An Hazbin Hotel OC Story Idea I made on the spot

hort story - Acidic "Jones" Bones meet sir pen: https://pastebin.com/bH49jbby
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I got this idea/reference from this: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5wxs_WNwDJE
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This is an idea I made on the spot, it's going to be spotty but, ... I hope you like it somehow. I made this on laz Discord
(A big thank you to my sister Re-fix this for me)
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I have an idea about a demon who survived "Alastor arrived in Hell for the first time". It's about how a small group of demons from the old west of hell, who made it big in pentagram city and are ready to face off an overlord... until HE shows up. Now there's 2 left in the gang... him & his brother. The last 2 survivors.

One is a Vulture demon (that's him), and his brother is a Fennec fox demon
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The Vulture demon guy found a Job for being a bodyguard for some snake guy that calls himself "sir pentious", who lives in... Pentagram City. He tells his brother about this and he thinks this is a terrible idea, but they needed the money to pay off a debt they shared.
So VD flew to pentagram city to meet this "sir pentious" and hoped get a good payout from this.

But we know how that goes
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As far VD thinks/seen of Sir pentious... he is a joke of a demon. *jump cut to the next part*
When VD realized who was at the front of the hotel, he told Sir pen. "WE NEED TO GET THE FUCK OUT OF HERE, NOW!" But it was too late. Alastor magic was at work... of course, VD was ready for this.
With a stick of dynamite and anti-magic at hand (Alastor gave him a reason to look into a demon to protect himself), as well as grab Sir Pen (because he needs to get payed) and an egg boy, hanging on for his dear life. They get out of the airship as it explodes.
On the ground, he looks to his left, and sees that red Smile monster. It fills him with rage, but he knows he can't fight him.. so he grabs sir pen with his talon and egg boy, who's hanging on sir pen's snake tail. They fly far away to be somewhere safe from Mr. Smile.
After VD telling Sir pentious about how dangerous Alastor is, he starts growing a sof spot for Pen as he lets him stay at his home in the old west of hell. But he still needs the money for the rent. So the bird, The Snake, and The Egg left the city and when to VD's home... His brother is not happy about this, at all.
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one of the ideas i have for this is they are in a big fight. Fennec fox demon guy stole a double-barrel shotgun while nobody is looking, point it at some demon and yell "surprise!". he blasts some demon guy head off and Fennec fox guy goes flying like a football
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So Vulture has been hardened by the past and is paranoid, but still can relax a bit
Fennec is a little quick witted createn that knows how to play back handed, but  his heart shows when his has to protect his brother
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this is what VD looks like.

Flamboyant Flamenco with a "Balaclavas Are Forever (BLU)" color scheme. goggles, Poncho with a cowboy outfit under it, at the end of his feathers. it looks like it got eyes on them but not really (something like lord shin or a king cobra)

this art pic is what I imagine what he looks like: https://www.deviantart.com/goat-kid/art/Uriel-Plume-of-the-Dawn-577443841
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This is what fennecs look like.

Texas Ten Gallon Hat
 -Ye Old Rustic Colour
 -hat has gun shots holes
Wild West Waistcoat
-A Deep Commitment to Purple
-no badge
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VD Name is: Acidic "Jones" Bones.

and FF Name is: Quick "Zerda" Sand.

btw VD is a Bearded vulture
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Well, the idea that If sir pen is going to take over hell. He need some demons under his control/protect him if someone try to assassinate him. also I feel he be a type of guy "first impression matters" to him, if he want demons to follow him
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"It's a tough thing to give advice on, really. Hooks are one of those things where defining them and creating them are two very different things.
for your story, from what I gather, you hook needs to do two things: establish Jones' character and set his goals. What does he want, what's his motivation, that sort of thing. Next is how that ties into the story you want to tell. How does the incoming plot allow him to reach those goals, whatever they are? Why would Jones undertake his journey?" - from WA
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hm... I guess it start out that Jones want revenge on alastor, do the fact he kill a lot of people he was so close too. but over time, he realized his brother & his new friend (sir pentious) are more important than revenge. because Jones was so focus on revenge, it almost cost his brother life
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"Yeah, and then just find a way to tie that into the story.
Have the character motivations and feelings intertwine with the story." - from Senkthesneek
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I am going to use the deathslinger from dead by daylight in my story. you can't fucking stop me
he is going to be a coyote demon, the harpoon thing front of his gun is going to made out of holy metal and, I want to try my best to make him spooky.