[IMPLEMENTED] Miscellaneous Fixes 2: Judgment Day

Marae encounter after stealing her lethicite.
>Something “thunk"s off the bottom of the boat, making the wood shiver and spurring you to row with renewed vigor.
Wrong quotation marks. Use single plain.

>Getting in the water is definitely not a good idea right now.	The bone-chilling scrape of sand on wood grates at your ears.
Tab spacing after "now."

Holli first growth scene.
Replace "planet" with "world"

Forest Gown first night scene.
> You now have A-cup perky tits
Space at the start, no period at the end. This is consistent for any size increase.

>Heat builds in your chest and your boobs become bigger.
It says this even if you never had boobs before/are a guy.

When naming the Latex Goo-Girl "Fenoxo"
>"Fenoxo?" Her hair slowly morphs into a fedora. "I'm not sure this is quite my look, but it's a lovely name"
"I may be made out of slime, but I'm not <i>that</i> slimy!" Then prompt the player to pick another name instead.

Ifris gym multiple dicks.
>One of your canine cockcocks fill, to the muscle-focused demon’s delight, getting coos of pleased surprise as they fully engorge.
cockcocks, change "fill" to "fillsj"

>You gasp at the pleasant sensation of her moist swimsuit against each of your animalistic canine cockmembers and start to push yourself,
>canine cockmembers

>Just before the next lift, Ifris squeezes two of your twin distended, knotteddog-shaped masts, angling them straight up.
knotteddog. Also the "two of" part is redundant with only two dicks, where this tries to account for more than two. I don't play on my regular save with dog or multiple dicks so I'm not too aware of it, but I did see formatting errors like this in other scenes as well.

Scythe Reap special.
>As the battlefield lights up again, your foe’s wound explodes with dark energy, heavily damaging her!(308)
Missing space before the damage number.

>You curl up, planning to sleep for eight hours.
>You gain 160 HP.
>You have trouble relaxing as your mind wanders, dreaming of waking in the middle of the night, your camp flooded with the pale fragile moonlight.
Missing empty line between the HP message and the dream.

Dream scene.
>him in his bed and mount him.  Some disappointment lingers
Double space after period.

>how about some hair service? It’s on the house!”Lynnette offers and explains their options,
Spacing.

>You happily give Lynnette 60 gems and pick up the bottle
Buying minotaur cum at the salon appends this directly on to the last sentence on the screen. Instead, make it like any other shop offer a Next button with the buy message on a new screen. Make sure to have the Next button put you back in the salon, currently buying a bottle boots you back to camp.

Minotaur Get Filled option's tooltip is "Get cum injection in your ass.", which looks to be written by someone suffering from minotaur cum addiction.

Camp Followers tooltip
>Check up on any followers or companions who are joining you in or around your camp. You'll probably just end up sleeping with them.
"Check up on the followers and companions who've joined you inm your camp."

Hellmouth encounter.
>You tell her to put that tongue to good use. All she does is groan in response, still dazed from combat.
While stating combat isn't inherently wrong, she wouldn't be dazed from that specifically when it's a lust victory. It's better to have a variable for that there.

>Amusing it may be, but hopefully she’ll
That might be correct, but it reads rather awkwardly.

>Finally reaching your limit, you groan and ejaculate over the demon’s face and hair. You wipe the remnants clean with her tongue before suiting back up in your inquisitor’s robes.
Satan needs to work on the climax (literally) of his scenes.

Hellmouth loss.
>She shuts her maw in the blink of an eyes.
Eye.

Sophie first egg hatching.
>Grinning to your curvy mother, you reach down and grab her big, round ass and squeeze, pulling her closer.
I'm fairly sure that Sophie isn't your mother. "Grinning at your curvy, motherly harpy,"

>If you answer yes, you’re probably going to wind up with another bird-girl lusting after you (and maybe more, down the road). You had better say no if you want to keep things platonic.
The Yes Incest button has a double space in it.

>With such soft, gropable breasts pressing against you and your daughter, so very willing to let you touch them, even begging for you to touch them, how could you ever resist the incestuous temptation?
Why are my daughter's breasts pressing against me and herself when they're hers? Where did these phantom tits come from? Remove the comma after "daughter" and add it after the first "you"

>“Do not worry. Both of you will survive this. ”.
Remove the period at the end. Remove the space after the period.

>This gives you newfound strength, and you push, cringing through the pain due to the comfort your aides are giving you.
"IT gives you newfound strength," makes it sound a whole lot less forced.

Stats menu could use a tracker for Corrupted Witches children, as with 5 it offers a reward.

You should probably always be able to accept sex from a Corrupted Witch, as it's either that or fighting her, and your arousal should not weigh in on not wanting to end up in a dangerous situation.

Corrupted Witch willing sex options either need to be visible but grayed out, or align to the left.

>“If you do not want to inseminate me, I will allow you to leave.”
She says this even when you only have a vagina and have birthed five of her kind. Change it to account for that.

If you've birthed/impregnated five corrupted witches in total, you're permanently locked out of fighting them and those scenes.

Change the "Magical Knowledge" button's text to simply "Knowledge" to make it fit.

Also, make backing out of the Magical Knowledge menu put you back to the corrupted witch, not your camp. Rename the button from Leave to Back with this as well.

Getting the ball-less cum production perk from the witches after having impregnated five of them still leaves the button for it even without a penis.

Consider having the option of obtaining the ball-less increased cum perk be obtainable even while having balls as a way for the witches to future proof you if you ever end up going without.

>“It will be over soon, don’t worry.”.
Extra period.

> Suddenly, she removes her finger from your moist fuck-hole, and the paralysis is broken.
New line starting with a space.

>A penis this rigid is absolutely delicious to suck.”.
Extra period.

>“Remember to come back to the Crag often. We’ll need your semen often.”,
Comma should be in place of the period. Repetition of "often"

Once you can interact with the corrupted witches without sex:
Move the Leave button from the first to the last slot. Move the Sex button to the first slot, Magical Knowledge after that, then Circe, then Boost, then Vigor.

Goo-girl female victory scene.
>Finally, her mouth gapes in discomfort and her membrane parts, gooey legs becoming permeable and squishing around legs, engulfing your lower body in her glassy slime.
"and squishing around your legs,"

>The sensations are so strange all over your body that it is overwhelming at first.
"The sensation all over your body ia so strange that it is overwhelming at first."

>Your climax is almost immediate, the goo-girl rippling wildly as you clench down, muscles spasming in a full body shudder that floods your mind and tints your vision with a pinkish glassy.
Pinkish glassy what?

Goo-girl sex menu still appears even when not aroused enough.

Anemone pregnancy.
>Your larger, squirming belly makes your pregnancy obvious for those around you and keeps your wet fuck-hole aroused from the constant tingling in your womb.
Replace "larger" with "large"

Change the Arc of Retribution button text to "RetributionArc" to make it fit.

Priscilla's pussy scene.
>enlarging as your semen shot out into Priscilla’s greedy womb.
"shoots" instead of past tense "shot"

>Non stop sex for the rest of your life - don’t say no now - Just think about it.
Non-stop.

>and you felt a large gush of your flow squeeze itself out of Priscilla’s pussy onto your balls.Priscilla holds
"feel" instead of "felt" this author seems to not grasp the idea of writing in current tense, there are probably many more instances of this. Also spacing after the period.

>You let go of Priscilla breasts-red with bite marks-dazed, yet satisfied.
What the fuck am I reading?

>“Mmmm...” Priscilla moaned as she stood up above you, and walked towards her armor, loincloth, and weapons.
Stop writing in past tense you ESL dumbass.

Move Priscilla's Leave button to the bottom right.

Pressing Leave in the giant bee forest encounter presents a Next button without actual dialogue change. If you're reading this with me having forgot to put it on the bounty board or some shit, remind me.

Ifris body worship scene.
>You explain she’s in for much more this time, giving her a wink as you set all the weight.
It says this even if it's your very first time meeting her.

Drider.
>her tongue darting under your tip even as she sucks for all she's worth.  You groan as she services you,
Double space.

Pressing "Sick!" in the Succubus Secretary's dialogue leads to you having to click twice more on the button to follow to progress.

Swallowing the Pure Pearl has no mention of obtaining the Purity Blessing perk.
Append the scene with a blank line before it with "<b>Perk Gained: Purity Blessing!</b>"

Drake's Heart, rut message.
>filling a womb with your seed and fertilizing those eggstaking that hard, spurting cock inside your own virgin, moist cunt.
Replace "eggstaking" with "eggs while taking"

Using the Nevermind button in the Reducto menu brings up a new one with about five words about you putting it away with a next button. This should just be cut and put you straight back to the item menu.

Pressing Leave at the Tower of Deception entrance after beating the statues gives you a useless Next button to return to camp.

Rename the Approach Jeremiah button to simply "Jeremiah"

>Here, I will open the entrance of the dungeon for you, so you can leave.”
Jeremiah says this in the Locked Room option even after you've already asked him how to leave and he opened the way out.

Jeremiah's Lust is at 123/120 and all he says is “Oh, you, trying to tease me into submission. Thank you for the display, but no.” with the fight continuing.

>After the sword has fully pierced it, he twists the blade and quickly pulls it off, in a gruesome display.
Pulling that off is quite impressive, but pulling it OUT is quite neccesary.

>“I will burn... consume everything. In a world without life, there can be no Corruption.”
Needs a lowercase c.

In the fight infobox the name is displayed as "Vilkus, Last Flame of the Inqu" because it doesn't fit.

>The man brings a hand to his chest and holds a small necklace, a lethicite encrusted within.
"a lethicite" isn't grammatically correct. it would either be "a lethicite crystal encrusted within." or just "lethicite encrusted within."
The latter of them two making the most sense contextually.

The Gargoyle Sex menu displays Watersports even when it's disabled. The button is grayed out though, but it shouldn't be visible.

Satyr loss.
>Upon finding one, he grins lustfully, his already impressively erect cock rising to full flag.He grabs your fair butt and roughly
Space after the period.

>not even bothered by the fact that his cock doesn’t even fit inside you.
Repetition of "even", remove the second one.

>Once you recover from your brutal fucking, you shamelessly  gather and re-dress in your garments
Double spacing.

Izma pregnancy.
>There is no denying your pregnancy. Your belly bulges and occasionally squirms as your growing offspring shifts position.
There is no empty line after this when a dream appears in the same menu.

>Your breasts feel swollen with all the extra milk they’re accumulating.
Same issue as the above.

>You have trouble relaxing as your mind wanders, dreaming of being captured and taken to a rusted building with dark smokestacks that belch sweet purplish smoke.
This is the specific dream that keeps fucking up in the above two issues.

>smokestacks that belch sweet purplish smoke.  Inside are rows of multi-dicked, huge breasted humans, approximately thirty of them.  Each is shackled with
Two double spaces after the sentences end.

Sophie's Sleep With option leads to a scene that has a Back button instead of a Next one, also move it to the first slot.

Looking at your baby harpy daughter brings up a Back button when it should be a simple Next one in the first slot.

Succubus Secretary doesn't have a requirement tooltip for the Force Feed option.

Cum Witch loss scene.
>Globules of her seed have already begin to slip out of your cunt-lips,
Replace "begin" with "begun"

>With her hips pistoning hard, the hermaphrodite seems to relentless in her attentions, but passionate beyond belief.
Change "attentions" to "attention" and remove the "but"

>With animal savagery, the Cum Witch mounts you, throwing her whole body atop you and crudely pounding your box.
Do everyone in existence a favor and replace all uses of "box" with "pussy"

>“Well, keep looking; if I wanted a girl I’d be busy with one of my nieces right now.”.
Excess period.

The Succubus Gardener's scenes are full of dialogue that opens with a plain quotation but closes with a fancy opening quotation.

>The writhe and twist against one another, in constant, aching motion,
"They" not "The"

>The size of the glistening, girlspunk-stained stalk seems perfectly suited to keeping your lips your comfortably stretched.
Redundant second "your"

>Your tiny button seems dwarfed by the tube enveloping it, but that doesn’t make it feel heavenly.
Add "any less" after "feel"

Factory mechanic, pre-fight scene.
>Tiny insect, you have little to offer me, but everything to offer our facility. Why don’t you come along quietly?”“You’re going down!” you yell at him as you ready your
Pressing Fight will add on your self-insert quote, but not even correctly space it.

Corrupt Farm, first mention.
>Now you feel nothing but contempt.
Add a comma after now, it fits the scene better.

>“ Oh, just one more thing. I will be expecting a cut. Seeing as how I’m invested in your little operation now and all. Shall we say 20 % ? If you cannot bear giving me the money yourself, just leave it underneath the rock over yonder every week. Do that and we won’t have any... problems.”
Space at the start, space before and after the percentage symbol.

>Vapula grins and her fingers reach for a breast, already fantasising about insistent pressure on her nipples.“It’ll sure as hell beat whatever disgusting thing the bitch would have me doing instead.
Spacing. Change it to "fantasizing"

Izma pregnant description.
>You also think you’ve noticed her casting you “come hither” looks more frequently than before.
Remove italics and change the fancy quotes to single plain.



RUBI'S CRAP

Rubi should get an option on his confession that you're only into girls without outright rejecting him. Prompting him to want to change for you as he normally would with his content anyway. Would require additional writing.

After Rubi's Place option.
>The two of you continue through a carefully tended garden and through the front door.
Everything before this should be in its own window, with a next button leading to everything after it.

>Rubi flashes several people throughout your “date”, sometimes even walking around topless, or bottomless.
Replace fancy quotation with single plain.

>Thoughts of keeping her “secret” are long gone, it seems.
Replace fancy quotation with single plain.
Completely remove this if he doesn't have a dick, as that is what this is about.

Split Rubi's Give Item menu in two, leaving the consumables in this and adding a Give Clothes button next Give Item and Get Dressed.

>Rubi’s face is soft and rounded, her lips painted a dusky black, her green eyes framed with eyeliner, belying her masculine origins.
The "belying her masculine origins." should be cut when she's a full girl, for those who changed her specifically for not wanting a boy.

>You offer Rubi your arm, like a lady should, which she accepts graciously, and you escort her inside.
Like a lady should even though I played as a complete guy and Rubi as a girl?

When offering Rubi Reducto, it presents the Penis option even without Rubi having one.

After giving Rubi clothes, it should boot you to the previous Closet menu, not her main one.

Move the Back button in her Closet menu to the bottom right.

Add a Back button to Rubi's Talk menu.

REMINDER to self to add to the bounty board: a quick scene where you leave Rubi's home and head back to your camp.

Train scene.
>her hands explore her tender body, focusing just for a moment on her pair of C-cup supple breasts and nipples,
Switch "X-xup" and "supple"




AKBAL BONUS ROUND

>Quite clearly, this “God” hasn’t had much action for quite some time,
No need for italics on "God".

>He glares at you with his burning green eyes as you  begin to stand over him,
Double space after "you"

>his expression turning comically from rage to confusion to one of sheer lust, the feline licking his lips despite his own flavor on them.
What is this sentence?

>Your less-than-willing partner adds his own groan to yours,
Groaning growl?

>the twitching of his meat signalling that he’s not quite to opposed to the idea as he makes out.
"the twitching of his meat signaling that he’s not quite so opposed to the idea as he makes himself out to be."

>The sensation of his immense cock filling you up causes you to shudder, before leaning into the demon, pressing your softball-sized jugs against his, reveling in his silky fur stroking multiple parts of your body all at once.
This whole sentence is a mess. It also makes it sound like he has tits if you have them.

>furthering your lust as yYou use his groin roughly,
yYou

>The yowling male takes off, ducking his head to lick and nip at your nipples.
Takes off? What? "ducking" should be replaced with "moving" to generalize for player size.

>his combined efforts of mouth, shaft and tail force you over the edge,
Oxford comma.