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  1. Location names
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  4. Darill's Tomb B1
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  8. Town Dialogs
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  10. 9
  11. Spacing before <C> is superfluous.
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  13. 99
  14. Page 2 should be "out there, and King Edgar knows it".
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  16. 150
  17. Perhaps replace "Ack!" with "Aha!"
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  19. 155
  20. Perhaps replace "harm to our people" to "harm to its people", since the subject of the sentance is Figaro itself?
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  22. 182
  23. Replace "Saber mountain range" with "Saber Mountains".
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  25. 213
  26. "Imperial troops" instead of "The Imperial Troops".
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  28. 233
  29. "This ship" instead of "The ship"
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  31. 259
  32. "Saber Mountains" should be capitalized.
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  34. 289
  35. "our numbers are starting" instead of "our membership is starting"
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  37. 298
  38. Needs parenthesis around each of the two options.
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  40. 301
  41. Page 2 should be "our ideals", not "our ideas"
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  43. 385
  44. Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options
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  46. 397
  47. Should be *mumble* *mumble*
  48.  
  49. 428
  50. Perhaps it should read "I've been waiting for ages!"
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  52. 442
  53. Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options
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  55. 462
  56. Should read "...Is this... is this MY blood...?"
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  58. 473
  59. Should read "*Shriek* Help... HELP!!"
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  61. 478
  62. Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options
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  64. 509
  65. Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options
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  67. 522
  68. *pant* *wheeze*
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  70. 547
  71. Add ellipsis before initial solo exclamation point.
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  73. 705
  74. Put parenthesis around instructions on Page 3.
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  76. 763
  77. "Fingers are broken", not "were broken".
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  80. Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options
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  82. 768
  83. Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options
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  85. 769
  86. Probably better to read "a Potion" instead of "more Potion".
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  89. Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options
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  92. Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options
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  95. Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options
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  98. Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options
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  101. Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options
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  103. 821
  104. *rant* *rant*
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  106. 928
  107. "Armor" shouldn't be capitalized.
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  109. 940
  110. "Engine Room" shouldn't be capitalized.
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  112. 957
  113. *sob* *sniffle*
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  115. 978
  116. Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.  Instead of "Stop?", perhaps use "Maybe not."
  117.  
  118. 980
  119. Should be "Figaro Castle's engine room".
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  121. 1028
  122. "westernmost", not "western most".
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  124. 1066
  125. Should read "Didn't reset the clock"...
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  127. 1170
  128. "Abduct", not "steal".
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  131. Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.
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  134. Page 2's "As" should not be capitalized.
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  136. 1246
  137. "Aiya", not "Aya".
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  140. Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.
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  142. 1400
  143. *cough*
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  145. 1479
  146. "CARE" shouldn't be all-caps?
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  148. 1506
  149. *cough* *wheeze*
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  151. 1518
  152. Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.
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  154. 1521
  155. *cough*
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  157. 1525
  158. Midgardsormr, not MidgardSormr (no capital "S" in middle).
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  161. Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.
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  164. Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.
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  167. Midgardsormr, not MidgardSormr (no capital "S" in middle).
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  169. 1680
  170. "They were angry".
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  172. 1690
  173. Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.
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  175. 1697
  176. Should format "Got ?????" in the same way as the other items.
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  179. Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.
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  182. Kupo... ... ...po!
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  185. Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.
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  188. Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.
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  191. Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.
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  194. Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.
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  197. Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.
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  200. Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.
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  203. Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.
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  206. Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.
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  209. Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.
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  211. 1886
  212. Should be "Darill", not "Daryl".
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  214. 1933
  215. Should be "Old Man Strago" (capitalized)
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  217. 1938
  218. Same as 1933.
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  221. Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.
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  224. Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.
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  227. Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.
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  230. *cough* *wheeze*
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  233. *hack* *cough*
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  235. 2178
  236. *hackack*
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  238. 2179
  239. *cough* *wheeze*
  240.  
  241. 2182
  242. *wheeze* *pant* *cough*
  243.  
  244. 2185
  245. *chomp* *munch* *chew*
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  247. 2194
  248. ...and threw themselves (add ellipsis on Page 2)
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  251. Remove "the" from "the Serpent Trench".
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  254. *sob*
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  257. Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.
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  260. Add ellipsis at start of Page 2
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  263. Darill
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  266. Add ellipsis to last line.
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  268. 2454
  269. *hic*
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  272. Darill
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  274. 2463
  275. DARILL
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  277. 2465
  278. Darill
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  280. 2466
  281. Darill
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  283. 2468
  284. Darill
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  286. 2469
  287. Darill
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  289. 2470
  290. Darill
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  292. 2523
  293. Remove period from end of each option.
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  296. Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.
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  299. "alike to her", not "like to her".
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  302. Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.
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  305. Add parentesis to options and remove space before them.
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  308. Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.
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  311. *cough* *wheeze*
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  314. *cough* *hack*
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  317. *cough* *hack*
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  320. Capitalize beginning of each "For" in Page 2.
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  322. 2791
  323. Capitalize "Not then...".
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  325. 2817
  326. *sigh*
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  328. 2862
  329. *cough* *cough*
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  332. *munch* *munch* *munch*
  333. *muurp*... That was great.
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  335. 2879
  336. *munch* *munch* *munch*
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  339. *bluuurp!* (no capitalization)
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  342. Remove parenthesis and add space to left of options
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  344. 2946
  345. Add period at end of "Recovery spring".
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  347. 3047
  348. Darill
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  350.  
  351. Small captions
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  353. 000D
  354. Instead of "You're just my type! blush...", it should be something like "*blush*"
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  356. 0022
  357. "A Bit absorbs magic" could be rewritten as "Bits absorb magic!"
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  359. 0024
  360. Needs a <D> after the first window's text (Uwao, aooh! Gau your friend!)
  361.  
  362. 0034
  363. "Count down!" should be "Countdown!"
  364.  
  365. 0049
  366. "Power 100 times up!" could be "Power up 100x!"
  367.  
  368. 0054
  369. "My. Typhon is taciturn, [line break] but terribly powerful!" to "taciturn... [line break] ...but"
  370.  
  371. 005A
  372. "Effect" should be "Effects"
  373.  
  374. 0067
  375. "Count down!" should be "Countdown!"
  376.  
  377. 0087
  378. "Work load up 10 times!" could be "Workload up 10x!"
  379.  
  380. 008B
  381. Page 5 should read "...ponder what I should do..." since it's a continuation of Page 4's thought and not a new phrase.
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  384.  
  385. Big captions
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  387. 60
  388. Second sentence should read "You Cyan..."
  389.  
  390. 62
  391. Second sentence should read "Get more for me."
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  393. 86
  394. "Sabin" should have a colon after his name.
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  396. 129
  397. Should read "*whisper* *whisper*"
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  399. 131
  400. Does the word "DO" have to be all-caps?  It looks strange.
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  402. 161
  403. Beginning of second sentence "shiny, shiny!" should be capitalized.
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  405. 171
  406. Perhaps add an ellipsis before "that Mobliz!"
  407.  
  408. 189
  409. Should read "*whisper* *whisper*"
  410.  
  411. 190
  412. Beginning of sentence "where on thearth did you learn that?" should be capitilized
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  414. 231
  415. Should read "O gods", and not "o gods".
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  417. 248
  418. Ellipsis before "afraid of me", perhaps?
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  421.  
  422. Reg. Items:
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  424. 79
  425. "Teath Tarot" should be "Death Tarot"
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  427. 184
  428. Description should read "Casts Protect when HP is low".
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  430. 225
  431. Description should read "Guards against Back Attacks and Pincer Attacks".
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  433. 226
  434. "Preemptive Attacks" should be capitalized.
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  437.  
  438. Rare Items:
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  440. 16
  441. Should read "A stone unlike any ever seen."
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