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-Bullet Hell Artistry #3 - Kagummi
+Bullet Hell Artistry #3 - Akemi
 For this contest I'm using a 25 point rating scale so I don't get fined.
 
 Danmaku Quality: 15/25
 
 Danmaku Quality encompasses the quality of the danmaku in your script. "Good" patterns will equal a "good" score in this category. What makes a pattern good is subjective, but the #1 factor is fun. A flashy, gorgeous pattern that isn't fun won't fare well here. Note that aesthetic factors can still factor into this - proper usage of sound effects and graphics can make an unfair pattern fair, and improper usage of those can make an otherwise-fair pattern unfair.
 
 To be more clear, an "average" pattern is a 5. You can gain or lose points and I'll probably tell you why.
 
 Individual patterns will be rated out of 10. The average of that will be taken and scaled to calculate the Danmaku Quality score.
 
 Aesthetics: 5/25
 
 This category encompasses how your entry looks (and sounds). While danmaku should absolutely come first, visual and audio elements are also a part of the gameplay experience.
 
 Final Boss-ness: 5/25
 
 5 points will be dedicated to how well the character feels transformed into a final boss. It's a judgment of how their themes translate into a more "serious" fight. Mostly subjective, but I'll try to give detail about why I rated something highly/lowly in this category.
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 Played as Reimu.
 
-Nonspell 1: It's a take on a Keine nonspell. By the time the pattern starts rotating (meaning you need to actually dodge stuff and not sit below her) the lifebar is already basically half-finished, and by focusing/unfocusing you can honestly just macrododge the whole thing. Thoroughly average, if not somewhat below average. 4.25/10.
+Nonspell 1: Pretty decent take on a Keine non. Dies kind of fast but that's acceptable. 6/10.
 
-Spell 1: Kind of boring since it's just the same simple pattern repeated. The star wiggling is weird but doesn't actually make it that much harder to dodge. 5.25/10.
+Spell 1: I think this one is pretty cool, all things considered. It gets you to dodge in interesting ways. It and the previous non feel kind of sluggish, but that's not necessarily bad. 7.25/10.
 
-Nonspell 2: This does use her unfocus/focus gimmick, but I feel like it's substantially harder than the last two patterns. Neat idea though. 5/10.
+Nonspell 2: Decent Keine Non with aimed stuff. Feels a lot like the first so I'll judge it like the first. 6/10.
 
-Spell 2: I like the idea of the stopwatches reversing time, but this spell has some issues in my opinion. First, the stopwatches are VERY difficult to see - I didn't even notice them until my second playthrough. Then, getting hit by one stopwatch makes it difficult to avoid others (assuming the intent is to have them avoidable) meaning they snowball quite a bit. Lastly, something about this spell seems to lag immensely - maybe because I triggered too many stopwatches, or some other reason. Regardless, it's a good idea that could use better execution. 3/10.
+Spell 2: Suuuuper thin warning lasers are a pain to see. You can manipulate their render widths before the hitbox is active to avoid this problem. Other than that, dealing with the lasers while dodging sluggish aimed bullets is fine. Not super interesting, but fine. 5.5/10.
 
-Nonspell 3: Pretty decent! I'd suggest always having the smaller bullets render above the larger bullets, since the larger bullets can cover them up and it's kind of annoying when that happens. 6/10.
+Nonspell 3: Slow bullets going down. I guess it's appropriate for Keine, but it's not super engaging either. 6/10.
 
-Spell 3: This spell is reasonable and I think it makes sense for Keine. Again, kind of boring since it's the same wave repeating, but it's fine. 5.75/10.
+Spell 3: This is pretty good! Thank you for including a warning at the bottom. Dodging from both sides is quite fun. 8/10.
 
-Spell 4: As far as I can tell, collecting the green stopwatch thingies stops her from speeding up the bullets. It's not really properly communicated though (and the watches are a pain to see like the red ones), but I like the idea. Maybe have a demonstration of sorts, or outright put text on the screen explaining it if it's too complicated to show. The pattern itself is fine. 5.5/10.
+Nonspell 4: This non stands out from all of the others. I guess in principle it's still Keine non plus aimed things, but it feels more FUN than the last three. 7.25/10.
 
-Spell 5: It's dodging BoWaP with extra steps, really. It's great that you used warning indicators for where you should be during each part of this attack. Initially I thought you had to circle her while dodging that BoWaP (which I think is ridiculous), but you can just chill below her and dodge it normally. Which is why I say it's BoWaP with extra steps, since that's not really that interesting. 4.75/10.
+Spell 4: A good spin on your typical circling survival spell. I feel like the difficulty is kind of high compared to previous patterns but not unreasonably so. 6.75/10.
 
-Spell 6: The balance on this one is kind of weird - in my opinion it starts out fine, then gets EASIER until the last phase which ends up just being bullet spam with no distinguishable pattern. A good attempt, but I'd say it could use some work. Try just adding an element or spicing up existing elements instead of having such dramatic changes. 3.5/10.
+Spell 5: Yay multi-phase ending spell. I think this spell is thoroughly fine. I appreciate the sword warning lasers.  7/10.
 
-Danmaku Score: 4.77/10 (scaled to 7.16/15)
+Danmaku Score: 6.64/10 (scaled to 9.96/15)
 
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-Aesthetically, I'd say this script is quite below average. The volume balance is off, the patterns aren't really pretty, and it feels like a mish-mash of art from different sources that don't really go well together. The awkward pause between regular Keine and horn Keine is weird. 1.25/5.
+Aesthetically, I'd say this script is above average. I like the art, nothing looks hideous, the meteors in that Pompeii spell are pretty cute considering you didn't really use any special graphics. You use warning lasers appropriately, sounds are fine, etc. 3.25/5.
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-I think the script's final boss-ness is below average. The patterns are simple and repetitive. The final pattern IS multiple-phases but the phases are oddly designed. 1.75/5.
+I think the script's final boss-ness is thoroughly average. Nothing is really grand or bombastic, but nothing stands out as being too wimpy for a final boss either. 2.5/5.
 
-OVERALL SCORE 7.16 + 1.25 + 1.75 = 10.17/25
+OVERALL SCORE 9.96 + 3.25 + 2.5 = 15.71/25