2019-06-05 Writing: descriptive details, student lounge

Greg Malivuk
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http://www.pastebin.com/u/gmalivuk - Notes from all classes
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Homework: add details to the two descriptions on p. 116, if you haven’t already
4 The inside of the taxicab is dirty.
- There is a lot of trash on the floor.
- The door handle is greasy.
- There is an empty can on the floor.
- There is ketchup on the seat.
- There are some coffee stains on the seat.
- It smells like vomit.
5 The student cafeteria is noisy and crowded.
- There is a long line in front of the cashier.
- There are 300 students shouting.
- The air is not so fresh.
- There is loud music playing.
- You can’t hear the people next to you.
- There is no place to sit down.
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p. 116 practice 5 - Read the description of the student lounge. Is this a good description? Is it interesting? Does it help you imagine the lounge (if you didn’t have a picture on the page)?

Add details and and descriptive words to make the paragraph more interesting.

    During last month’s college tour, I was very impressed with the student lounge at the dorm. The lounge was quite spacious. It was very easy to move around and many students can use it without being too crowded. In the center, there were some comfortable couches. They looked luxurious and modern and were arranged around a table. To the left, there was a pool table. It was bright and clean. In the corner behind the pool table, the lounge had a convenient modern kitchen. Along the back wall, to the right of a dining table, there was a large new TV and a wide and comfortable study area. It wasn’t too bright, which makes it easier to study. The student lounge was really beautiful and I look forward to using it.
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Outline of the lecture all paragraph:
Title: The New Lecture Hall
Topic sentence: Our community college’s beautiful new lecture all is spacious, modern, and comfortable.
A  The front wall
	1  screen - projecting and presentations
	2  whiteboard
	3  clock
	4  light switches
	5  two chairs
B  The front of the lecture hall
	1  desk
		a  projector
		b  computer
	2  lectern
C  The main part of the lecture hall
	1  30 rows of seats
		a  description of seats
		b  folding tabletops
		c  3 feet of space between rows
Concluding sentence: To sum up, our new lecture hall is a pleasing and comfortable place to learn.
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Write an outline about a room in your house (here or in your country). Decide on the space order you’ll use. For the outline, don’t worry about descriptive adjectives or specific details.
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Homework: Use your outline to write a paragraph about the room. Include descriptive language and specific details to give a reader an image in their mind. (Tomorrow, another student will try to draw the layout of the room using your description.)