Wonder Rabbit Girl Ch. 4 PR review - Squid

Wonder Rabbit Girl Ch. 4
/Keep the original punctuation pls

[5]
Original - Give it to us Raw for now
Changed - Give It to Us Raw for Now
/"It" and "Us" as pronouns should not be captalized, but good catch on "Now". Probably would have seen that myself if i had a script, SUWAKO

[7]
I want to be the one to make you feel good this time
This time, I want to be the one to make you feel good
/good. Looking at previous chapter, ideally it should be "This time, I wanted to make you feel good..."

[8]
I love that forcefulness as much as you though...
I love that/your forcefulness as much as I love you... (PR: I find that either "that" or "your" works. I prfer your since it's how I'd talk to a person, but your call)
/better as is, considering bubble size

[8]
It's like you've been dozing off for the last little while
It seems like you've been dozing off for a while now
/I like the second half, but would have kept the first the same

Now then... At last, the time has come
At last, the time has come
/acceptable to me, suwako may or may not like it

[9]
I've been oppressed by girls for 16 years by now...
By now, I've been abused by girls for 16 years
/good

Honestly, I never even fathomed a day like this would come
Honestly, I never even fathomed that a day like this would come
/acceptable either way

If she says something like "Ow!" or "God you suck at this!", I'd probably cry before losing my will.
If she says something like "Ow!" or "God, you suck at this!", I'd probably cry before losing my nerve.
/good

And, even though this looks like a standard-size, the diameter looks awfully wide...
Even though this condom looks standard-sized, its diameter looks awfully wide...
/would change "sized" to "size", otherwise good

I'm sure there's no way anybody would be filled with confidence in the beginning!
I'm sure nobody feels confident the first time they have sex.
/Doesn't convey the frantic/panicky mood, also misses out on the "filled" wordplay