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 [個人製作][魔法少女小圓][紅藍][シャングリラ]はなむけ
 http://www.mediafire.com/?mrkc5fm2o9nzaxc
 
 [Kodou (Shangri-la)] Farewell Gift
 
 ---003---
 
 Farewell Gift
 
 ---004---
 
-At the beginning, we tried to kill each other.
+At the beginning, we just want to kill each other.
 
 ---005---
 
-So naive, all that hero of justice talk.
+All that naive talk about being a hero of justice,
-Just looking at her pisses me off,
+Just looking at her pissed me off.
-I want to beat it out of her.
+All I wanted to do was beat crap out of her.
 
 :  I
 :  won't lose!
 :  I don't regret having used my wish for someone else.
 
-But without realizing it,
+But slowly, without realizing it,
 
 ---006---
 
-I can't just abandon her.
+I can no longer abandon her.
 
 :  It's lonely being alone.
 
 ---007---
 
 : How long do you plan to stay like this?
 
 :  ... What are you doing?
 :  Why are you even here?
 Eh...
 :  W...Why?
 
 ---008---
 
 :  I just want to stay by Sayaka.
 
 :  ... You would die for someone like me,
 :  Are you an idiot?
 
 :  Does it matter?
-Do as I like!
+Do what you want!
-:  I did what I want.
+:  I did what I feel like.
 
 :  I'll always be with you.
 :  So once you're done with crying, get up.
 :  Come on,
 
 ---009---
 
 :  I will give you snacks.
 
 :  Don't want it!
 
 ---010---
 
 :  You... you are enough.
 
 :  Thank you,
 
 :  Kyouko.
 
 ---011---
 
-Sayaka, I should be thanking you.
+Sayaka, I should be thanking you instead.
 
 :  Let's go.
 
 
 ---012---
 
 :  ...
 :  You are a good person.
 
 :  The way you are,
-:  Even as a magical girl, you can definitely make new friends,
+:  Even as a magical girl, you can make new friends,
-:  ... and make wonderful, new memories together.
+:  ... and have wonderful memories together.
 :  ... Sayaka?
 
 :  So,
 :  I want you to live!
 
 ---013---
 
 :  What are you saying, idiot?
 :  Kyouko, you are always worrying about me.
 
-:  You always help me when I was in trouble,
+:  You always came to my aid when I was in trouble,
 :  Until the end. 'Even now...'
 :  Ha?
-:  I am happy that you said my name.
+:  I am happy that you called my name.
 
 :  Kyouko, you saved me.
 :  Thank you.
-:  I want you to live, because you deserve it.
+:  So I want you to live!  You deserve it.
-:  It's a bit more... difficult for me.
+:  It'll be... harder for me.
 
 ---014---
 
 :  So, Kyouko,
 :  Live!
 :  This is my request as a friend!
 ... Sorry, Kyouko.
 :  Sayaka!
 
 ---015---
 
 :  ...Sayaka?
 
 :  Hey, what happened to Sayaka!?
 
 :  She's gone... she followed the Law of the Cycles and passed on.
 :  Before the hope we wished for brings about an equal amount of misfortune,
 
 :  We have no choice but to vanish from this world.
 :  You were told that, right?
 I can't.
 
 ---016---
 
 :  ... Dummy!
 :  Just when we'd finally become friends...
 
 Once again, I am left by myself.
 
 :  So, Kyouko, live!
-... Damn, to say something so cruel.
+... Damn, saying something so cruel.
 :  My request as a friend.
 
 ---017---
 
 .... I get it, Sayaka.
 If you asked,
 
-I'll definitely try to live on.
+I'll definitely live on.
 
 ---018---
 
 Once you're done with crying, get up.
 
 ---019---
 
 :  The only way I could save you would be to make it like none of this had happened,
-:  But I got hte feeling that you didn't really want it to turn out like that.
+:  But I got the feeling that you didn't really want it to turn out like that.
 Kyousuke's performance...
 
 :  ... Well,
 :  I am a little upset about the way things turned out, but I can't be mad at Hitomi.
 Once you're done with crying, get up, eh?
 :  She's almost too good for him,
 :  So she'll make him happy, won't she?
 
 ---020---
 
 :  So, Madoka is a god now— 'Wow!'
 :  'Nah.' It's nothing, really... 'Uehehe'
 :  I'm sorry it turned out like this.
 
-:  If I could change a thing...
+:  If I could change anything...
-:  There's Kyouko... If only we could...
+:  It's Kyouko... If only we could...
-:  ''Haha'' move on together or something, sorry.
+:  ''Haha'' move on together, or something. Sorry...
 
 ---021---
 
-:  Maybe Madoka knows now,
+:  Maybe you know by now,
 
 :  About Her family...
 :  She blames everything on herself,
 
 :  Surviving by herself.
 
-:  Maybe from now on... She can get away from this life style.
+:  Maybe from now on... She can get away from that life style.
 :  Yet she dies for me.
 :  That isn't right.
 
 ---022---
 
 :  She's rude, bad-mouthed, and very nosy,
 :  but once you get to know her, she's actually a good person.
 
 Want some?
 :  Kind too.
 
 :  So I wish for her to live.
 :  Make friends, fall in love, etc?
 Oh, but romance might be a bit too much (laugh)
-:  Let her experience youth like a typical girl,
+:  Let her experience life like a regular girl.
-:  Since she has suffered so much already.
+:  She has suffered so much already.
 
 ---023---
 
 :  I want her to be happy.
 
 ---024---
 
 :  Sayaka.
 :  So this is enough, Madoka.
 
 :  I will watch her carefully.
-And of course Mami-san and the transfer student too.
+Of course, Mami-san and the transfer student too.
 :  Em!
 Of course!
 
 :  Then, let's go?
 :  Em.
 :  Oh, ya.
 
 ---025---
 
 :  Even as a god,
-: Madoka is still my bride!
+:  you're going to be my wife!
-:  Eh.
+:  Eh?
 
 :  Thank you, Madoka.
-:  I like you the most.
+:  I love you the most.
 :  'Em'  Me too.
 Good bye
 
 ---026---
 
 :  ...
 :  Argh.
 
 ---027---
 
 :  I guess this is it.
-Heh, it's all dark.
+Heh, it's all dark now.
-:  They say the end for magical girls...
+:  They said the end for magical girls...
-Supposely surrouned by a pink glow.
+Supposedly surround by a pink glow.
 
-You worked hard, Kyouko.
+Thank you for the hard work, Kyouko.
 
 :  Ma...doka?
 
 ---028---
 
-:  It's
+:  You're
 :  Madoka!
 :  It's really you?  'Isn't it?'
 :  'Uehehe'  Long time no see.
-:  You're so causal too.
+:  How causal.
 
-:  Ehm~
+:  Ehmm~
-:  How do I forget something so important...
+:  How did I forget someone so important...
 :  Sorry,
 :  It can't be helped.
 :  Don't worry.
 
 :  Also,
-:  That's too much-- forgetting your own friends.
+:  Pssh—  Forgetting your own friends.
 
 ---029---
 
 :  Did you forget me too?
 
 ---030---
 
 :  Sa...yaka!
 
 :  'Ah'  So you remember!
-That's good--
+Good for you--
 
 :  Wh...
 Ha
-:  Hold up!  Why are you crying?
+:  Hey!  Are you crying?
 Sayaka...
-:  Are you that happy~  'Eh-em'
+:  Happy to see me~  'Ah—em'
 :  Not at all!
 
 :  I am not crying!!
-:  idiot!  Sayaka is very foolish!
+:  Idiot!  Sayaka is very foolish!
 :  Ahaha!
 
 ---031---
 
-:  This time, my turn to pick you up.
+:  This time is my turn to pick you up,
 
 :  Kyouko.
 
 ---032---
 
 :  Haha
 
-:  Let's go
+:  Let's go,
 :  Together!
 
 ---033---
 
 :  Thank you, Madoka.
 
 :  Em.
 
 Finally, together.
 
 ---034---
 
 Aftewards
 
-Thank you everyone for reading until the end.  This is a KyouSaya memorial.
+Thank you everyone for reading until the end.  This was in memory of Kyouko and Sayaka.
-In the middle part, Sayaka goes to pick up Kyouko, comes from watching the ending during April.  My heart is a mess, so I want to give them a happy ending no matter what.
+The middle part, where Sayaka goes to pick up Kyouko, came from watching the ending in April.  My heart was a mess, so I wanted to give them a happy ending, no matter what.
-So I drew it and put it on pixiv... And received various reactions.
+I drew it and put it on pixiv... And received a lot of interest.
-That's why I hurry and put together this doujin, and it became this.
+That's why I rushed to put a doujin together.  This was the result.
-Thank goodness.  There might be some inconsistencies, but please ignore them.
+Thank goodness!  There might be some inconsistencies, so please ignore them.
-Some lines might been too complicated (like Kyousuke's performance and etc, which are dialogue from teh anime).
+Some lines might be too complex (Kyousuke's performance and etc are based on the original).
-Speaking of the 10th page... that's drawn using the Vol.3 manga designs.
+Speaking of which, Page 10... was based on the manga (Vol.3) designs.
-That's definitely what happened!  (I sure hope so)  Manga KyouSaya forever!  Imagination forever!
+That's definitely what happened!  (I hope so)  Manga KyouSaya forever!  Imagination forever!
 Regardless of when and where, Sayaka and Kyouko will have their happy ending!
-It's good enough if you believe it!
+It's true if you believe it!
-During drawing, I constantly loops the KyouSaya character song.  It makes me want to cry.
+While drawing, I had the KyouSaya image song on a constant loop.  It makes me want to cry.
 I love KyouSaya the most!!!
 
-Compared to the Pixiv version, some color pages and dialogue changes.  Feel free to look for them!
+There're some changes for the color pages and in the dialogues compared to the Pixiv version.  Feel free to search for them!
 
 ---035---
 
 : Sayaka,
-Third time is the charm!!
+Third time's the charm!!
 :  Want some? 'Or do you want me?'
 
 :  ...
 Even now...
 :  Why do you always have food with you?
 
-:  Always with that mouth, it's annoying!  Next time I won't give you any even if oyu asked!!
+:  You always talk like that! It's annoying. Next time I won't give you any, even if you asked!!
 :  Wooh.
 
 Stare--
 Creak Creak
 
 ---036---
 
 :  Don't leave me behind anymore.
 :  Em.
 
 :  I just want to stay by your side.  'Don't you know anything?'
 :  Em.  'Sorry'
 
 :  I want to hear you
 :  Say my name.
 :  Kyouko,
 :  ... You're heavy.
 :  !
 :  Also,
 
 ---037---
 
-: I will never let go of your hand!
+: I will never let you go!
 :  Oh!
 
 ---038---
 
-I wish for their happiness.
+Let's wish for their happiness.