Desert Cave Dungeon Cleanup

════════════════════════════════════╡Desert Cave╞════════════════════════════════════


───────────────┤MISCELLANEOUS FIXES├───────────────

The tooltips for the pink and brown pill spoil the rather obvious but still "puzzle" for what they do. This should be ammended.

Taking a brown pill.
>Now if you ever re-grow a vagina, you should be fine.
But I've never had a vagina. This was done while lacking both genitals.

If you use Enter after beating Sanura in any way it doesn't move you a tile ahead to the next room as it should and instead procs the fight on the tile that it supposed to be outside. This doesn't happen if you use Leave to go back to your camp, come back, and use North.

The "Fuck Two" option of the pregnant sand witches should be grayed out instead of completely removed to stay consistent with other options. "This scene requires you to have two cocks."

>brought back to the sand-witches
Remove the hyphen.

>Who cares-your hands are finally free.
Em dash or comma?

>playing with and pitching your nipples
Pinching.

>With a toy-prick still in your mouth, you smile and shake your head 'yes'.
"With a toy-prick still in your mouth, you smile and nod."

>You bend your knees up and hover your drooling pussy over the cat-cock and slam down onto it with no hesitation.
Move the vaginal virginity loss to come after this sentence.

>yourself onto the sand-witch’s
Another wrong hyphen. Probably just ctrl + f to see if there are others like this still.

>After your first appointment with the Cum-Witch,
God dammit.

>by these witches and their “cocks.”
This should not be italicized.




┌────────┐
│ Sanura │
└────────┘
Outside tile example:
╔════════════╤════════════╤════════════╤════════════╤════════════╗
║   Sphinx   │            │            │            │            ║
╟────────────┼────────────┼────────────┼────────────┼────────────╢
║            │   North    │            │            │            ║
╟────────────┼────────────┼────────────┼────────────┼────────────╢
║            │   Leave    │            │ Inventory  │    Map     ║
╚════════════╧════════════╧════════════╧════════════╧════════════╝
Sphinx gets changed to Sanura once you've interacted with her.

There are a lot of different and redundant menu variations depending on how you interact with her. Some appear like when using Back in her Fuck menu,

Sanura's menu example:
╔════════════╤════════════╤════════════╤════════════╤════════════╗
║ Appearance │Riddle Game │    Fuck    │            │            ║
╟────────────┼────────────┼────────────┼────────────┼────────────╢
║            │            │            │            │            ║
╟────────────┼────────────┼────────────┼────────────┼────────────╢
║            │            │            │            │    Back    ║
╚════════════╧════════════╧════════════╧════════════╧════════════╝

Scene Request: Some small and minor Talk options for Sanura. Things like "Job", "Sand Witches", and "Home" come to mind.

Make the mini-map not render if the player has not moved into the first tile of the dungeon past Sanura once. This builds a little suspence and helps to set the tone of discovery. it would probably show for the first time to the player after the sand witch mob fight, in this case. After this the map should be rendered at all times while on any tile in the dungeon even if you leave and come back.

Move the answers to her Riddle Game to always be in the first open slots and Uh, ATTACK! to be first in the second row.

Maybe add a confirmation Yes and No with the text "Are you sure this is a good idea?" to Uh, ATTACK! since it pretty much disables her afterwards. It would also further the joke that she doesn't fight you at all.

Make the menu that appears after you solve her riddle game appear as Fuck Her in the first and Back in the second slot. Back taking you to the regular tile menu. Instead of having North Door in this menu now it will be accessed via the regular tile menu.

If you choose Uh, ATTACK! it prompts you with an Enter and Leave button instead of the regular navigation ones again. This is pretty much a completely new and rather redundant menu. It should use the same text from this menu but present a Next option instead.

If at all possible, rename the North option to North Door in this tile.

Sanura's "You have lost your anal virginity." for the pegging scene needs to be moved to display after "inches of her tingly fuck-tool nestling inside you in seconds."




┌──────────────────┐
│ Sand Witches Mob │
└──────────────────┘
After a while the Sand Witches mob simply stops attacking, doing absolutely nothing for the rest of the battle. This happened after they did the vibrating butt stone and summoned a sand storm. This seems to only happen if I use Wait several times without doing something else. After i dealt a little bit of damage to them they resumed doing actions. No text is displayed either on their turn, it's just blank under the divider.

>Then again, given you’ve now proven your superiority over these witches, maybe it’s time to blow off a little steam, hmm?
The "hmm?" looks pretty stupid here. Is the narrator trying to have a conversation with me?

During the Fuck One scene after you beat the Sand Witch mob the mini-map is displayed. This should only appear after you press Next out of this scene as a sprite should be displayed here.

>Supported entirely by your body, the sand witch’s muscles go slack (aside from the ones hugging your dick).
Dumb parenthesis.

After defeating the mob and fucking them there should be a short line in the tile description of several well-fucked sand witches lazing around. This would create a more lasting feeling for the actions you take while exploring the dungeon even though it is of little consequence. It should not display again after leaving the dungeon and returning.

The Forced Lick scene is full of player dialogue.
>“Oi, milk bitches! Get over here!” you call. The defeated women morosely respond,
"As you call the milk witches over, The defeated women morosely respond,"

>Putting your hands on your perky, muscular butt, you pull your cheeks apart and command, “Lick it.”
"and command her to lick it."

>“Yes.”
"You firmly insist she does."




┌───────────┐
│ Cum Witch │
└───────────┘
>as you produced more and more milk (and children) they stopped worrying about making you stay clothed or cleaning her cum from your skin.
Remove the parenthesis from "and children".

>​A wall of many hues shimmers around the Cum Witch.
In the fight with her this is displayed at teh top after she uses a special move. But if you move into a menu like P. Specials and use back the text at the top gets removed. This shouldn't happen, and it might be the case for every instance where text at the top is shown after an enemies special move.

>Still, you keep seeing her dick every time you close your eyes, and your body is very turned on from how you were touching yourself.
This has no lust damage indicator but still seems to increase it.

The sex scenes after beating the Cum Witch all display the mini-map during them when this shouldn't be the case. It should should after you finish the sex scenes instead.

>held deep in a steamy velvet embrace that caresses it with the touch only a skilled lover provide.
"could" after "lover".

>lay back and let me take worry about it!”
Did "let me worry about it" and "let me take care of it" get mixed up here?

>The dark-skinned woman (who seems INCREDIBLY familiar) calmly approaches you as she apologizes,
Replace parethesis with em dashes.

>a tool that fine AND magic-enhanced balls, you’ll do fine.
Repetition.

>“Another woman, an olive-skinned beauty
Everything after and including this paragraph is as if it's being said by a character. Someone forgot to close off a bracket or something.

>Her tight cunny squeezes and ripples around you, rapidly growing soaked with white, thoroughly spunk-lubed and hungry for more.
Missing Oxford comma.

>the witch’s first womb with the first explosion
Repetition.

>You glaze them all before your magical virility finally wanes, slowly to a pleasured trickle.
Bad comma.

>they grow in number and strength with alarming speed.
"numbers"

There doesn't seem to be an option for Nightmare during this loss scene.

>The Cum Sorceress smiles and releases her staff.
Uncapitalize both words.

>A slowly spreading, vertical slit opens there, glistening with moisture as it parts to reveal a fresh clit. You’ve grown a cunt!
How rude to call it a cunt right away. It's a pristine, unspoiled vagina and should be referred to as such by the narrative text. Change "cunt" to "vagina".

>even though your hand is knuckle-deep in your twat.
Probably omit this if you've just grown a new vagina during this scene so the virginity check later on wont feel questionable.

>Each rambling explanation slips into your ears and settles over your dimmed mind, slipping into the thoughtless, crevices before your brain reasserts itself.
Repetition. That last comma is also pretty weird.

>but mostly your wombs”
Missing period.

>pinning you underneath their enormous weight, smooth, sweat-slicked skin sliding
That does not sound right.

>Your fuck-hole is now a little loose.When the two,
Missing space.

>but your lover is going to keep you so full... warm and packed with spunk and life.
"but your lover is going to keep you full, warm, and packed with spunk and life."

If you ask for her blessing but have no genitals simply have the game present a Next button instead that puts you back in the regular tile menu. No additional text changes are necessary for this.

In the Blessing option, move the Nevermind button to the bottom-right.




┌─────────────┐
│ Sand Mother │
└─────────────┘
╔════════════╤════════════╤════════════╤════════════╤════════════╗
║Appearance* │    Talk    │    Sex     │            │            ║
╟────────────┼────────────┼────────────┼────────────┼────────────╢
║ Buy LaBova │Buy Lactaid │Free Slaves │            │            ║
╟────────────┼────────────┼────────────┼────────────┼────────────╢
║            │            │            │            │   Leave    ║
╚════════════╧════════════╧════════════╧════════════╧════════════╝
* Writing Request: She could use an Appearance option, but it's not required. If it's not written then move everything on this row one slot to the left.

StopAttacking, Cum Witches, SandMothers, CovenStatus, and History should be moved to their own Talk option in the first button slot if no Appearance option is made, probably in that order.

Using Back on the CumWitches option brings you back to the dungeon instead of her menu. Same with StopAttacking and StartAttacking

Selecting No under the free milkslave option should return you to the Sand Mother's menu instead of just the dungeon room.

>The Sand Mother scowls, and rises from her throne. “Come with me,” she says, ushering you from the room and through the many corridors of her subterranean haven. Eventually, she brings you to the bath chamber.
Is it possible to move the player's position to said room during the talk options associated with this so it's reflected on the mini-map?

StopAttacking option when you've antagonized her.
>“Fine. I guess then...” she casts her incandescent gaze to the side, “...you won’t be able to force yourself on them.” You chuckle at that. You probably wouldn’t do something like that, at least not without provocation!/ You could see how she would think that. Slapping her on the shoulder, you congratulate her on seeing good sense. Her eyes narrow dangerously as she twists away from your touch.
Something definitely messed up here. The wording is weird and there is a wayward slash.

>tongue pumping to the same timing that drives your hips..
One period too many.

>Feeling more than a little ready yourself, you step up to her, holding each of your puppy-shafts in one hand and another in the other,
That doesn't sound right.

>veins pulsing just under the surface as you nose it up against the twin, wet pussies.Her lube-glossed gates spread
Missing space.

Both the GetMilkFill and Fuck Her options are missing an "a".

After beating her in a fight, the options Scissor and Fuck Her are both missing an "a". The "5" in TentacleBang should be changed to "five"




┌──────────┐
│ Essrayle │
└──────────┘
>Eventually the two of you decide that maybe by defeating the head witch, the one who put this spell on her, she’ll be able to leave safely.
It says this even if you've already defeated her. This should be changed to making mention of requesting her to let Essrayle go instead once you've taken care of her.

>he grins as she shakes all four breasts from side to side, their taunt green skin flush and swollen with their bulging bounty.
I think that's supposed to be "taut".

>sliding it into your virgin pussy with a gasping grunt of effort.
Virginity loss should come after this sentence.




┌───────────┐
│ Milk Bath │
└───────────┘
If you have no sexual endowments and you select Milk Girl it will prompt you an almost empty menu save for "Don't Fuck". If it's the case that no sex scenes are available, add a Next button instead and have the Don't Fuck button not display. No adjustments of the text are necessary for this change.