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- Location names
- 58
- Darill's Tomb B1
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- Town Dialogs
- 9
- Spacing before <C> is superfluous.
- 99
- Page 2 should be "out there, and King Edgar knows it".
- 150
- Perhaps replace "Ack!" with "Aha!"
- 155
- Perhaps replace "harm to our people" to "harm to its people", since the subject of the sentance is Figaro itself?
- 182
- Replace "Saber mountain range" with "Saber Mountains".
- 213
- "Imperial troops" instead of "The Imperial Troops".
- 233
- "This ship" instead of "The ship"
- 259
- "Saber Mountains" should be capitalized.
- 289
- "our numbers are starting" instead of "our membership is starting"
- 298
- Needs parenthesis around each of the two options.
- 301
- Page 2 should be "our ideals", not "our ideas"
- 385
- Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options
- 397
- Should be *mumble* *mumble*
- 428
- Perhaps it should read "I've been waiting for ages!"
- 442
- Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options
- 462
- Should read "...Is this... is this MY blood...?"
- 473
- Should read "*Shriek* Help... HELP!!"
- 478
- Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options
- 509
- Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options
- 522
- *pant* *wheeze*
- 547
- Add ellipsis before initial solo exclamation point.
- 705
- Put parenthesis around instructions on Page 3.
- 763
- "Fingers are broken", not "were broken".
- 764
- Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options
- 768
- Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options
- 769
- Probably better to read "a Potion" instead of "more Potion".
- 770
- Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options
- 772
- Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options
- 774
- Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options
- 809
- Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options
- 811
- Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options
- 821
- *rant* *rant*
- 928
- "Armor" shouldn't be capitalized.
- 940
- "Engine Room" shouldn't be capitalized.
- 957
- *sob* *sniffle*
- 978
- Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options. Instead of "Stop?", perhaps use "Maybe not."
- 980
- Should be "Figaro Castle's engine room".
- 1028
- "westernmost", not "western most".
- 1066
- Should read "Didn't reset the clock"...
- 1170
- "Abduct", not "steal".
- 1204
- Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.
- 1207
- Page 2's "As" should not be capitalized.
- 1246
- "Aiya", not "Aya".
- 1318
- Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.
- 1400
- *cough*
- 1479
- "CARE" shouldn't be all-caps?
- 1506
- *cough* *wheeze*
- 1518
- Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.
- 1521
- *cough*
- 1525
- Midgardsormr, not MidgardSormr (no capital "S" in middle).
- 1531
- Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.
- 1532
- Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.
- 1534
- Midgardsormr, not MidgardSormr (no capital "S" in middle).
- 1680
- "They were angry".
- 1690
- Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.
- 1697
- Should format "Got ?????" in the same way as the other items.
- 1755
- Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.
- 1765
- Kupo... ... ...po!
- 1770
- Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.
- 1775
- Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.
- 1783
- Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.
- 1788
- Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.
- 1789
- Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.
- 1792
- Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.
- 1796
- Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.
- 1825
- Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.
- 1828
- Put options in paranthesis and remove space before them.
- 1886
- Should be "Darill", not "Daryl".
- 1933
- Should be "Old Man Strago" (capitalized)
- 1938
- Same as 1933.
- 2134
- Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.
- 2161
- Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.
- 2162
- Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.
- 2173
- *cough* *wheeze*
- 2174
- *hack* *cough*
- 2178
- *hackack*
- 2179
- *cough* *wheeze*
- 2182
- *wheeze* *pant* *cough*
- 2185
- *chomp* *munch* *chew*
- 2194
- ...and threw themselves (add ellipsis on Page 2)
- 2206
- Remove "the" from "the Serpent Trench".
- 2208
- *sob*
- 2247
- Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.
- 2415
- Add ellipsis at start of Page 2
- 2450
- Darill
- 2451
- Add ellipsis to last line.
- 2454
- *hic*
- 2460
- Darill
- 2463
- DARILL
- 2465
- Darill
- 2466
- Darill
- 2468
- Darill
- 2469
- Darill
- 2470
- Darill
- 2523
- Remove period from end of each option.
- 2536
- Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.
- 2565
- "alike to her", not "like to her".
- 2624
- Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.
- 2638, 2640 through 2648, 2650, 2651, and 2653
- Add parentesis to options and remove space before them.
- 2705
- Remove space before parenthesis surrounding options.
- 2712
- *cough* *wheeze*
- 2749
- *cough* *hack*
- 2751
- *cough* *hack*
- 2769
- Capitalize beginning of each "For" in Page 2.
- 2791
- Capitalize "Not then...".
- 2817
- *sigh*
- 2862
- *cough* *cough*
- 2878
- *munch* *munch* *munch*
- *muurp*... That was great.
- 2879
- *munch* *munch* *munch*
- 2885
- *bluuurp!* (no capitalization)
- 2943
- Remove parenthesis and add space to left of options
- 2946
- Add period at end of "Recovery spring".
- 3047
- Darill
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- Small captions
- 000D
- Instead of "You're just my type! blush...", it should be something like "*blush*"
- 0022
- "A Bit absorbs magic" could be rewritten as "Bits absorb magic!"
- 0024
- Needs a <D> after the first window's text (Uwao, aooh! Gau your friend!)
- 0034
- "Count down!" should be "Countdown!"
- 0049
- "Power 100 times up!" could be "Power up 100x!"
- 0054
- "My. Typhon is taciturn, [line break] but terribly powerful!" to "taciturn... [line break] ...but"
- 005A
- "Effect" should be "Effects"
- 0067
- "Count down!" should be "Countdown!"
- 0087
- "Work load up 10 times!" could be "Workload up 10x!"
- 008B
- Page 5 should read "...ponder what I should do..." since it's a continuation of Page 4's thought and not a new phrase.
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- Big captions
- 60
- Second sentence should read "You Cyan..."
- 62
- Second sentence should read "Get more for me."
- 86
- "Sabin" should have a colon after his name.
- 129
- Should read "*whisper* *whisper*"
- 131
- Does the word "DO" have to be all-caps? It looks strange.
- 161
- Beginning of second sentence "shiny, shiny!" should be capitalized.
- 171
- Perhaps add an ellipsis before "that Mobliz!"
- 189
- Should read "*whisper* *whisper*"
- 190
- Beginning of sentence "where on thearth did you learn that?" should be capitilized
- 231
- Should read "O gods", and not "o gods".
- 248
- Ellipsis before "afraid of me", perhaps?
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- Reg. Items:
- 79
- "Teath Tarot" should be "Death Tarot"
- 184
- Description should read "Casts Protect when HP is low".
- 225
- Description should read "Guards against Back Attacks and Pincer Attacks".
- 226
- "Preemptive Attacks" should be capitalized.
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- Rare Items:
- 16
- Should read "A stone unlike any ever seen."
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