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  1. **Question 1:**
  2. ```Something that simply is unnatural and shouldn't exist. At least in the beginning, eventually something might be agreed upon, but in the beginning it is always this way.```
  3. I don't get how is this part related to the rest of the answer.
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  5. ```Most of World of Darknesses clans and bloodlines have some background in some form of folklore, Baali folklore coming from real Satanism```
  6. Also Baali are more into Apocalypse folklore rather than Satanism, but both are acceptable I guess lol.
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  10. **Question 2:**
  11. I liked the way he described clans and bloodlines including the examples and all of that.
  12. However, unfortunately, he did not put so many efforts into the other part of question, which is asking about sects. From a sixth-generation application, I would expect to include at least a short explanation about the Camarilla, the Sabbat, Anarchs, and their own Sect if they're in a different one.
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  16. **Question 4:**
  17. The question asked to elaborate on four things (Disciplines, Generation, Age, and how they're coming into play).
  18. He did describe what Disciplines and Generation are, however, he completely forgot about the Age part, not to mention the way it's coming into play? (How it's going to affect them socially and so on).
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  22. **Question 5:**
  23. ``` The body will reawaken, and as it accepts the beast it throws itself into a state of frenzy, a thirst which simply cannot be quenched but by draining the life from a being. Due to this, the embrace is often seen as a sacred act which must be controlled, by kindred.```
  24. While the embrace would indeed lead to a state of hunger which would result in Frenzy, this is not the reason the Camarilla disallows random embraces.
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  27.  
  28. **Section 3 in general:**
  29. Most of the answers do answer what he has been asked for, however, they do seem a little short, it could be excused with a good story.
  30.  
  31. **Question 2 (Section 3):**
  32. Could elaborate further why exactly he's coming to Angel Pine, this is very short compared to such a question.
  33.  
  34. **Question 5 (Section 3):**
  35. ```Publicly using any power which draws the direct attention of possible predators. The Consequences could be as far as a character kill.```
  36. This is answering only half of the question.
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  40. **Age:**
  41. Yeah, no. I mean if you want to get such an age you better have a story that would conclude all of the necessary information from all of the eras in his life. 1000 years is a lot of time (and as far as I know it was more before revised).
  42.  
  43. **Path:**
  44. Applied for Path of Metamorphosis 6
  45. However, VTM page 315 states:
  46. ```Beginning characters may not start the game with
  47. Path ratings above 5: If the combination of the character’s Virtues would indicate a Path rating of higher
  48. than 5, simply record “5.” Likewise, freebie points may
  49. not be spent to increase a beginning character’s Path
  50. rating above 5, either.```
  51.  
  52. It also states this, but considering the flaws in the application, I would say 5 max.
  53. ```(Players starting with older characters may start with increased Path ratings at Storyteller discretion.)```
  54.  
  55. **Disciplines:**
  56. Animalism 0, no.
  57. It's very rare if not impossible for a character to have an in-clan discipline at 0 while being 1000 years old, it's the very basics of his clan. Combining it with Kuldonic-Sorcery as in-clan and an out-of-clan discipline (Fortitude) at rank 2... yeah, no.
  58.  
  59. About sorceries, just like Shmoits said; you need to get at least 3 dots in the primary path in order to get the second one, and you need at least 5 dots in order to get the third one.
  60.  
  61. **Story:**
  62. A thousand years old vampire lifespan could not be summarized in an 800 words story.
  63. It proves itself as the story seems rushed and it lacks of tons of information:
  64. Example 1:
  65. ```After it all went black I arose and drained each of those creatures of flesh and stone at my sire's will. He smiled at me "Welcome Jessica." he said as he looked down at me. My figure petite as I stood there thinking, my body molding even better.
  66.  
  67. After two hundred years of serving my sire as a loyal apprentice...```
  68. Embrace -> Boom 200 years later.
  69.  
  70. Example 2: Changing identities on the right and the left with no infromation. First, he changed himself to a female named Hydra, without saying a single word why would it even be necessary, or what happened. Then, he changed once again, this time to a male named James. Again, he did not mention why did he do that, or why would it be required in order to get his Retainer (Jonathan).
  71. No information was given about Jonathan as well, how did he find him or why would he pick interest in him.
  72.  
  73. Example 3:
  74. ```Eventually James was chased out of the small village near the tower for his experiments, and so I became Travis.```
  75. How did he get spotted? How was the chase like?
  76.  
  77. Example 4:
  78. ```And so I became Travis. As Travis, I accomplished my second path as his apprentice, bending the spirits to my will as I did my flesh. As Travis, I took what I pleased. I never apologized either, a crude personality.
  79.  
  80. A hundred years went by, and it was time for Travis to die, a few more hundred and Daron my new alias as well.```
  81. Lots of information is lacking about this identity as well, it is mentioned he accomplished his second path as Travis, I mean sure.. but how? No info is elaborated about his sorcery practices, or why it was time for Travis to die a century later.
  82. Then we jump another few hundred years? Oh come on.
  83.  
  84. Example 5:
  85. ```Eventually he stated that there was a new Anarch movement, and he wanted to watch the theater of it. So we went, and I became Henrik...```
  86. ?? :D ??
  87.  
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  91.  
  92. **Retainers (1pt. Background):**
  93. A retainer with a blood pool of 10 & Visscitude 3 would not be accepted with a single line in the story, obviously doesn't make sense.
  94.  
  95. **Mentor (2pt. Background):**
  96. Excuse me, but this is NOT a 2pt background!
  97. This is very rare that she's still alive, I would say this is 5pt background, to say the LEAST.
  98. Chart: https://i.imgur.com/zL2uEY2.png
  99. ```Mentor (Continued): Attributes: Strength 6, Dexterity 7, Stamina 7, Charisma 2, Manipulation 5, Appearance 7, Perception 5
  100. Mentor (Continued): Attributes: Intelligence 5, Wits 5
  101. Mentor (Continued): Abilities: Alertness 4, Athletics 4, Awareness 5, Brawl 3, Dodge 3.
  102. Mentor (Continued): Abilities: Crafts 4, Expression 3, Intimidation 4, Leadership 3.
  103. Mentor (Continued): Abilities: Subterfuge 5, Etiquette 5, Melee 3, Larceny 4.
  104. Mentor (Continued): Abilities: Stealth 5, Survival 3.
  105. Mentor (Continued): Abilities: Academics 3, Investigation 3, Medicine 5, Occult 5.
  106. Mentor (Continued): Disciplines: Animalism 6, Auspex 6, Vicissitude 7, Fortitude 5, Celerity 5, Protean 4,
  107. Mentor (Continued): Koldunic Sorcery (Way of Earth 5, Way of Water 5, Way of Wind 3, Way of Fire 3, Way of Spirit 3) Mentor (Continued): Koldunic Sorcery: (Kraina of the Well 4)
  108. Mentor (Continued): Thaumaturgy (Path of Blood 3, Movement of the Mind 3, Path of Spirit Manipulation 2)
  109. Mentor (Continued): Path of the Focused Mind 2, Path of Mercury 1.)
  110. Mentor (Continued): Other: Willpower 9; Generation 5th; Path of Metamorphosis 8.
  111. Mentor (Continued): Backgrounds: Cult 4 (Cult of the Well)```
  112.  
  113. Explaination:
  114. ```Gregory Mandrake is Henrik's Sire and Koldunic Mentor. A Wealthy 5th generation Tzimisce, he teaches Henrik whatever asked, and is willing to use his backgrounds to sometimes aid him.```
  115. This is not enough considering she/he or whatever it is was barely mentioned in the story, aside of the embrace/anarch revolt (2) part (and even then, very poorly).
  116.  
  117. **Deceptive Aura (1pt. Merit):**
  118. How in the name of god would a 1000 years old vampire have Deceptive Aura?
  119. Aura determines one's true nature, somebody who doesn't even follow path of humanity should NOT have such a merit unless he has an extremely good story to back it up.
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  122.  
  123. **Summary:**
  124. The story seems very rushed, incomplete, and there are many holes in it.
  125. The main problem is the story is lack of information, especially when we're looking at all of the identities he/she switched.
  126. I won't lie, Metal surely knows how to make a story clean and easy to read, I did enjoy to read it. However, it's not enough for a 6th Generation Tzimisce.
  127.  
  128. Another problem, the things he applied for:
  129. • Animalism 0 (in-clan) as a millennium years old vampire.
  130. • Kuldonic Sorcery (out-of-clan -> in-clan) at rank 2 along with 2 extra paths (impossible mechanic-wise [see above]).
  131. • Path (moral-code) at rank 6, although exceptions could be made, this application wouldn't be enough.
  132. • Mentor Background, this is a 5pt background to say the least. NOT 2.
  133. • Retainer Background, too powerful compared to the information provided.
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