Dialogue: 0,0:00:01.33,0:00:03.94,Main Dialog,,0000,0000,0000,,{\i1}I want to meet you!{\i0} - Why italics? It's not a thought or anything that requires italics (unless all of your karaoke is in italics, in which case you should proabbly stop that).


Dialogue: 0,0:00:04.81,0:00:07.86,Main Dialog,,0000,0000,0000,,{\fs50\b1\be1\blur0\bord5\fscx183.647799\fscy190\pos(752,264)\c&H85F5E8&\3c&H86ECED&}Recorder
Dialogue: 0,0:00:04.81,0:00:07.86,Main Dialog,,0000,0000,0000,,{\fs50\b1\be2\blur0\c&H0B0F11&\bord0\fscx183.647799\fscy190\3c&H86F3F4&\pos(752,264)}Recorder
Dialogue: 0,0:00:05.56,0:00:07.86,Main Dialog,,0000,0000,0000,,{\fs50\b1\be2\blur0\bord5\fscx183.647799\fscy190\pos(830,328)\c&H85F5E8&\3c&H86ECED&}to
Dialogue: 0,0:00:05.56,0:00:07.86,Main Dialog,,0000,0000,0000,,{\fs50\b1\be2\blur0\c&H0B0F11&\bord0\fscx183.647799\fscy190\3c&H86F3F4&\pos(830,328)}to
Dialogue: 0,0:00:05.56,0:00:07.86,Main Dialog,,0000,0000,0000,,{\fs50\b1\be2\blur0\bord5\pos(918,380)\fscx183.647799\fscy182.5\c&H86ECED&\3c&H86ECED&}Randsell {\bord3.4\be0\blur0\shad0\c&HBABFBF&\3c&HD4D9DA&}Do
Dialogue: 0,0:00:05.56,0:00:07.86,Main Dialog,,0000,0000,0000,,{\fs50\b1\be2\blur0\c&H0B0F11&\bord0\fscx183.647799\fscy182.5\3c&H86F3F4&\pos(918,380)}Randsell {\bord0\be0\blur0\shad0\3c&HABADAE&}Do
Yellow text is blurred too much, white not enough and wtf does "Do" mean here? (It also wouldn't have been that hard to copy the music symbol either, you know, for quality).

Dialogue: 0,0:00:04.77,0:00:07.86,Main Dialog,,0000,0000,0000,,{\fad(0,200)}Recorder and Randsell starts now! - Why the fade out? It's completely retarded.

Dialogue: 0,0:00:14.05,0:00:14.70,Main Dialog,,0000,0000,0000,,Hey hold on... - There are things called commas. This is where you use them. Also, she gets cut off by being dragged away (as opposed to trailing off), so an emdash after hold works better.

Dialogue: 0,0:00:22.77,0:00:24.86,Main Dialog,,0000,0000,0000,,Food stalls, food stalls! - Starts less than 100ms after a keyframe, EXTEND THIS SHIT BACK.

Dialogue: 0,0:00:24.86,0:00:26.44,Main Dialog,,0000,0000,0000,,Oh, Atsushi. - scene bleed

Dialogue: 0,0:00:26.44,0:00:27.88,Main Dialog,,0000,0000,0000,,Oh. - Question mark

Dialogue: 0,0:00:27.88,0:00:30.30,Main Dialog,,0000,0000,0000,,Eh? Take-ni, you're working here? - I'm going to assume you want to be weeaboo here, in which case it's Take-nii

Dialogue: 0,0:00:35.45,0:00:38.40,Main Dialog,,0000,0000,0000,,So you're still at the age where you'd rather eat than look at the blossoms, eh? - Too long for what's being said, Also, should be huh? instead of eh? Finally, flowers sounds more natural than blossoms

Dialogue: 0,0:00:52.31,0:00:55.57,Main Dialog,,0000,0000,0000,,Come on, Take-ni, you need to work hard every day. - Being weeaboo and failing hardcore at it, nice job! "Come on", should be taken out as well

Dialogue: 0,0:00:58.05,0:01:02.98,Main Dialog,,0000,0000,0000,,When I see the beautiful cherry blossom, it makes you forget all the bad things. - So when he sees something, it affects someone else? Nice logic there =_= Also, pick either "...a beautiful..." or "...cherry blossoms..."

Dialogue: 0,0:01:02.98,0:01:05.25,Main Dialog,,0000,0000,0000,,Such as things from the past. - Like sounds better than "Such as". Also, a full second of lead out? Seriously?

Dialogue: 0,0:01:05.81,0:01:07.43,Main Dialog,,0000,0000,0000,,My mother's scoldings as well. - This just sounds bad as a follow on from the previous line.

***Missing line of what the mother says (it's clearly audible)***

Dialogue: 0,0:01:10.85,0:01:13.93,Main Dialog,,0000,0000,0000,,There sure are a lot of drunk people even though it's still the afternoon. - "the middle of the day" sounds better than "the afternonn".

Dialogue: 0,0:01:18.20,0:01:20.61,Main Dialog,,0000,0000,0000,,Come over here! - Extend back to keyframe

Dialogue: 0,0:01:28.67,0:01:32.40,Main Dialog,,0000,0000,0000,,No, she's my older sister, she's a highschool student. - How do you people fail with punctuation? The second comma should be a full stop or ", she's" should be "and"

Dialogue: 0,0:01:32.79,0:01:35.68,Main Dialog,,0000,0000,0000,,You're a elementary student, yet you're drunk? - Line starts too early

Dialogue: 0,0:01:45.53,0:01:47.55,Main Dialog,,0000,0000,0000,,Even though he's an elementary student, - Should start at keyframe

Dialogue: 0,0:01:45.53,0:01:47.55,Main Dialog,,0000,0000,0000,,Even though he's an elementary student,
Dialogue: 0,0:01:47.55,0:01:50.23,Main Dialog,,0000,0000,0000,,He has an excellent body too!
NO. NO NO NO. YOU DO NOT FUCKING CAPITALISE AFTER A FUCKING COMMA. And take out the "too" on the end, she's not saying he has an excellent body in addition to him being an elementary student, she's saying that he has an excellent body DESPITE him being an elementary school student.

Dialogue: 0,0:02:03.08,0:02:04.79,Main Dialog,,0000,0000,0000,,Atsuhi-kun,
Dialogue: 0,0:02:04.79,0:02:07.31,Main Dialog,,0000,0000,0000,,How many times did I have to explain to the police?
Hi, I'm Your Editor And Because I'm Retarded And Don't Know How To Capitilise Properly I'll Just Capitalise Everything, Okay?
"How many times have I explained it to the police?" works better here as well.
This line needs to be extended as it continues after the scene change. Hell, there's more of the line AFTER the scene change than before.

Dialogue: 0,0:02:07.68,0:02:10.15,Main Dialog,,0000,0000,0000,,Hang in there, Take-ni! - Thumbs up for being weeaboo and failing miserably! (honorific is nii ffs)

Dialogue: 0,0:02:19.17,0:02:21.52,Main Dialog,,0000,0000,0000,,Boobs rather than flowers - I know four year olds that understand that a full stop goes on teh end of a sentence

Dialogue: 0,0:02:28.30,0:02:30.00,Main Dialog,,0000,0000,0000,,Take-ni.
Dialogue: 0,0:02:28.46,0:02:30.00,Typsetting 1,,0000,0000,0000,,{\fad(560,0)\be1\blur1\fs50\bord0\shad0\b1\an7\fnCalibri\pos(210,410)}Take-ni
It's nii.

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I want to meet you now!
Recorder and Randseldo is about to begin!
Whoa!
It's in full bloom!
There are some food stalls over there!
Hey hold on...
{13: Flower blossoms and siblings}
Food stalls, food stalls!
Oh, Atsushi.
Oh.
Eh? Take-ni, you're working here?
That looks good!
So you're still at the age where you'd rather eat than look at the blossoms, eh?
You'll become fond of the flowers over time.
But when you reach my age, you'll prefer food once again.
I really want to marry a rich girl.
Come on, Take-ni, you need to work hard every day.
When I see the beautiful cherry blossom, it makes you forget all the bad things.
Such as things from the past.
My mother's scoldings as well.
You shouldn't forget those.
There sure are a lot of drunk people even though it's still the afternoon.
Don't stare at them.
Miyagawa-kun!
Come over here!
You're drinking beer as well, Moriyama-sensei?
They made me drink it.
Oh, is that Miyagawa's little sister?
No, she's my older sister, she's a highschool student.
You're a elementary student, yet you're drunk?
This is outrageous!
I'm not drunk!
Sensei!
Please stop!
He's still an elementary student, you know!
Moriyama-sensei...
Even though he's an elementary student,
He has an excellent body too!
You shouldn't be rough on him.
Sure is tough handling a grade schooler.
Let's get out of here.
Atsuhi-kun,
How many times did I have to explain to the police?
Hang in there, Take-ni!
You shouldn't do any anything weird.
{Boobs rather than flowers}
{Let's try to be serious from now on.}
Boobs rather than flowers
Lets try to be serious from now on.
{Take-ni}
Take-ni.