Witch B

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nqbjFYqzNhE


Pastebin 2  storytelling, characters, personality, pacing, logic, dialogue critique

We find out the script writer prefers to write his characters as passive as possible. Normally in this scene any self-respecting spy/infiltrator would kill the guards instead of letting them sleep soundly.
Then the writer/director proceeds with abysmal practices such as making the character talk out loud to himself instead of keeping his thoughts inside his fucking brain.

1:45 WHAT THE HELL ARE YOU DOING? Are... are you fucking serious? That's your plan? So you go on a 2-man trip to infiltrate the castle in an attempt to "steal" weapons and explosive kegs by... dropping them off the castle in a river and hoping nobody notices? "Stealing" being a very loose word considering how idiotic and bad he is at it. Our intelligent rebel leader, ladies and gentlemen.
 So he infiltrates the castle to "steal" weapons and explosive barrels, only to be found out. Because his attempt at "stealing" is grabbing some barrels 1 by 1 and dropping them off the castle in the river and hoping nobody looks.
2:06 That's plan B? so instead of trying to minimize detection and try to play it off as a mistake by the guards... HE CREATES EVEN MORE AWARENESS AND GETS AN ENTIRE ARMY TO CHASE HIM OFF INSTEAD OF JUST A SMALL GROUP.

4:36 Ok at least the writers already knew about the extended powers the witches had before season 2. Her grandma is using her Jedi mind powers to suggest her who to invite over.
4:49 Yeah this is the kind of writing and directing we will be getting throughout the entire show. Normally Hay Lin would say fuck this and just open the closet herself to know before all the other 4 what's going on.

5:47 - oh so it was a personal mission to recover their fathers/people's stolen weapon? it was a whiny cry of a 5 year old attempting a pitiful spit against Phobos? What the fuck was that infiltration "mission" about? It makes about as much sense as the next thing they do.
5:55 - kind of exaggerated to bring an army for just 2 people. But okay. Maybe that's "small" compared to their total amount? No it's because they're the main characters so of course we have to autistically Zerg over the main characters... who can't even fight. It's not like Caleb+his friend are one of those characters like John Wick where not even 3 armies are enough. Caleb is actually very underpowered throughout the series. Same for Will in season 1, and even season 2.

6:09 It isn't the fact that it looks bigger than it is, it's the script writer being a failure. Originally the artist drew it to be bigger, but the director/script writer shat all over it. I commend the artist for trying to make something good compared to the retarded director.
6:27 Again the passiveness of the writer shows greatly. Instead of the army just stomping down without a care they just sit there like it's the Grand Canyon or something. Cedric's snake form is half that canyon's height for fucks sake. (maybe the entire canyon's height)

7:22 I would never utilize the mundane school setting as a way and a location where to present my characters,  and I especially would never use any type of annoying mentally-handicapped characters like the "bullies", "mascot/pet", "rich spoiled kid", "the swanky pessimist" in any of my shows without delivering a firm "Kill Dolores Umbridge" message to anyone who tries to involve these sabotaging caricature type characters into an art medium.

9:02 "Hey! keep all that noise down! I was being ironic"  God the writer is such an autist. Apparently the writer doesn't consider this anything but a dumb pre-teen cartoon show. This right here is your future, 2010s. I mean they could have autistically stayed silent for 5 hours in universe.
9:12 "Hello! who cares?"  every fucking viewer who wants to learn about the characters' backstory and have a normal long-winded conversation, you bitch.  Decent voice tho. Yeah this writer is too autistic to write functioning charming conversations. With writers like these who needs shut-in introverts, he's got you covered.
Ok we doing an action first, exposition later kind of storytelling, ok fine. "Good and Eeeeeviil" Please don't do this shit.  Please don't call the elf an "entity". There's a bunch of cartoons where the characters feel scared and not ready, but everyone here is taking it in really calmly. I mean no freak outs or at least no exaggerated ones.
Ok so do we get to see the other planets being overtaken by Phobos? including Earth? No, not really. The battle is a secret. Is there a literal gigantic dark rose growing on top of Meridian and spreading throughout all the planets? Again no. Just a metaphor for "eeeevviil roots"
I was ready to say the grandma needs to prove her bullshit theory that they're the guardians, but yes she does. I didn't expect the writer to have the decency of "proving" stuff. Everyone is still a bit too ready and on point in proving their elements without a second thought.
14:15 - You have been chosen as the new guardians of the veil *cue generic epic music. God that is so cliche and boring. Normally if you want a good cohesive storytelling you do not separate action and exposition. You do not tell the heroes "You have been selected" and the heroes go "When do we start?"
Normally you make the action happen naturally by making the heroes discover the power accidentally or prove themselves instead of simply being handed the power.  Not even Super Sentai shows and secret agent shows have this level of corny briefing and official "missions". Normally events have to happen more naturally than this.
14:27 oh all that corny out loud exposition, but Phobos mentioning that he can spy through the power gem is too much? fucking French writers.  14:34 (Lifts it off her neck and weights it down on the table like that heart weights a ton) "Sorry it's too weird, I can't "  FINALLY some natural behaviour and reactions.  And of course the transition back to Caleb happens right here in order to create suspense that apparently Will doesn't accept the responsibility. So bloody cliche. From this silent interpretation it almost feels like Phobos influenced Will to take it off.
15:05 (Caleb must go to Earth because he found out the rightful heir to the throne is there) normally this is where I'd say I was wrong, but this only proves that action and exposition can seamlessly work together without wasting so much fucking time like grandma's exposition and Caleb's wasteful infiltration mission.  Why the fuck didn't you do this in the first place, script writer?
16:20  Oh so Will accepted after all? Last time on Witch, she left us hanging with "Sorry, I just can't"  She also left us hanging with that glorious "Cookies?" delivery. Guess the writer hates transitional scenes.
16:24 (Blonde girl thinks it was parlor tricks)  once again... no not the annoying skepticism cliche, but the writer once again through his characters indirectly shows off his own personality that's he a boring passive aggressive moron who cannot storytell worth a shit.
"I can't imagine your grandma wearing that" "What have we got behind us? what have we got in front of us?" again the 2000s shows off a lot through their snarky one liners, but where are all the intellectual emotional lines? This is a problem which most 2000s action shows always had, they can never put the snark aside to be genuinely non-ironic for one second. So whenever they do attempt emotion they utterly fail at it, just like Ben 10. You can't feel but roll your eyes off at how pathetic and hypocritical they are it. No wonder they lost Elyon to Cedric so easily.
The problem I have with those designs aside from looking kinda ugly and not as cute as their children selves, is the fact that they still retain their mentally stunted personalities. It would be like Batman acting like Bruce Wayne or Superman like Clark Kent. Manchildren as all hell. Ben 10 did the same thing Witch did and it was awful. I really hate Captain Shazam too.
18:50 Oh and Will naturally knows how to turn off the powers, but doesn't have the insight to realize that Hay Lin might still be flying. A hint at how bad she is as a leader and how bad the writer is at slow-evened pacing and logic.
20:00 I love how the intellectual/nerd quickly responds, while Will is actually frozen with fear like a normal human being. Unfortunately this shows a lot about her lack of qualities as a leader. She's horrible under stress and horrible with decisions.
"Close the portal"  "How?"  Oh you know how to power on and depower, and cast attack spells but you don't know how to close portals, that's fucking rich.
"It happened so fast" That's what she... actually perhaps Will should consider quitting if the writing and "action sequences" of this cartoon are "so fast" for her.
20:49 "Don't blame yourselves" but you did suck ass Will, seriously you're a worse leader than TMNT's Leonardo and Simba from Lion King. "I don't, I blame her. She totally blew it" That's the spirit! wait... oh you bitch. Oh this motherfucking bitch is going to be my favourite character.  Oh now you're all reacting properly and in real time to her snark.
"Irma this is serious" exactly what the fuck I was talking about, but please Asian girl shush, let the 2000s cracker have a go at it. I think Irma and Cornelia would make a great snark team.
"I know, you think I'm not scared?" Not with that Spiderman humour you aren't.
Is the grandma going to be their Uncle Iroh/tutor/mentor who actually teaches them everything? NO.   She's retired, go figure it out on your own, Ben 10/Juniper Lee/American Dragon/TMNT/Xiaolin Showdown.
21:30 "Don't fight, you only have each other" and then they fought for the rest of the series and made pathetic mistakes every single time.  And this ladies and gentlemen is why you don't hire the worst of the worst writers from the 2000s. Want good synergy and positive vibes? no. Want professionalism? no. Want heroes winning because of careful planning and effort rather than dumb luck and accidents? Absolutely NO.
Yeah it's one of those writers.  Yeah it's one of those shows.
There's 2 types of shows/writers. The ones which write the characters as actually intelligent, humble, sensitive, caring, deserving of power and those Ash Ketchum/Ben 10-tier characters who just have all the power dropped onto them accidentally because "there's no one left". Those type of characters who just "wing it", the 5/10 heroes who don't know the first thing about being a hero.
As for the writer, again there's 2 types of writers. Those who allow the heroes victories and write in fake defeats which only lead to more victories, the pro-fun writers, the optimistic positive writers who can write charming lovable characters. And then the "Ash Ketchum" writers who just love denying everything, teasing, making the "hero" so dimwitted, so dense in the head, so idiotic that you feel the need to get down there and show him how it's done. Witch is the second type of show with the second type of writer.
Witch is the loser show. Witch is the Ben 10 show. Witch is the Naruto show.
Instead of being honest and saying "we're losers, let's quit" they instead have to trudge through it and never admit "maybe my friends are shit, maybe our relationship is shit, maybe I'm not a good hero, maybe I should find someone better suited than me, maybe I should cancel the show and get some better writers" etc.
That's all I had to say. More commentaries and more overviews and reviews of each episode will be done when I have time to watch the whole series again in HD.