Library editing

>there is no librarian running the place.
capitalize
>-name-
Use square brackets for parsers. If you'd like to know more, there's a guide in the first reply to this thread. You should also put a comma before this.
>that it's a library, and that you intend
no comma
>to collect whatever books you're able in your adventures.
I think there should be a "to" after "able," but this usage isn't striking me as 100% wrong either, so I dunno.
>sir/ma'am
I checked, and this is surprisingly not a current parser (not to say that you should change this, it's just strange).
>they're mine." she protests
The period should be a comma.
>available to available for
Both of these made it in by mistake.
>that they could be lost forever."
There's no quote to match at the start of this conditional.
>"Yes, my alpha." she says, staring down.
Period>comma. Also, "staring down" comes across to me as "to stare down," i.e., "to intimidate" rather than "looking down," but that might just be me.
>tells her she enjoys
Should probably be "you" instead of "her."
>denying her of her prized possessions
"Deny" can only take "of" specifically when it's "denied," but the sentence still works if you just take out "of."
>"and her autonomy.)
You need a space before this "and" to match the other version, and I think that parenthesis is supposed to be a quotation mark.
>You simply tell him your just taking those old books taking up space.
Should be "you're" instead of "your," and there's repetition with "taking."
>You can't quite place why, but something about the purple beast annoyed you beyond reason.
I think you're letting your personal feelings bleed through a bit too much here (and a bit in the earlier part too). There are players who will have killed Behemoth for reasons other than annoyance.
>the behemoth's
Capital "b"
>You take the imp skull. It seems to be fairly standard for such a thing.
The second sentence strikes me as a bit awkward.
>you grip them and lift them high before balancing it's center on your head.
You switch from "them" to "its." Also, that should be "its" without an apostrophe if it's staying.
>without wearing yourself completely down, and opt to leave it.
Remove this comma if you want to keep this construction, but you could also change it to something like "opting to leave it" instead.
>you take a moment to figure the best way
Add an "out" after "figure."
>but soon you find yourself lugging it home.
This "but" doesn't really make sense to me, as the second clause doesn't contradict the first.
>you yank up the desk with little though
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>(s>19)
Just realized that you're using this for strength checks now. You should be consistent with how you note things.
>But figure you could grab the second one while you're here.
I don't think this should be its own sentence, so I'd recommend making it join with the previous one.
>Disassembling the beds frame
Should be "bed's"