Inferior Knight 3.4 (Proofreader_M)

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[22]
The road home was tranquility itself.
The route home was quiet and peaceful.
    [m] a. Spelling... tranquility ==> tranquillity
	[m] b. Since this character is narrating, they should be referring to the state of the 'route' and not the 'road' itself. Also, the sentence works, but consider...
Option 1 - The road home was tranquil.
Option 2 - The route home was quiet and peaceful.
Option 3 - The road home was quiet and peaceful.

[23]
[side] Hahaha
[side] Hahaha...
	[m] The punctuation effect is for continuous laughter...

It's truly relieving to see the village...
It is truly a relief to see the village...
    [m] The sentence works but also consider...
	Option 1 {Present tense} - It is truly a relief to see the village.
	Option 2 {Old English} - It truly brings such relief to see the village.

[24]
huh...?
Huh...?
    [m] Capital "H."

I haven't remembered the feeling of "homecoming" for a long time as well, but...
I haven't recalled the feeling of returning home for a long time, but...
    [m] Adding changes makes it grammatically correct, and emphasises that this is a reemerging feeling and connected to a sensation from the past.

[25]
Although not long has passed since I started living here, it feels like I've possessed an attachment to Murgh Village.
Although not long has passed since I started living here, it feels like I've developed an attachment to Murgh Village.
    [m] Word choice was irregular. This felt more natural to use.


[26]
[fancy] It's light as a feather because of my magic!
[fancy] It's as light as a feather due to magic!
    [m]a. Grammatical fixes.
    [m]b. Refers to cause and sounds more cheeky/cocky.

[27]
[overlay above head] Al-san was suuuper dependable and amazing!!
[overlay above head] Al-san was extremely dependable and amazing!!
    [m]a. Grammatical fixes.
    [m]b. Super is 'cute' but not for someone who is held in regard in her village.., to that 'extremely' (or 'extraordinarily') is (shows) more young adult (maturity), also cute and shows support for another character.



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