Trick Trouble School Festival json Review

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Manaka: Normally, even in the right conditions, it'd take a week...@[chara:300901:lipSynch_0][wait:1.0][chara:300901:eyeClose_0][chara:300901:cheek_0][chara:300901:face_mtn_ex_020.exp.json][chara:300901:motion_0][chara:300901:lipSynch_1]You didn't do anything strange, did you? --> move the line break to before "week"

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Manaka: As a result, even non-toxic mushrooms can@become toxic --> needs a period

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Can't load json
*Edit: Got the json to work! Here's more line break suggestions:
- Yukika: I believe it's because I have the type of constitution@that easily attracts troublesome matters...
- (Player Choice): Okay...let's change our@perspective! Maybe we can do it@without using an arch...!
- (Player Choice): I'm more of an eater than a@thinker... I'm getting hungry after@using my brain...


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(line break suggestion)
On the day of the event, let's take turns@supporting it.

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(just line break suggestions)
- "This year, we're going to have a buffet-style party where@people can bring their own skewers and put whatever@they'd like on them."
- "Sanitation, placement of skewers and grilling areas, and@making sure that no student misses out on the buffet...@It's different from previous years,@so we'll have more work to do...@but let's work together to get through this!"
- You seem to get along well with her, Yukika and@Asuka, so please assist her.
- Tsumugi: Will there be any traffic jams with this arrangement?@Do you think any students would miss out on eating?
- Asuka: Moving around suits me better than using my@head...!
- Tsumugi: But ruining only the skewers is a really roundabout@way of causing trouble...
- Yukika: I'm not even sure what their intentions are in@causing all this trouble...
- Yukika: Now that we're done here, let's get back to our@rounds.
- Asuka: Yes! Helping those in need is what the committee is@all about!

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Dialogue & visuals don't match. The script seems to be from an earlier node in the story (from 509923-23_ztalD to be exact).
*Edit: Script seems good now! One more line break suggestion:
I can't say that things went well, but we managed to get@through the preparation period for the school festival...!

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(line break suggestion)
Hey, what are you doing here?! It's long past@dismissal time!

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At the choice split, it doesn't seem like it can fit all the text in the 1st choice box, so I'm not sure what to suggest (other than moving the 1st line break to after "behind"). Maybe reword it? I can post an image of what it currently looks like in the review chat to help explain.
*Edit: Found out that it can fit three lines. New line break suggestion:
(Player Choice): I wonder why the person behind@the threatening letter isn't@able to enjoy it...

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Asuka: That was all she could do...I suppose we can interpret@it that way.

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(typo)
Ria: The magic reactions that showed up@sp many times cut off here. --> change "sp" to "so"

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I've just transferred to this school...because@my parents' move around for work... --> remove the apostrophe

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"A-ah...yeah! --> needs an end quote

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(line break suggestion)
Please work, "an opportunity to deal with the@seeds"...