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  1. This is too long. ;_;
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  3. Alopex is probably one of the other most changed characters in the group, to be frank. While change isn't a bad thing at all, this character hasn't been negatively affected by change at all! In fact, she deserves a lot of changes considering how long she has been a character in the group. While it is hard to remember each and every thing she has done (you deleting her original intro page doesn't help either), I will try my best to point out the things I do and do not like about her.
  4. First off, her powers are solid. While it isn't exactly seen in the main chat as often, I often forget that she has the second part of her powers. The power to hide her blood color has been an integral part of her development, seeing how she was first disguising her blood out of fear of being looked down, or worst case scenario, being culled. However, right now it is more or less a bonus now and I can't really imagine how else it would develop her as a character at her current state. The power to alter things around her however I think is rarely seen outside of private RPs. I would say to have a lot more fun with that part of the power seeing how she seems to be developing more into a trickster character more so than a deceiving one.
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  6. Speaking of deceiving, I actually miss that trait on Alopex a lot. More or less she would seem like the character that would simply use someone and then toss them away like they are nothing. She USED to run parties in order to deceive other trolls and to uphold her status, as shown in her original bio and the bio on the app itself. That trait I probably asked the most to bring back on Alopex because it would bring out a lot more fun with her powers as it is. However I feel that now that her blood color is revealed, this trait probably won't come back unless she manages to deny that she was a redblood and it was another ruse all together. Her powers would allow that to happen perhaps with ease if you manage to execute it right!
  7. Her personality varies.
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  9. First off, you keep the unfriendly part to other people solid as ever, and her being a loner character supports this all the time. Is it hard for her to make friends with characters? Yes, I would bet, and she says that she doesn't know how to treat people with respect. Once you get to know her however reveals quite a lot of things. Is she a bit of a bleeding heart? Yes, she kind of is. She pulls out a lot of things that would try to let others be sad for her quite a lot and she blames herself quite a lot! There are several factors that make this happen and this is the one that has bothered me the most about her: Nothing good ever happens to her and everything bad always seems to happen to her. She always seems to come into things with injuries, something bad happening already, or much more. I can't really recall anything good that has happened to her that doesn't get her into a new relationship or anything. The whole bad things happening to her raises a lot of sympathy for her, which by definition would make her much of a bleeding heart.
  10. I will not really go into the whole her being into the occult and all. Really, to me that seemed to have come out of nowhere for her but has worked for her well. That's honestly all confusing and a journal explaining all of that would help not only me but a lot others. It's not that it is a bad concept, it's just that I have no idea what is up with it and I am sure others feel the same about it. I would however take this time to not only explain that, but her ancestor as well. It would ALSO be nice to explain her lusus. Her lusus seemed to have gone out of the picture now that her disguise dropped.
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  12. So what exactly does hold back the character and what would be the best way for her to probably diminish some of the bad aspects with her? Well, to be honest I would say to interact with a lot more characters that doesn't get her any negative reputation. She could really get into the roleplay room free if she did keep up her ruse of being a blue blood. She feels like she's turning more and more into an apathetic character towards other people, which she shouldn't. If she has a fear of rejection, why would she fuel that fear by trying her best not to get friends outside of the ones she wants to deceive? There are many things she could do considering her character. She's supposed to be a swindler, so you should be backstabbing more people! She should be building a lot more relations with the trolls outside of the smaller RP group she is used to. She shouldn't be just limited to the roleplayers you are used to.
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  14. I would say that a lot of her traits need a comeback. As I've been constantly begging, you should bring back her parties. It's really the greatest way to not only get her to know trolls, new targets, ect. but it also gives you the chance to use her powers a lot more. If she throws parties in her hive that is supposed to be pretty bad, but the powers make it look lavish, I am sure there are some trolls that can poke some holes to the point that it will make her worry.
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  16. Summarizing...
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  18. - She is a well-rounded character in terms of development.
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  20. - You need to bring back a lot of her original aspects back into her character. This would include her being a swindler, and her being a socialite as well. Throw A LOT more things that people can get into and not just a certain amount of people.
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  22. - Mess around with her powers a lot more. It has a lot of untapped potential. Making her go back into being a highblood would be confusing to others because she can play it off that she has tricked everyone. You should make it hard for people to guess what's her "true" color, and I know you do that well.
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  24. - Balance out the good and the bad things happening to her. If there was a reason she is so untrustworthy and nervous around people, it is because you put her in an environment where everything will and can go wrong. Make her go into things she can benefit from. Of course, this does not mean let good things happen to her ALL the time, and don't let the best of things happen to her as well! Balance is the keyword.
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  26. - Please please PLEASE explain the occult stuff, her back story. A LOT. She has a lot of things that need to be explained at this part of her character. Her lusus is a GREAT starting point.
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  28. - This is mostly a you thing but: RP her in the chat more. Break free of being in a smaller RP group and broaden her relationships.
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  30. Alopex is probably one of my favorite characters in the group by far, but honestly she feels that she has gone through several remakes and going further and further away from her original backstory. I didn't admit this, but I will now: Please do not change her screen name. That would be the kicker of her being completely remade. I'm sure she can break her fear of being rejected and I am sure that should always be the thing that drives her. She shouldn't be doing things because she thinks it is her duty to protect others. She should be doing it in hopes people accept her.
  31. A smaller, but more serious note: She likes grapes.
  32. Where are the grapes?
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