2014-11-07 Workshop: invention corrections

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To move to another level:
 - you must be in this class at least 8 weeks
 - you must have good (>80%) attendance
 - I must think your writing is good enough for Int. 1
	= not too many grammatical mistakes
	= organization that makes sense
	= writing that is not too simple

	My invention is a car. It will drive
very fast. It will also fly. It will cost
$50,000. Everyone will want to buy it. It
will make it easy to go to work.

(This paragraph doesn't have mistakes, but it is very very simple.)
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would: hypothetical = something you imagine in your mind
will: real prediction = something you expect to happen

If you already have the invention, use "will".
- My invention will solve many problems. (prediction)

If you are only imagining it, use "would".
- My invention would solve many problems. (imagination)
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It's difficult to read a "wall of text". If you start to talk about a new idea, start a new paragraph.
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Every person needs this invention.

NOT: Every people need...
NOT: Everybody need... (should be "Everybody needs...")

Everybody needs..., Everyone needs..., etc.

"every" is singular
"all" is plural

All people need this invention.
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for/to:

for + noun
This invention will be good for everyone.
I made my invention for people who can't sleep.

to + verb
You can use this invention to learn languages.
It will help you to wake up.

The invention will be for people to build things.

It will allow people to remember a lot of information.

I went to the store for milk.
I went to the store to  buy  milk.

WRONG: ...for buy milk.

OK: I use my computer to  send    email.
OK: I use my computer for sending email.