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Cachero:

sea pressure -> at once plain and vivid, almost alarming in its ability to realize a crisis. Highly symbolic imagery, yet tangible enough to grasp -- I can see more metaphors and links to other topical problems. Simple enough construction that lends well to delivering a message; this is how to play a straight idea obliquely.

grave -> corpus forming into a well-focused eco-poetry main idea (did I get that right, Lee?). Terse, direct, pointed; again, the scene is symbolic and easy to synthesize into different contexts, though this one is clearer. Please spell out "six feet" as it may be formatted to accentuate the burial, and maybe cut the final three lines into their own stanza.

void -> arguably the most powerful of the stack, as the actions build imagery to great effect. Strong themes built upon imaginative, imaginable motions where the cause and effect are easy to tell. Manages to describe a mental state and disorder without being too overt -- another fun flourish. I should get lunch later.

Espinosa:

nasalanta:

pagkabata: lakas ng tama into sa alaala ng mambabasa. halos manifesto na siya.

tuwing umuulan: feeling ko dapat si Isabelle mag-deliver into; pwede siyang monologue sa stage play. Dahil conversational, may feedback loop sa author at mambabasa, kaya gumagana biilang dialogue. may abstraction, pero hindi magulo dahil klaro ang nakikita niya sa ending.