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- Comments/corrections for Chapter 13 of "Great Minds Think Alike", an Animorphs story on Archive of Our Own. https://archiveofourown.org/chapters/82677823
- "He remembered the first mission he did with the animorphs." - Animorphs should be capitalized. [grammar]
- I could be wrong, and this might be correct, but "He and his covered for the Animorphs" sounds like maybe a word like "friends" should be after "he and his" [grammar].
- "one in the same" should be "one and the same". [word use]
- "Hork-Bajir" is always hyphenated, not two separate words. It might also always be capitalized, but I'm not sure. Most sources I checked, including the wiki, always capitalize it, since it describes a people and not a species. [grammar/lore]
- I'm pretty sure the plural of Taxxon is Taxxons; I don't recall seeing anyone refer to an amount of the species greater than one as "many" or "a team of Taxxon". [grammar/lore]
- Also, Jeep is capitalized, as a brand name. [grammar]
- "It’s shadow" should be "its shadow". [grammar/punctuation]
- Chapman's Yeerk is Iniss 226, not 266. Unless you specifically meant a different Iniss that isn't Chapman, which is unlikely. [lore or spelling]
- "For lack of anything else to use, she cleaned him off with the hem of her shirt. It "... It what? [grammar]
- Similarly to what I said earlier, "gedd and taxxon" should probably be "Gedds and Taxxons", but this could be a sylistic choice. [grammar/lore]
- "These hork bajir were long passed words." Did you mean "long past words"? [grammar]
- The last thing I wanted to say was a remark on these three sentences: "Sub-Visser Fifteen is delivering a new morph from Europa. I want a chance to test it out before I use it in combat. We’ll take the Blade Ship to the frozen north of your planet." This cannot be the Venber from book 25, since their origin is specifically said to be from "a frozen moon called Venbea". Ax says that the Venber are "an alien race from a frozen moon several dozen light-years from here." It hasn't been said yet *what* the new morph from Europa is, but I wanted to give a heads up just in case.
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