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- -Consider having Tamille walk up to her and ask about the kite festival during Deryn's cashier rush.
- "Funnel cakes" -- Consider replacing this with a common Villish fair food later.
- -Tilly picked three flowers, now there's six. (Chpt 8)
- -(Chpt 8): Perhaps describe some lanterneers among the customers.
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