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ethanmanji's Novice Review

Jul 23rd, 2015
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  1. Hey there! :3
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  3. Firstly, terrain.
  4. The terrain you have is basically all one level. I can see where you've used W/E to smooth that first area because all the layers line up. You need to raise the terrain a lot, so it's not so flat. As well, I like where you've mixed some other block types, but the majority of it is still all grass. You can combat this with the use of 'decoration'. To decorate a plot means to add things like grass/tall grass/flowers/wheat etc.
  5. Having the water area is nice, however it sinking into the ground like that looks a little messy. I would have it level, and I wouldn't have the pathway sinking into the ground either - you could make a bridge? That's an added structure!
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  7. Secondly, organics.
  8. I like the idea behind the tree growing from multiple areas into the middle (underground), however the way it's done needs a little help. The roots are a bit too extended, and way too 'curly'. As well, the multiple trunks you have leading to the tree look awkward, and having them all a different shape looks a bit messy. As well, the leaves are too 'pyramidy', and not bushy and big enough for the size of the trunks/roots you've built. I would suggest not going for a style like this, and instead making one big tree, or multiple trees leaning over the water.
  9. Look up Plutouthere on YouTube for amazing tree tutorials!
  10. Same has to be said for the trees on the top. The roots are far too long, and I get the theme, but the leaves are too tall, and it just looks awkward. Like I said, I get the theme, and I understand it's meant to be the dragons perch, however it just looks too forced in a way.
  11. I love the dragon, though. Has some good shaping to it! I would just like to see the belly of the dragon a little curvier, instead of square like it is now!
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  13. Lastly, structure.
  14. You have two structures, which is a nice amount for the size they are. The one on the ground is nice - has good detailing and a nice palette, but I would like to see an improved roof. Using all stairs/slabs for a roof isn't all that creative. I would suggest something like this: https://imgur.com/a/Lr9Ab#0
  15. The second structure you have is a bit too basic. I like the shape, however the palette is pretty simple, and the walls lack depth/detail. You could add some detailing with stairs/slabs, just not excessively. I also wouldn't have it floating in the air - I can see it's on a small island, and that island has risen from the ground beneath it, but there's no reason behind that, so it's all a little random. I would highly suggest building it on the ground.
  16. OR expanding on the island a little, bit making it fit more with the plot (Give it a reason to be floating! This reason could be that it's being held up by the dragon...)
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  18. Good luck!
  19. - Dutty :3
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