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CALIFORNIA POLICE DEPARTMENT, 1/8/15, Tuesday

7:25 PM

Chuck Horris scowled as he glared at the scrawny figure across him. He ran his fingers through his tousled hair. (I would really, really suggest a different name for the main character)

The scrawny male lounging across him returned his glare with a superficial smile. Chuck Horris swallowed down a biting remark. [i]Be professional[/i], he reminded himself. His goal was to solve the case of the 500 nations mass theft. Not to engage in petty squabble.

He eyed the middle-aged male across him with suspicion and revulsion. James Carpenter. The man had claimed he was an eyewitness to the case. Dark eyes, brown hair, etc. etc. (Describe his features here) With his diminutive frame, one would hardly suspect that he was a fugitive that had murdered approximately 130 people in cold blood.