Title:
The title ‘Snowflakes’ does catch my attention since I do like short titles that are simple and this title is also referenced several times in the oneshot so that’s good! I certainly assumed that it would be related to Christmas and since it is the Christmas season, I was not disappointed.

Appearance (graphic/poster):
The graphic provides a really winter-y, dreamy feel, capturing the intent of the story. Both boys also look really dreamy so the poster is really well done!

Foreword/Description:
The description is short and sweet and does not give away the story too much. However, this is just a personal preference ^^;; maybe you could’ve added in how the world in the story works because I was quite confused between the hierarchy between the Northern and Southern elves and why having an underaged mate was almost as if it was the end of the world. Maybe you could’ve added that in the foreword/description?

Characterisation:
Jeongguk is a very naive and innocent child who didn’t grow up in a very well-off background. He’s naturally kind hearted and cares about others. He takes a turn for the worse when Taehyung “betrays” him and leaves. Personally, I feel that more could have been explained about his change of heart since we were left hanging with him trying to forget Taehyung (and suddenly he develops magic powers and is full of hatred). I’m assuming he was overthinking Taehyung’s betrayal and turns “evil”.

From the story, Taehyung is a really sweet person who’s really thoughtful towards Jeongguk and it’s evident that he really loves Jeongguk. He tries to be strong on the outside even though we could see his struggle, and in the end, he chose to run away. It was nice to see him explain and salvage his relationship with Jeongguk, even though it was to save the village.

Grammar and Spelling:
Flawless. A small thing I’ve noticed was that you switched from Jeongguk to Jungkook in the middle of the oneshot, then switched back. Other than that, grammar and spelling were amazing!

Plot, originality and flow:
The plot was enjoyable and how you described the surroundings and their emotions really made me feel for the characters. Originality was there as I’ve never really read a oneshot like that. Flow was alright and it made sense since the story was focused on Yulemas!

Overall enjoyment:
I really enjoyed this oneshot and it made me emotional at times :”) I could really imagine the scenery and gave me a bit of Frozen feels when Jeongguk was being angry and powerful hahahaha

Reviewer’s note (what you want to conclude/say to the author):
Good work! I really love how you describe everything and took the time to write such a long oneshot!