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  1. 这段文章有一些语法错误和拼写问题,下面是详细的分析和修改建议:
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  3. "Now days" -> "Nowadays"
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  5. 这是一个常见的拼写错误,应该写成“Nowadays”表示“如今”或“现在”。
  6. "more and more college students use to mobile phone" -> "more and more college students use mobile phones"
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  8. “use to”是不正确的搭配,正确的表达应该是“use”。此外,"mobile phone" 应该用复数形式“mobile phones”。
  9. "we are have a surveied consequence as college student use to mobile phone" -> "we have surveyed the consequences of college students' use of mobile phones"
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  11. “are have”不符合语法,应该改为“have”。“surveied”是拼写错误,正确的应该是“surveyed”。同时,“consequence”应改为复数“consequences”,并且“college student”要改为“college students'”,表示所有大学生的使用情况。
  12. "Have 21% college students play games on mobile phone" -> "21% of college students play games on mobile phones"
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  14. 主语“Have”用错了,应该是“21% of”。此外,"mobile phone"应改为复数形式“mobile phones”。
  15. "They think play games could help themselves relax" -> "They think playing games could help them relax"
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  17. “play games”应该用动名词形式“playing”,且“help themselves relax”应改为“help them relax”,因为这里指的是他们自己。
  18. "anther have 33% college students glance over social video" -> "Another 33% of college students glance at social videos"
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  20. “anther”是拼写错误,应该改为“another”。同时,"glance over"应改为“glance at”,并且“social video”应改为复数形式“social videos”。
  21. "They are think that can relax too ,and also could help they konws besides school things." -> "They think that it can help them relax too, and also help them know things beyond school."
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  23. “They are think”应该改为“they think”。
  24. “can relax too”应该加上主语“it”,并且“help they konws”应该改为“help them know”,同时“konws”是拼写错误,应该是“know”。
  25. “besides school things”应改为“beyond school”,更自然的表达。
  26. "Some student learn knowledge on mobile phone have 18%" -> "18% of students learn knowledge on mobile phones"
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  28. “Some student”应该改为“some students”或“18% of students”。
  29. "learn knowledge on mobile phone"应该改为“learn knowledge on mobile phones”。
  30. "Besides,have 15% student listen to music with study." -> "Besides, 15% of students listen to music while studying."
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  32. “have”应改为“15% of”。“student”应改为“students”。“with study”应该改为“while studying”来表达“在学习时听音乐”。
  33. "they says music and mobile phone could improve them learning efficiency" -> "they say music and mobile phones could improve their learning efficiency"
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  35. “says”应改为“say”,因为主语是复数“they”。“them”应改为“their”,因为指的是他们的学习效率。
  36. "have 8% students go shopping on phone" -> "8% of students go shopping on their phones"
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  38. “have”应改为“8% of”,并且“on phone”应改为“on their phones”来表达“在手机上购物”。
  39. "and 15% students do elsethings" -> "and 15% of students do other things"
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  41. “do elsethings”是拼写错误,应该改为“do other things”。
  42. "In all,Use of mobile bring convenience to college student,We could encourage moer student use of mobile phone to study and amusement." -> "In all, the use of mobile phones brings convenience to college students. We could encourage more students to use mobile phones for studying and amusement."
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  44. “Use of mobile”应该改为“the use of mobile phones”。“bring”应改为“brings”。
  45. “college student”应改为“college students”,指的是学生群体。
  46. “moer”是拼写错误,应该是“more”。
  47. “use of mobile phone to study and amusement”应改为“use mobile phones for studying and amusement”,更加简洁流畅。
  48. 修改后的版本:
  49. Nowadays, more and more college students use mobile phones in their daily lives. To investigate this situation, we have surveyed the consequences of college students' use of mobile phones.
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  51. 21% of college students play games on mobile phones. They think playing games could help them relax. Another 33% of college students glance at social videos. They think this can help them relax too and also help them know things beyond school. 18% of students learn knowledge on mobile phones. Besides, 15% of students listen to music while studying. They say music and mobile phones could improve their learning efficiency. 8% of students go shopping on their phones, and 15% of students do other things.
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  53. In all, the use of mobile phones brings convenience to college students. We could encourage more students to use mobile phones for studying and amusement.
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  55. 这样修改后的文章语法更加准确,表达也更加清晰自然。
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