2016-07-28 Pre TOEFL: more ind. samples

Greg Malivuk
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http://www.pastebin.com/u/gmalivuk - Notes from all my classes
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Homework: “translate” the level 1 response into a paragraph with correct grammar and better connections between the ideas

yes, the truth is the most important in a relationship because each person hope that the people that love talk with the true. The sentimental relationship need building on truth yet that withou this dead. The truth for bad or hard is better that thousand of lied that i feel better.
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Look at the other independent responses from https://www.ets.org/Media/Tests/TOEFL/pdf/ibt_writing_sample_responses.pdf
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Second level 2 response:
- A bit longer but still too short (only 3 paragraphs)
- Answers an “agree or disagree” question with “it depends” (don’t do this unless you are very confident in your writing ability)
- Only two examples, and the first one isn’t about the importance of the truth for a relationship (instead it’s about how you could lose a court trial if you lie)
- The second example is too informal, has spelling and grammar mistakes, and is one run-on sentence
“Now telling a partial truth you are trying to help the people without hurting them. For
example, when a friend asks us if she is fat, and she actually weighs 90 kilos, you won’t answer,
“Yes, you are as fat as a cow,” because you will hurt her feelings. So you just need to be subtle and
friendly, and respond that it is something that cannot be fixed, and you can probably
offer her help.”
- The conclusion talks about thinking of the right words to say something, which wasn’t part of the question or of the rest of the answer.
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Level 3 response 1
- clear answer (the person agrees with the statement)
- Three reasons stated in the thesis statement, three paragraphs to support those reasons
- However, the third reason in the thesis doesn’t match with the argument in the third body paragraph.
- The conclusion only refers to the third paragraph, which isn’t even the same reason as the intro.
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Level 5 response
- still makes mistakes
- doesn’t directly answer the question in the first paragraph
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Tomorrow and Monday we’ll talk about the integrated writing task.