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-Bullet Hell Artistry #5 - Syoudre
+Bullet Hell Artistry #5 - Akemi Yume
 For this contest I'm using a 25 point rating scale because I feel like it.
 
 Danmaku Quality: 15/25
 
 Danmaku Quality encompasses the quality of the danmaku in your script. "Good" patterns will equal a "good" score in this category. What makes a pattern good is subjective, but the #1 factor is fun. A flashy, gorgeous pattern that isn't fun won't fare well here. Note that aesthetic factors can still factor into this - proper usage of sound effects and graphics can make an unfair pattern fair, and improper usage of those can make an otherwise-fair pattern unfair.
 
 To be more clear, an "average" pattern is a 5. You can gain or lose points and I'll probably tell you why.
 
 Individual patterns will be rated out of 10. The average of that will be taken and scaled to calculate the Danmaku Quality score.
 
 Aesthetics: 5/25
 
 This category encompasses how your entry looks (and sounds). While danmaku should absolutely come first, visual and audio elements are also a part of the gameplay experience. A high score in this category comes from your script being aesthetically appealing without being distracting.
 
 Adherence to Contest Theme: 5/25
 
 5 points will be dedicated to judging your choice of character and their danmaku. A high score in this category means you did a good job of integrating a character from another franchise into Touhou, and it means that both of your characters' danmaku works well together.
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-Played on Hard Mode (and Contest Mode) because I'm a pro gamer uwu
+Nonspell 1: A simple and effective opening that seems appropriate for both the characters. Challenging but fair and fun, good work...actually I think the background could've been chosen better, because the dark stars are difficult to see, but I still like it. 8/10.
 
-Nonspell 1: A good start to the script. Certainly an appropriate pattern for each of them, and the straight-lines of green bullets that Rumia shoots complements the fireballs pretty well. The rainbow spreads she shoots are less interesting, but it's still overall good. 7/10.
+Spell 1: I think the boss interaction here is top-notch, and the pattern itself is challenging but fair. However, I think Marx's telegraph is very deceptive - it makes where he's going to come down with laser delay lines, but then you NEED to be there or you die. Once that's understood it's enjoyable, but the telegraphing could be better. Excellent. 8.5/10.
 
-Spell 1: The pattern's also fairly good. I think this one drags on a little (maybe I'm supposed to change shottypes from Sanae?) but it's still fun to dodge. 6.75/10.
+Nonspell 2: A repeat of the previous theme, only Flandre's contribution seems more substantial and Marx's less so. I find this weaker than the first non since Marx more or less does the same thing and it's simple streaming at the end, but worse than the first non is still good! 7/10.
 
-Nonspell 2: Aaaaaa curvy lasers aaaaaa. Rumia doesn't shoot a lot in this nonspell - and while I think it's justified for the pattern to be less dense (because CURVY LASERS) I think you might've taken it too far and made her contribution barely anything. Pattern's not bad though. 6.5/10.
+Spell 2: Realizing that you don't need to rush all that much to get out of Marx's way seems key. I thought I had to somehow find my way out of Flandre's bullets and had a Bad Time, but realizing that I can take my time made this pattern pretty fun for me.  7.5/10.
 
-Spell 2: This spell seems to be both a good bit harder than anything else in the script, AND it seems to have a way longer healthbar. It's a lot of random rain so I feel like Mr. Widefurry dominates this pattern too. Rumia's darkness didn't seem very relevant because the bullets rendered above it. Overall, I think these flaws render the pattern itself below average. 4/10.
+Nonspell 3: I think this one's a bit more interesting to dodge than Non 2, but the dark stars from Marx still don't offer anything new. I'll place this between them first two nons. 7.5/10.
 
-Nonspell 3: Now it feels like Rumia does the heavy lifting and darkness furry man provides the gimmick. I like this one. 8/10.
+Spell 3: This one's a weird one. I end up dying to Flandre's bullets essentially spawning on top of me, and I'm not sure how to circumvent that considering she aims at least some of them(?) at you. The themeing is nice, but the pattern itself isn't very fun to dodge in my opinion. I'll say it's thoroughly average and give it 5/10.
 
-Spell 3: Ooh, fancy intro. I for one tend to like modular spells if the parts of it blend together in interesting ways. This one is...alright, I guess? It seems to drag on for a while, much like the second spell, and I don't think the five circles necessarily blend together particularly well. It ends up feeling like dodging a bunch of spam from all sides to me. Props for the declaration though. 5/10.
+Nonspell 4: Flandre's pattern is pretty! Marx exists too I guess. Marx handling the streaming segment instead of Flandre probably makes this the easiest nonspell yet, and quite imbalanced in terms of character contribution. 6.75/10.
 
-Danmaku Score: 6.20833333333333333333/10 (scaled to 9.3125/15)
+Spell 4: Those are some funky curvy lasers. I think I ended up dodging them due to sheer luck, if anything. The pattern itself would be fine with some curvy warning lines or something - dodging the curvy lasers with paths that are simply too hard to predict while also dodging other danmaku is probably asking too much. 6.5/10.
 
 Nonspell 5: Ooh, Marx does something more complicated! And also Flandre's pattern is really good, so it still overshadows him, but I like it all the same. 8/10.
-Aesthetically this script is...fine? I think the game just feels SMALL - tiny player relative to the playing field, and then you dodge a bunch of similarly tiny fireballs. The music not really starting until the first spell is neat but also confused me a bit at first, but maybe it's just my terrible hearing. Overall I'll put this at an above-average 3/5.
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 Spell 5: Oh no, b e t r a y a l! Visually fancy, the pattern's dodging a bunch of bullets that are haphazard though. Decent themeing, Fine pattern. 5.5/10.
 
-I think the characters work together decently well. Spell 2 seems like the most egregious example of one character doing the majority of the work, but otherwise it's solidly above average. 3.5/5.
+Spell 6: Much more fun than Spell 5, though I'd say it's REALLY hard compared to the rest of the script. I really like the music syncing, and it's overall a very impressive spell. Tone back the difficulty and I'd say it's amazing; even as it is now I'd say it's excellent. 8.5/10.
 
-OVERALL SCORE 9.3125 + 3 + 3.5 = 15.8125/25
+Danmaku Score: 7.159/10 (scaled to 10.7386/15)
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 Aesthetically this script is amazing. There's all sorts of little touches like spell comments on the pause menu, the art is good and cohesive, and sound effects are used very well. The dark stars are annoying to see during nonspells as the biggest visibility problem, but other than that I can't think of many flaws. Great work!  4.5/5.
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 I think the characters work together very well. The nonspells were somewhat disappointing at times, but their use during spellcards makes up for that. 4.25/5.
 
 OVERALL SCORE 10.7386 + 4.5 + 4.25 = 19.487/25