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- Darwin's Game Chapter 36 Proofed by Izu - Reviewed by meterion
- [m] - proof notes (ctrl-f for them)
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- [144]
- Ahh...! The water I finally prepared ran out...!
- Ah! The water I prepared finally ran out...!
- [right] What the hell do you mean by "Hunting Game"!
- [right] What the hell do you mean by "Hunting Game"?!
- This is just searching for water! Is this a Dowsing Game instead!?
- I'm just searching for water. Isn't this a Dowsing Game instead!?
- Fuck... Even the sun's setting...
- Fuck... The sun's setting.
- [145]
- I'm wasting batteries here,
- I'm just wasting batteries here,
- but let's see what the thermal nightvision has to say...
- but let's see what the thermal nightvision has to say.
- I highly doubt I'll be able to sneak in...!
- I highly doubt I'd be able to sneak in...!
- [146]
- There's someone there...!
- There's someone there!
- [m: these are valid punctuation, would not be changed.]
- And he's alone...!
- And he's alone!
- It's just us two... I can surprise attack him...
- It's just the two of us, I can attack him by surprise.
- [m: first ellipses was necessary, was a complete sentence that trailed off.]
- Should I kill him...?
- Should I kill him?
- And I'll die of thirst anyway, at this rate...
- Anyway, at this rate I'll die of thirst...
- [147]
- And, with a surprise attack like this...?
- And with a surprise attack like this...?
- [middle] But, I don't have any other choice...!
- [middle] But I don't have any other choice!
- [151]
- Answer me...!
- Answer me!
- Do you want to die...?
- Do you want to die!?
- Eeeek...!?
- Eeeek!
- [152]
- (PR: The above lines are actually said while he's crying, so try to slur it a bit)
- [m: PR lines are directed towards the proofreader. Don't ignore them]
- [154]
- For a mountain forest of this degree, there's obviously plenty of spring water to go around.
- [m: this was an awkward line, needed changing]
- So... so there's spring water around here!!?
- So... So there's spring water around here!!?
- I've only been thinking about the goods I couldn't get at the Supply Point,
- I've only been thinking about the goods that I couldn't get at the Supply Point,
- You... you saw!?
- You... You saw!?
- [155]
- Ha... hahahaha...!
- Ha... Hahahaha!
- I... Back then, my head totally blanked out and I swore I'd die...!
- I... My head totally blanked out and I thought I'd die back there!
- Y-yes, but...
- Y-Yes, but...
- [156]
- If you... fired that gun, you would've definitely been killed by Seigen.
- If you... Fired that gun, you would've definitely been killed by the Seigens.
- [m: no need to capitalize, the sentence is meant to continue after the ellipses. Seigen is also a name of a person rather than a group, but you didn't have the context to know that. However, when you don't know something, err on the side of caution.]
- Well, this isn't much, but eat.
- Well, this isn't much but, please eat.
- What's up with this guy? He's praising me for running away...?
- What's up with this guy? He's praising me for running away?
- What a weird guy...
- What a weird guy.
- [157]
- Who is this guy in the first place?
- Who is this guy anyway?
- His age... doesn't look much different from mine, but...
- His age doesn't look too different from mine but...
- But, his strength earlier wasn't ordinary.
- But his strength earlier wasn't ordinary.
- it felt like his movements were on par or even better than the Special Forces seen in the movies.
- It felt like his movements were on par or even better than the Special Forces seen in the movies.
- [m: awkward line, could have been edited better]
- Hey hey, there's no such thing.
- Hey, hey, there's no such thing.
- [158]
- Su-Sudou Kaname, you said!?
- D-Did you say Sudou Kaname!?
- [right most] There isn't any D-Game player in the Shibuya area who doesn't know who you are...
- [right most] There isn't any D-Game player in the Shibuya area that doesn't know who you are.
- [m: "player" is an person, not an object, so it is appropriate to use "who" rather than "that".]
- That said, are you legit the real deal...?
- That said, are you the real deal?
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