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  1. [06:12:53] T-snake: Sorry I disconnected
  2. [06:12:59] T-snake: Did you get my messages?
  3. [06:13:09] CammyCapre: yeah
  4. [06:13:14] CammyCapre: it all sounds good
  5. [06:13:17] T-snake: Also, before the cubes, did we only talk about Maxerus and turning to stone
  6. [06:13:21] T-snake: Okay! Next bacth!
  7. [06:13:25] T-snake: *Batch
  8. [06:13:45] CammyCapre: what do you mean?
  9. [06:14:10] T-snake: I was going to copy and paste the conversation we had to a doc for reference, but I lost most of it
  10. [06:14:55] CammyCapre: oh
  11. [06:15:01] CammyCapre: that's a lot
  12. [06:15:05] CammyCapre: do you want me to pastebin it?
  13. [06:15:17] CammyCapre: it'll have annoying timestamps and stuff but i can pastebin everything if you want
  14. Your message is too long: Heatran: Heatran is fought in Magma Cone by only the hero because this happens RIGHT after the partner is kidnapped by one of Maxerus' main lackeys. Heatran is just angry and after he is defeated, the cave begins to collapse. Because the hero nearly died because saving Heatran from the cave-in, Heatran decides to thank the hero...we will see him again
  15. [06:15:34] T-snake: Heatran: Heatran is fought in Magma Cone by only the hero because this happens RIGHT after the partner is kidnapped by one of Maxerus' main lackeys
  16. [06:15:42] T-snake: Heatran is just angry and after he is defeated, the cave begins to collapse. Because the hero nearly died because saving Heatran from the cave-in, Heatran decides to thank the hero...we will see him again
  17. [06:15:47] T-snake: And yes please!
  18. [06:16:05] CammyCapre: yeah, i think you've gone over heatran. he's good
  19. [06:16:09] T-snake: Approval of Heatran? Or do you want to wait until we see the next part
  20. [06:16:11] T-snake: Okay!
  21. [06:16:13] CammyCapre: like, do you want me to cp EVERYTHING?
  22. [06:16:25] T-snake: Everything before the cubes
  23. [06:16:25] CammyCapre: i approve of heatran
  24. [06:16:28] CammyCapre: okay
  25. [06:16:33] T-snake: Unless everything would just be easier
  26. [06:16:57] CammyCapre: everything might be easier
  27. [06:17:50] T-snake: Next is Giratina...we know of this already. Falsely accused. Brought hero here to save Dracoris. Explains truth. Had warped hero out of cave-in. Tells why wand doesn't work.
  28. [06:18:23] CammyCapre: yeah i like the whole giratina thing
  29. [06:18:57] T-snake: And issue arises...to get the hero back into town, there are actually two different portals he needs to go through. One goes from the Distortion Realm to a large, icy mountain. Second is at the summit and that connects to the undergound base of Maxerus where the townies are being held
  30. [06:19:11] T-snake: Because rips through space are difficult yo
  31. [06:19:28] T-snake: Which brings us to...
  32. [06:20:13] T-snake: Kyurem: Kyurem appears briefly on the summit. Kyurem says nothing and just attacks. Kyurem's sole purpose is foreshadowing the sequel, where the plot revolves more around Reshiram and Zekrom.
  33. [06:20:15] CammyCapre: glhf http://pastebin.com/RRkwYj15
  34. [06:20:25] T-snake: However, the hero doesn't NEED to defeat Kyurem
  35. [06:20:44] CammyCapre: rips through space are def difficult
  36. [06:21:05] CammyCapre: oh, why?
  37. [06:21:30] T-snake: Darkrai, who had run off to grieve over what he had done in PMD 2 now that he remembers, actually talked to the player during the dungeon up the mountain and puts Kyurem to sleep once the battle gets rough and the hero escapes through the portal
  38. [06:22:03] T-snake: And now we have...the hero appears in the jail cell with the partner and a vigilante (important character in the firs third of the story)
  39. [06:22:41] CammyCapre: ah okay
  40. [06:22:46] CammyCapre: yeah this all sounds good
  41. [06:23:13] T-snake: Also, cue scene where Maxerus tries to recruit the hero. This is where readers OFFICIALLY learn the full story of why Maxerus does what he does, which makes sense now that we know the full story
  42. [06:23:41] T-snake: The hero tries to explain to Maxerus that he is wrong and humans are still alive and that the hero is a human
  43. [06:24:29] T-snake: Alas, Maxerus refuses to believe, saying even if he did, the legends still did a terrible thing to humans and that the hero is disgusting for supporting the Pokemon against Maxerus' cause
  44. [06:24:35] T-snake: (Approve of that scene)
  45. [06:25:54] CammyCapre: approve
  46. [06:26:40] T-snake: Okay so the hero is tossed back in jail
  47. [06:26:50] T-snake: Remember how Heatran wanted to thank the Hero?
  48. [06:26:56] CammyCapre: yeah
  49. [06:27:06] T-snake: here comes Heatran, barreling through the prison, freeing the hero
  50. [06:27:10] CammyCapre: yay
  51. Your message is too long: Heatran then teams up with the vigilante. The hero and partner work on getting out and getting to Maxerus, the Vigilate Agent S (Sceptile) and Heatran work on rescuing all of the townies in the jail so they may have an uprising against Maxerus' army, providing a theme that team work (the town) over comes chaos (Maxerus' main lackeys are all jealous of eachother and it messes up the flow of the army vs. townies fight)
  52. [06:29:06] T-snake: eatran then teams up with the vigilante. The hero and partner work on getting out and getting to Maxerus, the Vigilate Agent S (Sceptile) and Heatran work on rescuing all of the townies in the jail so they may have an uprising against Maxerus' army,
  53. [06:29:14] T-snake: providing a theme that team work (the town) over comes chaos (Maxerus' main lackeys are all jealous of eachother and it messes up the flow of the army vs. townies fight)
  54. [06:32:15] T-snake: Next legend is in the arc with the third partner, Rayquaza.
  55. Your message is too long: Which you probably remember, new god of Pokemon. **He tasks the small team with getting his meteor back from the human world, specifically Hoenn. The small team even encounters the pet Drapion mentioned in the first chapter of the story that the hero owned as a human and bring the meteor and Drapion back**
  56. [06:32:34] T-snake: Which you probably remember, new god of Pokemon. He tasks the small team with getting his meteor back from the human world, specifically Hoenn. The small team even encounters the pet Drapion mentioned in the first chapter of the story that the hero owned as a human and bring them back
  57. [06:32:54] T-snake: (Bold part is newly added...like literally just thought of it now that we have Gen VI)
  58. [06:33:07] T-snake: (And it just so happens, the hero was already from Mauville City)
  59. [06:33:32] T-snake: (So I thought that would work nicely and be sentimental :) )
  60. [06:33:38] CammyCapre: that all sounds great
  61. [06:33:48] T-snake: Okay good!
  62. [06:33:54] T-snake: So, back to Sky Tower
  63. [06:33:59] T-snake: The heroes make it to the top
  64. [06:34:09] T-snake: Fight off Maxerus for a while
  65. [06:34:20] T-snake: Maxerus turns the Hero to stone, upsetting the partner
  66. [06:34:37] T-snake: Agent S, the vigilante who had been chasing Maxerus for years, shows up, saying the town has been liberated
  67. [06:34:48] T-snake: Maxerus pulls out his ace in the pocket
  68. [06:35:15] T-snake: A heavy fog rolls in. Enter, the fully corrupted Dragon of Mist, Dracoris
  69. [06:35:36] CammyCapre: aw dracoris :(
  70. [06:36:16] T-snake: The partner, Agent S, Heatran, Voltier, and Terramus (the guildmaster with a mental problem that was fixed, different story arc, heart-warming too) are NO match for Maxerus and Dracoris
  71. [06:36:22] T-snake: All hope is lost...
  72. [06:36:28] T-snake: But then...the sky clears...
  73. [06:36:36] T-snake: The fog is gone...but then is gets super windy
  74. [06:37:09] T-snake: This gale hints to Heatran what is to come. Heatran bows, and prays to his God of Pokemon.
  75. [06:37:14] CammyCapre: is it rayquaza
  76. [06:37:15] CammyCapre: yay
  77. [06:37:18] CammyCapre: inb4 castform
  78. [06:37:25] T-snake: Maxerus, who as we know, doesn't know the correct story, is baffled
  79. [06:37:38] T-snake: "Arceus won't save you now! What cliche fake!"
  80. [06:38:03] CammyCapre: lmao
  81. [06:38:14] T-snake: And enter, the third partner, onix, and Seviper, dropping from the sky off of a "shooting star"
  82. [06:38:39] CammyCapre: niceee
  83. [06:38:42] T-snake: Maxerus: Shooting star...*looks off in the distance to see shooting star is making a u-turn right at him and Dracoris*
  84. [06:38:42] CammyCapre: going good
  85. [06:38:59] T-snake: Enter: Rayquaza
  86. [06:39:14] CammyCapre: /learn mightyena, u-turn
  87. [06:39:19] CammyCapre: "Mightyena can't learn U-turn"
  88. [06:39:38] CammyCapre: i read it wrong :(
  89. [06:39:42] T-snake: Lol I meant the sinking feeling of seeing what he thinks is a shooting star turn around and come back
  90. [06:39:44] T-snake: Yeah lol
  91. [06:40:01] CammyCapre: he should probably try and use u-turn though at this point
  92. [06:40:06] T-snake: Maxerus' back up army arrives, this one is full of Hydregion
  93. [06:40:09] T-snake: Yes he should
  94. [06:40:18] T-snake: Anyways, his Hydregion's appear
  95. [06:40:24] T-snake: Final battle
  96. [06:40:39] T-snake: Terramus, Voltier, Agent S, and Heatran vs. Hydregion Army
  97. [06:40:40] T-snake: AND
  98. [06:40:51] T-snake: Partner and Rayquaza vs. Maxerus and Dracoris
  99. [06:41:17] CammyCapre: wait so is hero dead now
  100. [06:41:27] CammyCapre: yeah
  101. [06:41:28] T-snake: Dracoris is also a European dragon, as in he can fly, so sky battle, full of Maxerus and the partner invading eachother's "Dragon" to fight
  102. [06:41:32] T-snake: Yes for now
  103. [06:42:01] CammyCapre: okay that sounds good
  104. [06:42:49] T-snake: Oh and Drapion too, fighting the Hydregion
  105. [06:43:07] CammyCapre: ah yep
  106. [06:43:13] T-snake: At the end, Dracoris falls and the Hydregion are all defeated
  107. [06:43:49] T-snake: The team (partners, Voltier, Agent S, etc) surround Maxerus. But Maxerus still wants a fight
  108. [06:44:10] T-snake: Dracoris awakens and slams Maxerus off the Sky Tower, rendering PROBABLY dead
  109. [06:44:34] CammyCapre: yaaas dracoris
  110. [06:45:49] T-snake: Happiness is restored, Terramus problem is cured so guild goes on as normal (long story short, mental problem was due to a battle with Reshiram and Zekrom that Voltier and him had long ago). Turns out, it was a strange problem where SUNLIGHT made him loopy
  111. [06:46:15] T-snake: (Yes, irony here that the plant Pokemon became allergic to sunlight)
  112. [06:46:19] CammyCapre: oh weird
  113. [06:46:20] CammyCapre: lol
  114. [06:46:49] T-snake: But being locked in a jail cell underground helped them notice the problem and THEN coming outside to heavy fog and wind blocked the sun more.
  115. [06:46:51] T-snake: But yeah
  116. [06:46:54] T-snake: HAPPY TIMES
  117. [06:46:58] T-snake: Excpet hero is dead...for now
  118. [06:47:03] T-snake: Last legend: Arceus
  119. [06:47:03] CammyCapre: yay
  120. [06:47:29] CammyCapre: yeah arceus is like 'but should we let you back into pmd world' and then he's like 'yeah you can go back to pmd world u cool'
  121. [06:48:35] T-snake: Arceus thanks the hero and decides to send him home, but the hero comes from a broken afamily and his father died with him. So Arceus decides to hold a council to decide: send the hero to the after life or send him back to the PMD world
  122. [06:50:18] CammyCapre: uh-huh
  123. [06:50:22] CammyCapre: that's good
  124. [06:50:25] T-snake: Rayquaza, Lugia, Ho-oh, and Dracoris all justify the hero's incredible growth as a person, from a lonely individual from a broken life to, through a second chance, a brave hero, proving that Giratina made a wise choice in what soul to bring to the PMD world
  125. [06:51:01] T-snake: Cause as we've learned from other tittles, it seems like humans tend to foil Maxerus' plan...so what better way to stop Maxerus then one final, strong-hearted human.
  126. [06:51:19] T-snake: And those humans were allowed to stay...so why shouldn't this one?
  127. [06:52:51] T-snake: So the hero is allowed to stay
  128. [06:53:12] T-snake: His spirit is sent back and the hero and partner are reunited
  129. [06:53:15] T-snake: OH and I forgot
  130. [06:53:20] T-snake: What makes this sweeter
  131. [06:53:31] CammyCapre: oh nice
  132. [06:53:33] CammyCapre: sugar
  133. [06:53:37] CammyCapre: makes it sweeter
  134. [06:53:39] CammyCapre: sugar party
  135. [06:54:08] T-snake: Is not only was the hero important part of the partner's journey, in the first third helping her join the guild and helping her grow her confidence
  136. [06:54:11] T-snake: As I said, SHE
  137. [06:54:25] CammyCapre: inb4 married
  138. [06:54:26] T-snake: Love interest that is built SLOWLY through the story
  139. [06:54:42] T-snake: Nah lol at least this story ends here. Maybe the sequel
  140. [06:54:51] T-snake: I THINK
  141. [06:55:03] T-snake: THe last planned chapter I had was from the dad's point of view
  142. [06:55:44] T-snake: On his way to the afterlife, he is "somehow" (coughGiratinacough) allowed to pass through the PMD world as a spirit
  143. [06:56:39] T-snake: "That brave Torchic (the hero)...his smile is familiar...I can't put my finger on it...makes me miss Tristan (hero's name)"
  144. [06:56:43] T-snake: It played out something like that
  145. [06:56:55] CammyCapre: aww <3
  146. [06:56:57] CammyCapre: that's cute
  147. [06:57:12] T-snake: Yeah
  148. [06:57:19] T-snake: So origin of the story
  149. [06:57:21] CammyCapre: yeah, the whole story seems really solid
  150. [06:57:26] T-snake: Thanks man :)
  151. [06:57:32] T-snake: See that means a lot and you will see why
  152. [06:57:44] CammyCapre: ? what does?
  153. [06:57:52] CammyCapre: the solidity??
  154. [06:58:13] T-snake: The fact I might finally be able to publish this story somewhere online AND it be a good fanfiction
  155. [06:58:26] T-snake: So middle school me would finish his work SO early, that I would spend time doodling ideas out for games.
  156. [06:59:08] T-snake: Many never got anywhere. But two stood out. I had almost pretty much on paper, created mechanics, characters, basic plot, etc of a Mystery Dungeon and Metroid "game"
  157. [06:59:33] T-snake: Fastforward, I later decided to turn the Mystery Dungeon one into a story shortly after I discovered fanfiction.net
  158. [06:59:53] T-snake: So i solidified the plot, added some character development, and boom: a possible story
  159. [07:00:12] T-snake: However, I didn't feel my writing style was good enough so I stopped after the first third and took it down
  160. [07:00:53] T-snake: But now that I'm like a freshman at ND, I feel like I've grown enough to be able to keep track of such a story and write it novel-styled on fanfiction.net
  161. [07:01:00] T-snake: So it is like child-hood reborn for me
  162. [07:02:23] CammyCapre: oh awesome
  163. [07:02:27] CammyCapre: that's really great
  164. [07:02:56] T-snake: Yeah so a big thank you for helping me make this a possibility again
  165. [07:02:58] T-snake: :)
  166. [07:03:29] T-snake: I pretty much gave up after Gen VI was announced: too outdated
  167. [07:03:54] T-snake: This story is from like 2008/2009 and Pokemon has changed a little too much I felt for it to make sense
  168. [07:04:51] T-snake: Also, if you have any contact information such as email or what not, I'd like to contact you again once I find the old draft of the character list. Many are minor enough to change their species to something more modern so alance out the old vs. new count
  169. [07:05:06] CammyCapre: i'm happy to help! :)
  170. [07:05:13] T-snake: I attempted as I said in Gen V, but it didn't last
  171. [07:05:17] CammyCapre: i never really use my email so that's hopeless
  172. [07:05:23] T-snake: Anything else?
  173. [07:05:34] CammyCapre: you can follow my fanfiction.net account that has a shockingly outdated bio if you want
  174. [07:05:42] T-snake: Oh sure man!
  175. [07:05:46] CammyCapre: my work on there isn't amazing, except for my collab w/ my bestie
  176. [07:05:46] T-snake: I'll PM you on there
  177. [07:05:54] CammyCapre: fanfiction.net/~skittysaysmeow
  178. [07:06:01] CammyCapre: i typed that out so idk if it'll work lol hold on
  179. [07:06:02] T-snake: Cool cool thanks again man!
  180. [07:06:11] CammyCapre: works
  181. [07:06:16] CammyCapre: no problem!
  182. [07:06:21] CammyCapre: ignore the whole thing
  183. [07:06:24] CammyCapre: like literally all of it
  184. [07:06:26] T-snake: And, if you have time, I have the Guild NEARLY memorized
  185. [07:06:28] CammyCapre: it's embarrassing
  186. [07:06:48] T-snake: So if you'd like to alter some species or you think it is balanced enough (or that I don't need to be THAT balanced)
  187. [07:07:00] T-snake: LOL I will man
  188. [07:07:31] CammyCapre: oh okay, although i doubt it'll need change, or at least much of it
  189. [07:07:46] T-snake: Yeah I may just change like side-characters
  190. [07:07:49] T-snake: Like townies
  191. [07:08:05] CammyCapre: ah yeah that makes sense
  192. [07:08:09] T-snake: So, at the top, we have Terramus and Voltier, a Carnivine and Luxray
  193. [07:08:51] T-snake: I have described their general personalities so far. Terramus is an enigma and bizzare due to his condition and Voltier is responsible, tempermental, and the unofficial leader of the guild
  194. [07:09:50] T-snake: Lucario (forgot the nickname): Is a professional explorer. Not much of a part in the story. Some dialogue. Dies during the expedition to one of Maxerus' lackeys (like a 1/3rd into the story, pre-Ice Cube)
  195. [07:10:18] T-snake: Shelgon (DAMN FORGOT NAME): Also not a MAJOR part. He knows the lay of the land well so he helps out there several times
  196. [07:11:17] CammyCapre: i like them all
  197. [07:11:17] T-snake: Vayne, a very, well, vain Machoke. He attempts to help in hairy situations, but it doesn't go over well often times. He is used for minor comedy relief too
  198. [07:11:28] CammyCapre: >Vayne
  199. [07:11:30] CammyCapre: >Is vain
  200. [07:11:36] CammyCapre: i love it
  201. [07:12:00] T-snake: Wilt the Shelder. Always getting into trouble. Actually, he plays the main role in the team's first resuce mission. Adorable character. Just puny.
  202. [07:12:03] T-snake: Haha yeah
  203. [07:12:14] CammyCapre: aw shellder is so cute
  204. [07:12:26] T-snake: And the last three who rival Voltier in story relevance
  205. [07:13:01] T-snake: Erebrus: The Guild's sentry. He is MAJOR comic relief due to the fact he acts so bizzare and is constantly being beaten up on by Voltier
  206. [07:13:14] T-snake: (He's a Murkrow...so just imagine an annoying Murkrow)
  207. [07:13:35] CammyCapre: lmao
  208. [07:13:41] T-snake: Agent S: *ship just hit land after voyage to Northern Continent* LAND HO!
  209. [07:13:43] CammyCapre: murkrow could be annoying very easily
  210. [07:13:50] T-snake: Erebrus: Hoes? Where?!
  211. [07:13:56] CammyCapre: oh god XD
  212. [07:13:56] T-snake: Voltier: NOT NOW
  213. [07:14:05] T-snake: That was one of the classics I remember
  214. [07:14:07] CammyCapre: what species is voltier again? Luxray, right?
  215. [07:14:12] T-snake: Yes
  216. [07:14:30] T-snake: Up next, Levator the Claydol
  217. [07:14:56] CammyCapre: Claydol <3
  218. [07:15:13] T-snake: An avid stone collector and one of the teams closest Non-team member friends., He is bizzare, speaks jumbled up sentences, but knows how to fight and is very intelligent
  219. [07:16:01] CammyCapre: that sounds like what a claydol would be like
  220. [07:16:17] T-snake: Mhmm! And it meshes with the story well for several missions
  221. [07:16:50] T-snake: Liek I said, I didn't go into deep detail about most of the story: Bowie and Levator have good character developments along with Voltier and Terramus
  222. [07:17:02] T-snake: Also, lastly, Bowie (like the knife) the Scyther
  223. [07:17:42] T-snake: Basically, your hardcore female character. Pulls through for the gang several times along with Levator and is one of the fast friends that the heroes make near the beginning
  224. [07:17:59] CammyCapre: bowie sounds cool
  225. [07:18:29] T-snake: Her and Levator were kind of lonely in the guild before. They found the other members, as readers will, to be extremely bizarre and radical. So they take a liking to the heroes quickly
  226. [07:19:12] CammyCapre: aw :(
  227. [07:19:21] CammyCapre: Levator found them bizarre
  228. [07:19:55] T-snake: I mean it makes sense. You have the mental guildmaster, grumpy co-master, an explorer who is always gone, a Shelgon with a negative view on life but loves maps, Wilt who can't keep from being near death, and then we have Vayne and Erebrus
  229. [07:20:11] T-snake: Oh one more pointless, odd character
  230. [07:20:23] CammyCapre: oh true that makes sense
  231. [07:20:28] T-snake: Venonat
  232. [07:20:33] T-snake: Her name is Venonat
  233. [07:20:36] CammyCapre: "a shelgon with a negative view on life but loves maps" i love it
  234. [07:20:40] CammyCapre: >Venonat
  235. [07:20:40] T-snake: All she says is Venonat
  236. [07:20:43] CammyCapre: >Her name is Venonat
  237. [07:20:47] CammyCapre: lmao
  238. [07:20:49] CammyCapre: perfect
  239. [07:20:57] CammyCapre: i love her, fav character, 10/10
  240. [07:21:04] T-snake: Another golden Erebrus moment
  241. [07:21:18] T-snake: Voltier: *trying to describe the expedition*
  242. [07:21:26] T-snake: Erebrus: *mocking him in pig latin*
  243. [07:21:34] T-snake: Voltier: GO MOCK SOMEONE ELSE
  244. [07:21:39] T-snake: Venonat: Venonat
  245. [07:21:42] CammyCapre: haha lmfao
  246. [07:21:43] T-snake: Erebrus: ..
  247. [07:21:49] CammyCapre: "venonat"
  248. [07:21:51] T-snake: Venonat: Venonant
  249. [07:21:57] T-snake: Erebrus: VENONAT
  250. [07:22:31] T-snake: #Venonat
  251. [07:22:33] CammyCapre: life quote
  252. [07:22:39] T-snake: I miss this story sometimes lol
  253. [07:22:47] CammyCapre: well you're getting onto it now~
  254. [07:22:57] T-snake: Yeah I'm happy about that
  255. [07:23:06] T-snake: OH LAST THING FOR THE NIGHT
  256. [07:23:09] CammyCapre: lmao
  257. [07:23:13] CammyCapre: okay
  258. [07:23:20] T-snake: Maxerus' main lackeys
  259. [07:23:30] T-snake: Not his army of course, just the main Lackeys
  260. [07:24:09] T-snake: I forget the names, but the only recurring criticism was lack of character development of all the co-lackeys
  261. [07:24:30] T-snake: Should I cut down on the number of them? Or just work on them better when they do appear
  262. [07:24:39] T-snake: I mean some are more major than others
  263. [07:25:21] CammyCapre: you could cut down on the ones that you don't need
  264. [07:25:31] CammyCapre: so it makes developing them easier
  265. [07:26:00] T-snake: Pins and Bella (Cacturne hit-man and Gardevoir fem fatal) appear a couple imes through the story and cut scenes that tease Maxerus and give readers an omniscient feel. But others appear once or twice
  266. [07:26:10] T-snake: Here's an idea
  267. [07:26:47] T-snake: So the main five are Pins (Cacturne), Bella (Gardevoir), Magmortar, Manectric, and Zoroark
  268. [07:27:18] T-snake: Pins and Bella appear in both the cut scenes and in the main story to the heroes
  269. [07:27:39] T-snake: Manectric only appears in cut0scnes but once in battle
  270. [07:27:53] T-snake: As a formidable opponent clad in armor
  271. [07:28:05] T-snake: Magmortar appears...once...at all...
  272. [07:28:10] T-snake: (yeah I found who gets cut)
  273. [07:28:54] T-snake: And Zoroark appears in cut scenes, mostly towards the last third (taking over the town), in cut scenes near the end, and as a traumatizing pre-sky tower boss
  274. [07:29:03] T-snake: How about I cut Magmortar
  275. [07:29:08] T-snake: Give his role to Manectric
  276. [07:29:14] T-snake: And have Manectric appear more
  277. [07:29:41] T-snake: Develop on Bella's character more in cut scenes since she appears more there as well
  278. [07:29:51] T-snake: And let the battles and kidnappings chracterize Pins
  279. [07:30:02] T-snake: Annnnd let the Zoroark remain mysterious and scary
  280. [07:30:26] CammyCapre: perfect
  281. [07:30:30] CammyCapre: that all sounds great
  282. [07:30:50] T-snake: Pins: Attacks players when they search for elder, harasses in town, kid naps partner, attacks them in jail
  283. [07:31:32] T-snake: Bella: More cutscene ridden, has one arc of thievery that lasts two days, appears on expedition, also participates in the jail
  284. [07:31:50] T-snake: Wait Bella isn't in many cut scenes
  285. [07:32:18] CammyCapre: you could always add her into a few
  286. [07:32:23] T-snake: Manectric: Cut scene ridden, mostly stalks and reports back, appears as a boss during expedition, and major role in taking over and defending town til death
  287. [07:32:27] T-snake: Oh yes maybe
  288. [07:32:44] T-snake: But then I feel like I need to develop more on Pins
  289. [07:32:57] T-snake: Then again, I feel Pins already has a niche
  290. [07:33:03] T-snake: All of his encounters are mencainc
  291. [07:34:24] T-snake: First Pokemon to try to murder the heroes, first villain to just wander about in broad daylight and be a townie, kid naps partner/love interest to leave the hero helpless, and final assassination attempt in the jail until he is humorously killed by barreling Heatran destroying the jail/tunnels
  292. [07:34:52] CammyCapre: aw he actually dies
  293. [07:34:58] CammyCapre: wowsers
  294. [07:35:00] CammyCapre: he ded
  295. [07:35:10] T-snake: "But you'll never be as scary as a secret agent Sceptile riding on a Heatran with no regard for how much room he takes up"
  296. [07:35:29] CammyCapre: lmao
  297. [07:37:10] T-snake: Heatran is so clutch in the story
  298. [07:38:26] T-snake: But yeah so Maxerus' Army
  299. [07:38:27] CammyCapre: haha
  300. [07:38:32] T-snake: Leader: Maxerus
  301. [07:38:38] T-snake: Co-Leader: Bella
  302. [07:38:50] T-snake: Upper Lackeys: Pins and Zoro
  303. [07:39:06] T-snake: Slave: Manectric (at least that's how he is treated)
  304. [07:39:49] T-snake: Army: Many Crawdaunt, Houndoom, Manectric, Victreebell, and Scolipedes
  305. [07:40:04] T-snake: Crisis Army: Way too many Hydregion
  306. [07:40:26] CammyCapre: "way too many hydreigon"
  307. [07:40:51] T-snake: Well they appear in one of the last scenes
  308. [07:41:23] T-snake: Maxerus is advised after the hero's death that the town is captured and he should "give up"
  309. [07:41:43] T-snake: Maxerus: *speaks into Omeegan tech* *just a walkie talkie* Release them
  310. [07:42:15] T-snake: Crawdaunt: *releases the seal on the room with countless Hydregion that proceed to terrorize the town and come to his aid*
  311. [07:42:23] T-snake: (His aid being Maxerus')
  312. [07:42:37] T-snake: AND THEN Dracoris reveal, Rayquaza reveal, final battle, yada yada
  313. [07:43:22] CammyCapre: ah
  314. [07:43:24] CammyCapre: okay
  315. [07:43:43] CammyCapre: well anyway, im off to bed
  316. [07:43:45] CammyCapre: good night
  317. [07:43:50] T-snake: Goodnight and thank you so much!
  318. [07:44:01] CammyCapre: i'm happy to help! pm me anytime :)
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