  Madoka is slightly shorter than Homura!
-Kyubey:  Let me explain!  Madoka is slightly shorter than Homura!
+
 Madoka:  It...It's fine!  We're almost at school already...
 Homura:  We're going to be late at this rate!
-Homura:  At this rate, we'll be late!
+
 ===PG010===
 
 Madoka:  Nea!?
 Madoka:  H-Homura-chan, is this alright?  Am I too heavy?
-Madoka:  H-Homura-chan, is this alright?  Am I heavy?
+
 Homura:  It's fine.  Madoka is light like an angel feather.
-Homura:  It's fine.  Madoka is as light as an angel feather.
+
 Madoka:  Wow, Homura-chan is so strong!
 
 Homura:  Yes.
 Homura:  I train to protecting Madoka.
-Homura:  All the training to protecting Madoka.
+
 ===PG011===
 
 :  Is that Kaname-san and Akemi-san?
 :  What's going on?  Why would they do something like that on the way to school!?
 
 :  What's this scene?  Our classmates are parting for them like Moses parting the Red Sea...  A heart-pounding act of chivalry!
-:  This scene looks akin to Moses parting the Red Sea.  All the classmates are splitting in two like water.  An attraction like a gentleman.
+:  Out in the open, without a care of who's looking, attending school in such yuri-like fashion...
-:  Out in the open, without a care of others looking, going to school in such yuri-like fashion.
+
 This is... truly,
-This is truly the
+The Yuri-Kami
-Yuri-Kami
+
 Doki-nn ☆
 
 ===PG012===
 
 Sayaka:  Seriously, what's up with you two?
-Sayaka:  Honestly, what's going on with you two?
+Sayaka:  So inseparable that your face are glued together.
-Sayaka:  Becoming so inseperable that your face are glued together.
+Sayaka:  Is this... the Luminious Phenomenon?
-Sayaka:  So this is... the Luminious phenomenon?
+
 Madoka:  It may be hard to believe, but that's how it is.
-Madoka:  It's hard to believe, but that's how it is.
+Homura:  Exactly as you said.
-Homura:  Just as you said.
+Sayaka:  Well, if miracles and magic do exist, then anything is possible.
-Sayaka:  Ah, miracle and magic do exist.  All sorts of unexplained phenomons can happen.
+
 
 Saotome:  Eh? You plan to attend class like this today?
-:  Then, you're attend class like this today?
+:  Madoka's seat
-:  Madoka's seat.
+
 Madoka:  We're inseparable.  It can't be helped.
-Madoka:  Can't be helped, we can't seperate.
+Homura:  Since we can't move our tables today due to our school's design.  I have no choice but sit with Madoka.
-Homura:  We can't move the tables together due to the school's designs.  There's no other choice but sit together with Madoka.  To be honest, this is just perfect.
+Homura:  To be honest, this is just fine.
-Madoka:  Oh, Homura-chan, stop.
+Madoka:  Oh, Homura-chan, stop it~
 Saotome:  This guy...
 
 ===PG013===
 
 Madoka:  Eh?  Homura-chan, what's wrong?
 
-Homura:  Nothing, it's nothing...
+Homura:  No.  It's nothing...
-Sayaka:  Haven't you been fidgeting for a while now?
+Sayaka:  Haven't you been fidgeting for a while?
 
 Madoka:  Homura-chan!  Don't tell me,
-Madoka:  You... Since the beginning...
+Madoka:  You... have been...
 
-Madoka:  Has been sitting half on air!!
+Madoka:  sitting on air the whole time!!
-:  This chair is designed for one person...  Several times my feet can't hang on and about to fall, but she for me.
+:  This chair was designed to seat one...  I almost fell when my legs give out a few times, but for me, she...
 
-Madoka:  Sorry, I never realized until now... Sorry... Sorry!!
+Madoka:  I never knew until now... Sorry... Sorry!!
-Homura:  It's fine, because Madoka has been struggling do to me, now is my turn.
+Homura:  It's fine. Madoka has struggled for me, so now is my turn.
 
-:  I heard about your issue.  Seems like an troublesome situation.
+:  Seems like you two are in some kind of trouble.
 :  I have an idea.
 Madoka:  Mami-san!
-:  You been listening in!?
+:  You have been listening in!?
 
-Saotome:  Good morning, everyone~~~
+Saotome:  Good morning~~~ everyone!
-Good morning, ehehe.
+Good morning! Ehehe.
 
 Saotome:  What.. is going on here?
-Madoka:  Teacher... there's a good reason...
+Madoka:  Teacher... We have a good reason...
 Homura:  It's love!
 
 Homura:  This is how we show our love!
 
-Madoka:  Lo...ve...
+Madoka:  Our... love...
-Saotome:  It can't be helped if it's love.
+Saotome:  If it's love, It can't be helped.
 Sayaka:  Ehehe!?  This is okay!?
 
-Saotome:  Myself hasn't have a lot of luck with the boys, so I am thinking girls are fine too...
+Saotome:  I didn't have much luck with men recently, so I have been thinking that a girl is fine too...
-Saotome:  No-not that, Junko... No, Kaname-san's mom, a friend like her, so I made up my mind.
+Saotome:  I mean... Junko... No, Kaname-san's mother; with a friend like that, I can make up my mind.
 
 ===P014===
 
 [Lunch Break]
 
 Thank you--for the food!
 
-Sayaka:  Wow, a bento prepared by Madoka's dad.  Today's look especially delicious ☆
+Sayaka:  Wow, Madoka's dad prepared a bento.  It looks delicious! ☆
-Mami:  That's right, you can just feel the love.
+Mami:  Doesn't it?  You can just see the love and care.
-Homura:  Madoka is so blessed.
+Homura:  Madoka is so lucky.
 Madoka:  Ehehe, today dad's specialty hamburger.
 ^ Mami-san brought a picnic mat.
 
-Sayaka:  How nice!!  Eh!! Trade you my Octupus Sausage?
+Sayaka:  How nice!!  Oh!! Trade you my Octupus Sausage?
-Madoka:  Okay ♪
+Madoka:  Okay♪
-Madoka:  Awesome ♪ That's my wife, I love you-!
+Madoka:  Awesome♪ That's my wife!  I love you-!
 Homura:  GRR
-Sayaka:  ...yaya, I get it, your wife!
+Sayaka:  ...Ya ya, I get it!  Your wife!
 Mami:  Ah...?
 
-Mami:  Akemi-san, this is your lunch?
+Mami:  Akemi-san, that's your lunch?
-Sip---..
+Sip---...
 
 Homura:  Em.  All the essential energy and nutrients.  No worries.
-Sayaka:  How tasteless~~
+Sayaka:  How bland~~
 
 Madoka:  Homura-chan, why don't I split half of my bento with you?
 Mami:  Mine too.
-I want to eat Mami-san's too-!!
+I want to eat Mami too-!!
 
 ===P015===
 
-Homura:  Is this alright?
+Homura:  Okay?
 Madoka:  Of course!
-Madoka:  Say "ah~~"
+Madoka:  Say "ah!"
-Homura:  Ah~~!
+Homura:  Ah~!
 
 Sayaka:  How is it?
 Homura:  Ah, a little to your left?
 
-Homura:  It's guod, Maroka.
+Homura:  It's guud, Maroka.
-Madoka:  Really?  That's great, don't be shy, eat more eat more!
+Madoka:  Really?  That's great, don't be shy. eat more, eat more!
 Madoka:  Mami-san made egg sandwich-
 Homura:  Gurp!?
 
-Mami:  How nice... those two looks so happy together...
+Mami:  How nice... they look so happy together...
 Madoka:  Ehehe, is it good?
-Madoka:  Try Sayaka-chan's octapus sausage too.
+Madoka:  Try Sayaka-chan's octopus sausage too.
-Madoka:  Ops, I got it on your nose.
+Madoka:  Ops, I got it in your nose.
-Homura:  Gah!  Gugugu.
+Homura:  Gah!  GUGUGU
 
 ===PG016===
 
 [Restroom]
 
 Saotome:  Now- let's review compound sentences.
 
 Saotome:  "cannot help doing"  means can't help but...
-Saotome:  "Thomas can't help but grabs onto Nancy's pale long neck,"
+Saotome:  "Thomas can't help but grab onto Nancy's pale, long neck,"
 Saotome:  Translate this sentence to English, Nakazawa!
 Nakazawa:  Yes!?
 Madoka:  Akemi-chan, what's wrong?  You seen to be sweating uncomfortably?
 Homura:  Madoka... It's... actually,
 
-Homura:  I need to go... to restroom.
+Homura:  I need to use... the restroom.
 Madoka:  Eh!?
 Madoka:  You should have said so earlier!
 
-Madoka:  Holding it in is bad for your body!  Hurry and go!
+Madoka:  Holding it in is bad for your health!  Hurry and go!
 Homura:  But...
-Madoka:  Hurry!
+Madoka:  Now!
-Homura:  Em?  Can you go to the restroom with me?
+Homura:  Eh, can you come with me?
 
-Madoka:  Of course I can.  I am the health officer after all!
+Madoka:  Of course I can!  I am the health officer!
-Homura:  Not sure about your sense of duty, but thank you...
+Homura:  Not really your call of duty, but thank you...
 
 ===PG017===
 
-Madoka:  Teacher~!  Akemi-san needs to go to the rest...  she don't feel so well, can I take her to the nurse's office?
+Madoka:  Teacher~!  Akemi-san needs to use the res..  She doesn't feel so well.  Can I take her to the nurse's office?
 Saotome:  Okay.
 Saotome:  Before that, please translate what Madoka just said to English!
-Homura:  "She cannot help going to the restroom right now."
+Homura:  "She cannot help going to the restroom right now." (She needs to use the restroom right now.)
 Saotome:  Excellent!!
 
 Madoka:  Alright!  All clear!
 
-Madoka:  Be careful, it's very narrow.  We can't walk in parallel.
+Madoka:  Be careful.  It's narrow.  We can't walk in together.
 Homura:  Oww!!
 Madoka:  Are you alright?
 
-Madoka:  Come, Homura-chan...
+Madoka:  Come on, Homura-chan...
 Homura: ...
 
-Madoka:  Ah, sorry!  My eyes are closed.
+===PG019===
 
-Madoka:  Pretend I am air.
+Madoka:  Ah, sorry!  I closed my eyes!
 Madoka:  I can't hear anything!
 Madoka:  Pretend I am not here!
 
-:  I am using my most important friend to do the most embarrasing thing.
+
 
-My most important friend, wrapped up in my most embarrasing action, yet makes it her pride.
+:  I am doing the most embarrassing thing with my most important friend.
-See nothing, hears nothing, that's fine.
+
-But if I sit on the toilet, Madoka will have to sit on air chair, let her "Feet Struggle Night" approaches.
+My most important friend, wrapped up in my most embarrassing action, yet she shines.
 See nothing, hear nothing, so it's fine.
 But if I sit on the toilet, Madoka will have nothing to sit on.  Her "Feet Dangling Night" would approach.
 Madoka:  Don't give up...
 Madok:  Eh?  Homura-chan?
 Madoka:  What's wrong?
 Madok:  Eh
-In this damp enclosed space, Madoka fallen into ehll, do I open the cages of heaven to enjoy alone?
+
 Madoka:  Can you hear me?
 In this damp, enclosed space, Madoka descend into hell.  Should I open the gate of heaven to enjoy alone?
 This...
 This... I can't forgive...
 
 Madoka:  Homura-chan?
-Homura:  Can I... turn back time?
+
 Homura:  Madoka...
 Homura:  May I... turn back time?
 
 ===PG021===
 
-Homura:  No only did I make you come with me, I even add trouble to you...
+
-Madoka:  Not at all, I should be sorry.  It must be embarrassing and annoying right...?
+
 Homura:  No only did I make you go with me, I even caused trouble for you...
 Madoka:  Not at all, I should be sorry.  It must be embarrassing and annoying...?
 
-Homura:  This time "I cannot help but Luminous,"
+
-Homura:  Is obviously my fault, yet I got your wrapped up in this... Why?
+
 Homura:  "I cannot help but Luminous,"
 Homura:  This is obviously my fault, yet I got you in this mess... Why?
-Madoka:  when you truly fall in love with someone,
+
-Madoka:  his good side, bad side, beautiful side or ugly side, you should love it all.
+
 Madoka:  When you truly fall in love with someone,
-Madoka:  Even though I still don't understand those words, but...
+Madoka:  Her good and bad, her beautiful and ugly parts, you will love them all.
 
 Madoka:  Even though I don't understand those words, but...
 
 ===PG022===
-Madoka:  Love everything about Homura-chan.
+
 Madoka:  ....but, I...
-Homura:  I also love Madoka's everything.
+Madoka:  Like everything about Homura-chan.
-Homura:  Really, really, love you!!
+
 Homura:  I like Madoka's everything too!
 Homura:  Really, really like you!!
 
 ===PG023===
 
 Homura:  We... are back to normal?
 Madoka:  Thank goodness!
-Madoka:  This is great, so great!
+
-Homura:  Madoka!
+
 Madoka:  Amazing~!  Just amazing!
-Mami:  Looks like everything resolved itself.
+Homura:  Madoka~!
-Kyubey:  Homura's excessive wish twisted love's form but it has been purified by Madoka's love...
+
-Kyubey:  Because of this, they do not need physical contact in normal life.  A forced "cannot help but Luminous" has be cured.
+Mami:  The problem has resolved itself somehow.
 Kyubey:  Madoka has purified Homura's twisted form of love...
 Kyubey:  Because of this, they do not need constant physical contact anymore.  The Luminous has been cured.
 
-Sayaka:  Exposition!  You can't say love this word, bastard!
+
 
 Sayaka:  Explain yourself!  Do you even know love?  monster!!
 Hitmoi:  Miki-san, what are you doing?
 ^ Hitomi cannot see Kyubey.
-Sayaka:  Ahah, this?  Air training!!
+
 Sayaka:  Eh?
-Madokami:  that's great, Homura-chan!
+Sayaka:  Aha, this?  Air training!!
 
 Madokami:  How nice, Homura-chan!
 
 Homura:  Ya, Madoka.
 Madoka:  Em?
 Homura:  I love you.
 
 Happy END---?
 
-Thank you for purchasing my first publication in ComiKet.
+
-With inspiration from HomuMado in the movie edition OP, I was able to push through and finish this doujin.
+
 Thank you for purchasing.  This is my first publication at ComiKet.
-Apologies for the lack of Kyouko!!
+With inspiration from the HomuMado in the movie edition OP, I pushed through and finish this doujin.
 
-If there's no love, there's no Luminous.
+Sincere apologies for the lack of Kyouko!!
 After this will be the long awaited KyouSaya doujin.
 If there's no love, there's no Luminous.
 
 2012.12.29. Forest Village  Ayukko