line 1 comma splice; should be "The Queen spoke softly; her words felt dead as they hit the air with no hope."
line 2 needs a comma at the end, instead of a period; should be “We will face this together my fair lady and we will win. Do not lose your courage now,” the knight said.
line 3 "sent", should be "scent"
line 4, "resolved" should be "resolve"
line 7, "beats", should be "beasts"